Guided by Faith
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Chapter 16 C"Can faith guide our path?
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Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the relationship nicely. I am looking forward to Emma's reaction when she finds out that Seth put her to bed. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the relationship nicely. I am looking forward to Emma's reaction when she finds out that Seth put her to bed. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for sharing this kind review.
Comment from Lisasview
Hi dearest Barbara,
I really need to go back and find the beginning of your continuous story... I really do not read stories but this one does seem interesting. I read poetry and submit some for contest. Did you see the recent fun contest... Oh yes, I believe you read my poem??? Not sure..
Nice to connect,
Lisa
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Hi dearest Barbara,
I really need to go back and find the beginning of your continuous story... I really do not read stories but this one does seem interesting. I read poetry and submit some for contest. Did you see the recent fun contest... Oh yes, I believe you read my poem??? Not sure..
Nice to connect,
Lisa
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for sharing this kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
I did not see any correctable issues. I finally found a moment to review stuck in the line at Taco Bell! Ha! Kids love the mango tea.
Great character growth. Seth seems like a good guy.
We shall see where this goes.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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I did not see any correctable issues. I finally found a moment to review stuck in the line at Taco Bell! Ha! Kids love the mango tea.
Great character growth. Seth seems like a good guy.
We shall see where this goes.
D
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for sharing this kind review.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is a great chapter with great dialogue and very good descriptive words. Seth sounds like a really good man and Emma seems to be loosening up too. A six star post in my eyes! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Barbara, This is a great chapter with great dialogue and very good descriptive words. Seth sounds like a really good man and Emma seems to be loosening up too. A six star post in my eyes! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for sharing this kind review.
Comment from Frank Malley
Chapter 16C is a closely observed evening in the home and the life of a couple. The wife is enduring the assaults of aging, and her partner is fastidiously caring for her, which she both argues about yet enjoys. This chapter is a very skilled capturing of a very ordinary evening in the life of a middle-aged couple. Its adeptness is perhaps slightly wasted on its ordinariness, which causes it to be fore skillful than interesting.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Chapter 16C is a closely observed evening in the home and the life of a couple. The wife is enduring the assaults of aging, and her partner is fastidiously caring for her, which she both argues about yet enjoys. This chapter is a very skilled capturing of a very ordinary evening in the life of a middle-aged couple. Its adeptness is perhaps slightly wasted on its ordinariness, which causes it to be fore skillful than interesting.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. They're a young couple who are still getting to know each other. Not married.
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Guess I missed that the couple was young! Be well, Barbara
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was a satisfying chapter, and they are slowly finding their way around everything. Seth is really doing everything he can to help he. I like him. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Hi Barbara, this was a satisfying chapter, and they are slowly finding their way around everything. Seth is really doing everything he can to help he. I like him. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
The main thing here in this chapter is that Seth has talked Emma into riding with him to and from work, so we see the opportunity for the romance to flower here. She seems to be slowly warming up to the idea of letting him in her life, giving up on her stubborn clinging to doing things for herself. I think the flow of the conversation is realistic and coherent, there are undercurrents of emotions there, overall pretty well orchestrated. estory
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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The main thing here in this chapter is that Seth has talked Emma into riding with him to and from work, so we see the opportunity for the romance to flower here. She seems to be slowly warming up to the idea of letting him in her life, giving up on her stubborn clinging to doing things for herself. I think the flow of the conversation is realistic and coherent, there are undercurrents of emotions there, overall pretty well orchestrated. estory
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This was like reading of a married couple having a bite to eat and curling up together on the couch to watch a baseball game. Then off to bed. Seth seems quite comfortable in this role, I hope Emma becomes more comfortable. She seems pretty hard-wired toward independence. As she said, "I don't do this well."
Good dialogue - gave this chapter a homey, comfortable feel.
A small bowl OF au gratin potatoes. (add "of")
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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This was like reading of a married couple having a bite to eat and curling up together on the couch to watch a baseball game. Then off to bed. Seth seems quite comfortable in this role, I hope Emma becomes more comfortable. She seems pretty hard-wired toward independence. As she said, "I don't do this well."
Good dialogue - gave this chapter a homey, comfortable feel.
A small bowl OF au gratin potatoes. (add "of")
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Those potatoes have cause me all sorts of problems and I still don't have that sentence correct. I fixed it - maybe. LOL
Comment from Sanku
Smooth continuation from the previous post .Seth 's expertise in the culinary world is quite endearing .Hope Emma would soon soften towards him So would he.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Smooth continuation from the previous post .Seth 's expertise in the culinary world is quite endearing .Hope Emma would soon soften towards him So would he.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Robbie Hift
In general, I like the interplay between the 2 main characters. The setting at home, the hinted description of her pain, the detailed explanation of the food all come across well to the reader.
Coming in at Chapter 16 of a book makes it difficult for a reviewer to be absolutely honest, because one doesn't have the full picture of what has transpired earlier in the book.
Seth's concern for Emma's like or dislike of broth and noodles comes across well. The mention of her help with his sunburn wasn't very clear.
Proofreading is vitally important to give the writer credibility. One needs to be 100% sure to eliminate careless spelling mistakes.
So, for example some thorough housework is needed on the story.
Re-look at sentences such as "You handled it better than I am." (Should be 'can' because this radically changes the meaning.)
I found this episode of the book interesting, and it added intrigue because I was curious to know what happened, in the story, on the following day. Well done, Mrs.Wilkey!
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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In general, I like the interplay between the 2 main characters. The setting at home, the hinted description of her pain, the detailed explanation of the food all come across well to the reader.
Coming in at Chapter 16 of a book makes it difficult for a reviewer to be absolutely honest, because one doesn't have the full picture of what has transpired earlier in the book.
Seth's concern for Emma's like or dislike of broth and noodles comes across well. The mention of her help with his sunburn wasn't very clear.
Proofreading is vitally important to give the writer credibility. One needs to be 100% sure to eliminate careless spelling mistakes.
So, for example some thorough housework is needed on the story.
Re-look at sentences such as "You handled it better than I am." (Should be 'can' because this radically changes the meaning.)
I found this episode of the book interesting, and it added intrigue because I was curious to know what happened, in the story, on the following day. Well done, Mrs.Wilkey!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. For three stars I would hope to get additional help with the chapter. I like the way the sentence reads that pointed out. Can doesn't fit into that sentence.