Guided by Faith
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Chapter 18 A"Can faith guide our path?
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Comment from estory
The scene where Seth braids Emma's hair seems to be a bit of a romantic moment, a moment where she melts a little. Otherwise, there's no real excitement or suspense building here. The previous chapter and all these hints about the tampering from the other party in the accident seem in the rear view mirror. I am wondering what's going to come of that. The accident issue looms over the story as it does for most people who go through them. estory
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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The scene where Seth braids Emma's hair seems to be a bit of a romantic moment, a moment where she melts a little. Otherwise, there's no real excitement or suspense building here. The previous chapter and all these hints about the tampering from the other party in the accident seem in the rear view mirror. I am wondering what's going to come of that. The accident issue looms over the story as it does for most people who go through them. estory
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is a very well written 1st part of chapter 18. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue as always. I wish I had six stars for all your writing, but I don't. I am thankful I had one this time! I hope you have a wonderful time with your granddaughters. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Barbara, This is a very well written 1st part of chapter 18. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue as always. I wish I had six stars for all your writing, but I don't. I am thankful I had one this time! I hope you have a wonderful time with your granddaughters. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Paragraph that begins, "Later that morning, Seth and Carl . . ." "How you are feeling?" switch to "How are you feeling?"
Seth and Emma both keep saying, "Thank you, but you didn't need to." Errr . . . I wish they would stop putting each other off and start accepting each other's help more freely. I think you should lock them in a room for a few days with nothing but each other until they come out fully accepting one another, lol!
Have a wonderful time with your granddaughters and don't worry about posting - we'll be here when you get back.
Pam
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Paragraph that begins, "Later that morning, Seth and Carl . . ." "How you are feeling?" switch to "How are you feeling?"
Seth and Emma both keep saying, "Thank you, but you didn't need to." Errr . . . I wish they would stop putting each other off and start accepting each other's help more freely. I think you should lock them in a room for a few days with nothing but each other until they come out fully accepting one another, lol!
Have a wonderful time with your granddaughters and don't worry about posting - we'll be here when you get back.
Pam
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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They will get together. I promise. I corrected the misplaced 'are'. I didn't have it at all, and then when I added it, I put it in the wrong place. GRRR I appreciate the help.
Comment from Sanku
the ice blue bedroom looks nice. Any hints of resentment pr doubts on the part of Emma or Seth seem to be gradually dissolving..Ace is a cute fellow and intelligent too.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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the ice blue bedroom looks nice. Any hints of resentment pr doubts on the part of Emma or Seth seem to be gradually dissolving..Ace is a cute fellow and intelligent too.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
The story is good as always. Your characters seemed to be in out doors alot but a person has to get into rooms. If I was on that force I would be bigger than a cow from eating so many sweets. Enjoy your moments with grandkids. Just stay safe.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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The story is good as always. Your characters seemed to be in out doors alot but a person has to get into rooms. If I was on that force I would be bigger than a cow from eating so many sweets. Enjoy your moments with grandkids. Just stay safe.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Have a wonderful trip!!
It seems that Seth has matched his match and he seems to be quite happy about it. Good that Ace is able to be messenger/delivery dog without eating the contents first!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Have a wonderful trip!!
It seems that Seth has matched his match and he seems to be quite happy about it. Good that Ace is able to be messenger/delivery dog without eating the contents first!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
This seems to be a bridge chapter. Not much happens, but it does re-enforce the main question of why Emma isn't being taken care of by her parents. It would be much easier to go to work with them, and as you've noted: Emma and Seth met 18 days ago. You may need a time jump. It will make things more realistic.
I thought you might need some help.
- I'm not harping, but you should really count how many you use this phrase.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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This seems to be a bridge chapter. Not much happens, but it does re-enforce the main question of why Emma isn't being taken care of by her parents. It would be much easier to go to work with them, and as you've noted: Emma and Seth met 18 days ago. You may need a time jump. It will make things more realistic.
I thought you might need some help.
- I'm not harping, but you should really count how many you use this phrase.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
A fine chapter as always. Their relationship is slowly progressing. Her father seems happy about it as well. Ace must be well trained indeed not to stop and gobble up his treat on the way ( and everything else too!) lol. Enjoy your time away.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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A fine chapter as always. Their relationship is slowly progressing. Her father seems happy about it as well. Ace must be well trained indeed not to stop and gobble up his treat on the way ( and everything else too!) lol. Enjoy your time away.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
It doesn't take long after they meet to be attracted and them form a delicate truce and then form their respective agreed treaty like agreement as to their respective lines in the sand, but one can see the barriers coming down over the course of relationship, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : You want to rent to her?!?
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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It doesn't take long after they meet to be attracted and them form a delicate truce and then form their respective agreed treaty like agreement as to their respective lines in the sand, but one can see the barriers coming down over the course of relationship, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : You want to rent to her?!?
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I'll check that area. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a very sweet chapter. No cross words or arguments between the two de facto lovers, just niceties. How come everyone knows it but them? Are you going to wait until the last chapter before they finally admit it? Gosh, I hope not. I can't wait that long! - Jim
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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This was a very sweet chapter. No cross words or arguments between the two de facto lovers, just niceties. How come everyone knows it but them? Are you going to wait until the last chapter before they finally admit it? Gosh, I hope not. I can't wait that long! - Jim
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.