Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

This tribute is so touching and heartfelt it almost brought a tear to my eyes. The reader can feel your emotion and love for your sister in your well chosen poetic words. I am sorry for your loss and glad for your new light. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023

Thank you, for the review and kind words. Means so much <3

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this tribute contest entry with us. The person who you described here must have been amazing. I enjoyed reading and know I would have enjoyed meeting this person. Good luck with the contest.

In the next moment, beautiful light and color fill the sky. (the following moment, it has to deal with the definition of the two words, next and following)

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023

Thanks you so much for your feedback!!:)

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That is a beautiful, loving tribute to a lady who shined through life and now shines in Heaven. I see this in non-fiction, I'm so sorry for your loss. But hold on to that light in the sky, she'll be with you always, until you are with her once more. Well done, a lovely tribute. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thank you so much, Sandra. Your words are touching and appreciated.<3

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 12-Feb-2023

You are most welcome. xxx

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This spiritual non-fiction speaks about moral standpoint of living a life God gifts; this has a good point of paying tributes to your little sister; well done, Never lose your time; write and post more; ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (DR) FEBRUARY 2023

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

I am so appreciative of your review and kind words- thank you!!

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

A fantastic tribute to your loving sister. As majestic, powerful and colorful are the fireworks illuminating our sky, your sister did the same for you.

Your words were powerful. What a great commemorative story and contest entry. I hope you win.
John

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

I?m touched by your words, John. Thank you so much for your review.

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Breathtaking! Masterful fireworks metaphor packs a spot-on punch. Magnificent tribute to your sister. I peg this poignant original as a hands-down winner.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thank you, so much! This is very dear to me, and your kind words mean the world. :)

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Very nice tribute. Well written.
"I was there for your rise, fall, and shine. So shine now; " - I didn't get this part. Wouldn't it have been - "rise, shine, and fall"? But how can it 'shine' now? Now that it has 'flamed out', so to speak? The analogy got a little murky.
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Hi! Thank you so much for your review, and taking the time to provide feedback. I hadn?t realized before, but now I can certainly see the need for clarity there.
The person who inspired this piece, died suddenly at 24 years old- after a long battle with addiction. The firework analogy is meant to describe her beautiful, chaotic, exciting, (dangerous, even) but unfortunately, short life. The sequence of rise(born), fall(die) and shine(live) was meant to put most importance behind her "shine" period of time. Like the firework, she lived beautifully but quickly fizzled out- the "shine now" is meant to represent her in the afterlife. Something I look for since her "light burnt out" so to speak. So, that?s where I hope she?ll "shine now" restored and without struggle.. or feeling she needs to depend on drugs to "ignite" her. I hope my ramblings provided some clarity lol thank you again:)

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

"A shot in the dark," "a flash in the pan," which is what I recall, perhaps wrongly, where fireworks are fired from. Anywhichway, memories come alive with the description you have written about darken skies made bright
some nights.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thank you kindly for your valued feedback!

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is a beautiful tribute to someone who was undoubtedly a very special person who you and many other loved deeply. It is unusual to see so a glowing tribute to a sister although I've heard there are no closer ties on earth than to one's sister. I wish you notes had told us more about her and how long she lived. But the poem alone speaks volumns.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so much for your feedback and interest <3
She passed in 2015- just 24 years old.

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

What a beautiful, truly heartfelt tribute!

Such a melancholic tale to resonate upon but your tribute is so uplifting and reminds us that our loved ones continue to show themselves to us long after they have departed Earth

I particularly liked this part,

"A sky that grieves with us. And yet, a spot of light in the infinite black emerges like a star peaking out from behind a dark cloud."

I am sure your sister would be honoured.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thank you SO much for your complimenting review and kind words