When Down...Remember
An uplifting poem for a friend17 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A heartfelt and meaningful poem to uplift and. On fort someone who is experiencing pressure and distress, and perhaps a sense of loneliness or not coping. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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A heartfelt and meaningful poem to uplift and. On fort someone who is experiencing pressure and distress, and perhaps a sense of loneliness or not coping. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
Loved this last two lines and imagery of the ocean in a drop. Also felt the six quatrains, aabb rhyme and rhythm theme fit the message of the poem well, it does sound like a song one might sing to encourage someone who is down...at least it appealed to me on that level. It has an uplifting lilt.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Loved this last two lines and imagery of the ocean in a drop. Also felt the six quatrains, aabb rhyme and rhythm theme fit the message of the poem well, it does sound like a song one might sing to encourage someone who is down...at least it appealed to me on that level. It has an uplifting lilt.
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Olivanne thank-you
Comment from papa55mike
I've read several entries and I'm beginning to like this contest. What a wonderfully written poem, and I love the rhyme and artwork. I wish I had a six for you.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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I've read several entries and I'm beginning to like this contest. What a wonderfully written poem, and I love the rhyme and artwork. I wish I had a six for you.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Mike, thank you, Have a splendid weekend.
Comment from mermaids
You have a strong steady beat in your words and a positive theme flows through your words. "You are part of this magic universe, You have many gifts that you need to disperse, are two great lines that are encouraging and speak to the reader. Your rhyming is smooth and has an almost musical feel and flow to it.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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You have a strong steady beat in your words and a positive theme flows through your words. "You are part of this magic universe, You have many gifts that you need to disperse, are two great lines that are encouraging and speak to the reader. Your rhyming is smooth and has an almost musical feel and flow to it.
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Regina Elliott
Dear Poet, alas, I'm out of
6 stars, so a celestial star
will come your way in the
wee hours. This is such a
moving and touching poem,
guaranteed to lift up the
spirit of your readers. You had
a short time to pen it, yet you
created a masterpiece.
God's blessings to you. ~
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Dear Poet, alas, I'm out of
6 stars, so a celestial star
will come your way in the
wee hours. This is such a
moving and touching poem,
guaranteed to lift up the
spirit of your readers. You had
a short time to pen it, yet you
created a masterpiece.
God's blessings to you. ~
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Regina, thank you.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is indeed a sweet and uplifting poem for your friend. It is tender, supportive and faithful when times are touch. Every line works well, with good rhyming, except for the last two. It is worth reworking those lines to make this piece shine.
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This is indeed a sweet and uplifting poem for your friend. It is tender, supportive and faithful when times are touch. Every line works well, with good rhyming, except for the last two. It is worth reworking those lines to make this piece shine.
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Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you but the last two encapsulates the whole poem, for me, the writer, who want to save a best friend, I do very much appreciate your opinion, and thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from royowen
What a beautiful wirk you've written here my friend. When there is someone special in our lives they need to know they are just that, even if you wrote the perfect sonnet, the essence of that sonnet is poured into that person, as you have done here, beautifully written in slightly varied meter with aabb rhyming and an articulate narrative, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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What a beautiful wirk you've written here my friend. When there is someone special in our lives they need to know they are just that, even if you wrote the perfect sonnet, the essence of that sonnet is poured into that person, as you have done here, beautifully written in slightly varied meter with aabb rhyming and an articulate narrative, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you very much dear sir! I hope you have a glorious weekend.
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You too.