Walking On the Pier with Him
16 line free verse poem on love16 total reviews
Comment from Daylily
You have exhibited a talented use of imagery through the many comparisons present in your excellent love poem. I used to live by the Caribbean Sea and this posting has prompted many beautiful memories. I am so glad to have read it. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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You have exhibited a talented use of imagery through the many comparisons present in your excellent love poem. I used to live by the Caribbean Sea and this posting has prompted many beautiful memories. I am so glad to have read it. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your super review. I used to live near the Caribbean, too, as a missionary years ago.
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I was part of a military family stationed at Ramey Air Force Base in Puerto Rico. It is where I graduated high school long ago.
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That is very neat. I remember seeing that base from a distance.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Very emotive and moving, Crystie!
I especially love your final stanza as it describes my husband and me at this stage of our lives:
We may not run as quickly as the sandpipers
nor stay up all night under an amorous moon.
But our oceans are tied to each other's thunder,
and I still blush at the lightning in your eyes.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Very emotive and moving, Crystie!
I especially love your final stanza as it describes my husband and me at this stage of our lives:
We may not run as quickly as the sandpipers
nor stay up all night under an amorous moon.
But our oceans are tied to each other's thunder,
and I still blush at the lightning in your eyes.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you for a personal review!
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Beautiful images, Crystie!
diane
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your poem is heart-touching and nicely written. Your choice of words adds a lovely flow to the writing. I enjoyed reading this poetry. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Your poem is heart-touching and nicely written. Your choice of words adds a lovely flow to the writing. I enjoyed reading this poetry. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your compliment-filled review!
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! This is a super love poem. It's not sappy or lustful. It shows a deep love that is patient and willing to go at a different pace as life allows. I especially liked: "as if I were the island
you have spent decades mapping
and finally traveled to discover."
Hope this wins!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Wow! This is a super love poem. It's not sappy or lustful. It shows a deep love that is patient and willing to go at a different pace as life allows. I especially liked: "as if I were the island
you have spent decades mapping
and finally traveled to discover."
Hope this wins!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your super review. I always wonder how much more can be said with ocean imagery and the subject of love.
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You did a fabulous job with that ocean imagery! 💖
Comment from Lea Tonin1
What a beautiful poem, truly gorgeous. I absolutely adore your words choices and the cool way you put your sentences together.
By all the scriptive words that you use.
Great submission on the love poem part. And I think you've done everything required. And then some created, it's magic too. Great job hope you have the best of nights!
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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What a beautiful poem, truly gorgeous. I absolutely adore your words choices and the cool way you put your sentences together.
By all the scriptive words that you use.
Great submission on the love poem part. And I think you've done everything required. And then some created, it's magic too. Great job hope you have the best of nights!
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for such a nice review. Hope you are doing well.
Comment from Wendyanne
OMG this is such a beautiful, poetic and romantic poem! I love the imagery used throughout this wonderful poem. I think this might just be a winner. My favourite line is "Sunset warms our eyes, our speech, our thoughts,
softens the older, cracked wooden planks,
reminds us we are still as steady
as this long, strong pier."
Good luck!
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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OMG this is such a beautiful, poetic and romantic poem! I love the imagery used throughout this wonderful poem. I think this might just be a winner. My favourite line is "Sunset warms our eyes, our speech, our thoughts,
softens the older, cracked wooden planks,
reminds us we are still as steady
as this long, strong pier."
Good luck!
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. That just made my day.