A Matter of Teamwork
Plants and humans working together produce wonders.16 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
This is a good entry. Your character does tell the plants why they need to survive, and the reader can see him going to work to accomplish the goal in time.
notes:
I can say without a doubt that you are as clever as {me"}
-me."
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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This is a good entry. Your character does tell the plants why they need to survive, and the reader can see him going to work to accomplish the goal in time.
notes:
I can say without a doubt that you are as clever as {me"}
-me."
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much for the review of my contest and the area needing a bit of an edit. Glad you liked it and I hope you have a great day . Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Wendy G
I can understand the concern for keeping the plant alive for the sake of the grandparents. And I enjoyed the story and the thoughts expressed to the plant. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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I can understand the concern for keeping the plant alive for the sake of the grandparents. And I enjoyed the story and the thoughts expressed to the plant. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Wendy,
Thanks for taking time to review my story. Glad you enjoyed it. Looking after plants is a pretty responsible job ( as I found out in my younger days) You take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is it exactly, you water and feed, and it blooms and grows. Not a bad partnership, long may it reign. Well done and good luck in the contest!!
Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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That is it exactly, you water and feed, and it blooms and grows. Not a bad partnership, long may it reign. Well done and good luck in the contest!!
Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Sandra,
Thanks so much for reviewing my story. Glad you liked it. Yes a good partnership indeed. I occasionally talk to my plants. Perhaps they do understand. Have a great day.
Cheers
Barry .
Comment from Nina Sexton
Very cute. Good luck in the contest. It's amazing the I talent I see every day on these platforms. It makes me want to work harder, for sure! I hope to see more in the future.
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Very cute. Good luck in the contest. It's amazing the I talent I see every day on these platforms. It makes me want to work harder, for sure! I hope to see more in the future.
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Nina,
Thanks for the review and glad you liked it. I am sure you will do fine in your writing. The beauty of this site is that you can try stuff you have probably not heard of. All good for the experience.
Take care and have a lovely day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Paul Manton
A nice balance of thinking, explanation and dialogue. You might have extended the idea further by letting the plant have a 'voice' too - but it works well as it is.
Good development of the narrative, as we worry for Jeremy and the plant, not wishing either to become extinct! Great that Jeremy cares about his grandfather's hopes, enhanced by the additional memories recalled.
Now, obvious remorse is driving hi on to get it right - and a nice reflection that he is acting as his grandfather did in talking to the plant.
Also, you obviously know your elephant Ear plants!
Good luck with this in the competition.
Paul
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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A nice balance of thinking, explanation and dialogue. You might have extended the idea further by letting the plant have a 'voice' too - but it works well as it is.
Good development of the narrative, as we worry for Jeremy and the plant, not wishing either to become extinct! Great that Jeremy cares about his grandfather's hopes, enhanced by the additional memories recalled.
Now, obvious remorse is driving hi on to get it right - and a nice reflection that he is acting as his grandfather did in talking to the plant.
Also, you obviously know your elephant Ear plants!
Good luck with this in the competition.
Paul
Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Thanks Paul. Ha ha yes, I know elephant ears. Always had one in any garden I have created.Glad you enjoyed the tale. Maybe plants do listen.
Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
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Thanks, Barry.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Frankly, I foolishly thought that the plant might speak up for himself at the end, oh well, the photo matched. The conversation, though one-sided was endearing., I imagine we will see more from you. Keep writing.
Karen
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Frankly, I foolishly thought that the plant might speak up for himself at the end, oh well, the photo matched. The conversation, though one-sided was endearing., I imagine we will see more from you. Keep writing.
Karen
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Karen,
Thanks so much for the review. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, I was going to try to introduce some conversation from the plant at the end. However, decided that maybe a little bit unbelievable.
Hope you are finding fanstory an interesting place to post your writing. Keep going
Regards
Barry Penfold
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Yes, the hope was better than
trying for reality. I agree with you. Have a good week.