Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Dark Spot"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
18 total reviews
Comment from Jim Wile
Oh, no, Lea. Out of the frying pan and into the fire for you. How unlucky for you (and your friend, of course) to have chosen a house to stay in with another loser male at the head of the household. If anyone deserved a break, it was you.
Although you've found some temporary friends in the homeless couple, you won't be able to stay with them for long. I shudder to think what you are thinking about people now. How do not become completely jaded after what you've experienced in life?
I loved your poem at the beginning. Just one tip on the meter--It was perfect except for this line: "Knowing now there'll be no retreat." If you changed it to, "Knowing now there's no retreat" it will match the meter of the rest.
This was another fine chapter in your continuing saga. - Jim
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Oh, no, Lea. Out of the frying pan and into the fire for you. How unlucky for you (and your friend, of course) to have chosen a house to stay in with another loser male at the head of the household. If anyone deserved a break, it was you.
Although you've found some temporary friends in the homeless couple, you won't be able to stay with them for long. I shudder to think what you are thinking about people now. How do not become completely jaded after what you've experienced in life?
I loved your poem at the beginning. Just one tip on the meter--It was perfect except for this line: "Knowing now there'll be no retreat." If you changed it to, "Knowing now there's no retreat" it will match the meter of the rest.
This was another fine chapter in your continuing saga. - Jim
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Hi Jim thank you for the suggestion I went ahead and changed it! I so appreciate you here jim you have no idea it's amazing to me! You're fine with you and amazing coments Keeps me standing and forging forward. Yourself and other amazing people have surprised me more than anything and I thank you for that. I hope you're day is awesome!
Comment from JSD
'rage road'. Brilliant!
Once again, out of fear and terror you find some humanity and some love, from the strangest and most unusual of places. Another lovely piece of writing. Love the poem too. x
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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'rage road'. Brilliant!
Once again, out of fear and terror you find some humanity and some love, from the strangest and most unusual of places. Another lovely piece of writing. Love the poem too. x
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Thank you John so glad you like it! I'm glad you like the style of writing and that you understand me and can appreciate what I'm saying. And your support is invaluable thank you again!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
They won't let me put any links on here, but if I could, I would tell you to check out Grace VanderWaal's song, on you tube called Darkness Keeps Chasing me. This is a good topic. any a reader will identify. She even says,my legs are tired from running. Wow, this is what you said too.
You definitely have to listen to it.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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They won't let me put any links on here, but if I could, I would tell you to check out Grace VanderWaal's song, on you tube called Darkness Keeps Chasing me. This is a good topic. any a reader will identify. She even says,my legs are tired from running. Wow, this is what you said too.
You definitely have to listen to it.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Oh, I'll have to watch that for sure. I've heard grace vandeerwal. Very talented. Thank you so much for reading. Thank you so much for your kind review and you're fine. Writing your thoughts. Comments are appreciated as well. Thank you so much for the suggestion too hope you have a great night!
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***I'm so glad you have discovered Grace. One of my most favorite is Highway
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You certainly had a disturbed life in your past. I'm glad you got through it all and are so settled now that you can even write it out. You do so convincingly, in a tight fashion. I hope that is catharatic for you. kay
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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You certainly had a disturbed life in your past. I'm glad you got through it all and are so settled now that you can even write it out. You do so convincingly, in a tight fashion. I hope that is catharatic for you. kay
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Drink u, k, thank you so much. Yes it is and it helps very much too. I'm glad that people get something from this work and I hope truly it helps somebody. I thank you for your kind review and your fine rating. Appreciate you reading too thank you so much have a great night!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
So you stayed with your friend for a while and then moved back home? And this was another time you left and joined the homeless people? Not sure as you were taken in by your friend's family but that must have been temporary. This really is a dangerous situation for you because you are so young and not everyone has your best interests at heart. But there are good people in this world who care without needing a reward, those who are generous of spirit and human nature can be sweet. Another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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So you stayed with your friend for a while and then moved back home? And this was another time you left and joined the homeless people? Not sure as you were taken in by your friend's family but that must have been temporary. This really is a dangerous situation for you because you are so young and not everyone has your best interests at heart. But there are good people in this world who care without needing a reward, those who are generous of spirit and human nature can be sweet. Another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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No I never went home again. Thank you DolIy appreciate your review and kind rating as always happy to hear. from you! In the last chapter of the book ghost, it describes me leaving my home. And going to my friend's house a chipmunk for about 4 weeks. You're gonna had to leave there because the man of the house is a drunk. Thank you so much again, Dolly for your interesting career kindness. Hope you have a good night!
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It seems all households have their troubles and you kept walking into it Lea x x x
Comment from Rachelle Allen
You've continued on with the exact degree of excellence that you left off with Book One. This was a fantastic chapter. What makes it all so appealing is that it's TRUE! And it falls under the heading of: No one's imagination is so good that they could make this stuff up!!
Great excitement, good sensory expressions throughout. You had us totally there with you.
xoxo
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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You've continued on with the exact degree of excellence that you left off with Book One. This was a fantastic chapter. What makes it all so appealing is that it's TRUE! And it falls under the heading of: No one's imagination is so good that they could make this stuff up!!
Great excitement, good sensory expressions throughout. You had us totally there with you.
xoxo
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Thank you again!!
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Always. For you, anything. xo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Now I'm worried about the risk these people might represent. Once again on the road to who knows where, you're still very vulnerable, especially with alcohol forced upon you. Your story vividly captures the threat from another source that drives you out of the house like a hunted animal and into potential danger again. Take care, Lea. Debbie x
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Now I'm worried about the risk these people might represent. Once again on the road to who knows where, you're still very vulnerable, especially with alcohol forced upon you. Your story vividly captures the threat from another source that drives you out of the house like a hunted animal and into potential danger again. Take care, Lea. Debbie x
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Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much again. You're fine and wonderful review and quality comments. And your awesome suggestions are always so important to me.
Yes, I made a lot of stupid mistakes. Because I didn't know how to be in the world I will get to that. Thank you again my friend!
Comment from Chuck Keller
Here we go again. Into the breach, out and away, temporarily safe.
It's like a well written roller coaster of words
You always make the journey through this tale with you both exhilarating and terrifying.
I'm glad to ride along until the final peace I hope you have reached at last.
Thanks again for your story.
I'm certain it will help many.
You may never know how many but I know they are there.
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Here we go again. Into the breach, out and away, temporarily safe.
It's like a well written roller coaster of words
You always make the journey through this tale with you both exhilarating and terrifying.
I'm glad to ride along until the final peace I hope you have reached at last.
Thanks again for your story.
I'm certain it will help many.
You may never know how many but I know they are there.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Thank you I really hope That it does that it's my wish people to understand and to know What it is and how easily we can be lost. I thank you for your complete and total understanding after being here with me!