Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Barbara,

Another excellent chapter. Seth and Emma make a great couple. I like the way Seth put Peggy in her place. The groups sound like a lot of fun. Well done!

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Peggy seems to be relentless in her pursuit of Seth, although Seth shakes her off masterfully and manages, with Emma's help to do so. And Seth is becoming more involved in Emma's life helping her with classes, a knowledgeable Jack of all trades, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

reply by royowen on 02-Oct-2023

A pleasure

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Peggy doesn't realize that she is pushing Emma and Seth closer together. The harder she tries, the more she makes herself unappealing.
Seith and Emma seem to have a lot of fun supporting each other in the activities at the church. It's nice that the barriers are coming down just a little bit for this couple.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Jim Wile

Excellent

This was a very good chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed the wholesomeness of this group of kids and their group leaders. Watch just about any show today, and kids this age are into all kinds of things they shouldn't be into, that it's nice for a change to see kids acting this way. They've got some great role models in Emma and Seth.

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No questions ask. - The second one was correct, but this should be "asked."

I have solution. - Should be "a solution."

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help. I knew both of them but read as if they were correct.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A fine post in terms of content, an enjoyable progression, and I am glad Emma was understanding re Seth being with Peggy, and not getting upset as she might have done, just a little while ago. A few suggestions, as below.
Wendy
Edits: A young man, Bart sitting to Seth's right asked, (another comma after 'Bart')
that traces it's origins (its)
I want you to know if you have a situation, you feel has gotten out of your control (I suggest removing the comma after 'situation')
No questions ask (asked)
I have solution. (I have a solution)

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the catches. I have made the corrections. I appreciate the help.

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

Peggy isn't going to give up you know. I think you might want to introduce someone who will chase Peggy.
A big strong guy who is not intimidated by her aggressiveness. Like a coach, or a real estate agent.
She really needs someone to see her good qualities that are hiding behind all that loneliness.
Karen

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Peggy will get what's coming to her, I promise. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 03-Oct-2023

U R Welcome Karen

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

Hi Barbara,
I really connected with this chapter. I guess it's because I teach teenagers. I loved the interactions between Seth and the kids. I liked the lists of things to do and fundraisers.

I liked the interactions between Seth and Emma, too.

Glad he brushed off Peggy the way he did!

Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

This is an interesting chapter. Will Peggy ever get it through her head that Seth isn't interested in her? I hate to think what potential trouble she might cause. I appreciate Emma's desire to help the teens. Given that she hasn't had much life experience yet and has been rather sheltered, I wonder how much help she could provide. As for Seth, he has a good point that giving the group his phone number would make him appear more accessible to the teen group. However, I wonder if it's a good idea for him to do that. What they call about might not be police business. Just the thoughts I had. A person with no professional qualifications could get in too deep trying to help someone else. Great chapter. It just brought up some questions. I remember hearing "He's Got the Whole World in His Hands" when it was really popular. I think it was Mahalia Jackson who sang the popular version. judi

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the kind review. Remember Emma has two degrees. One of them is social working.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This a good chapter. Peggy is an interesting character that just one give up on Seth even when he insults her and let her know he wants nothing to do with her. This is the first one of your storries where the character so very involved in church. It seems that Emma is good leader for a group of teenagers and she takes on a lot of responsibility.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Sankey

Exceptional

This was a lovely read. I love the witness and testimony within the story as well. I pray God uses your writing to help others to know Him as well.
Just one tiny area to look at. "I have (a) or (the)solution.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023

Thank you for the kind review. I have made the correction.