Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Blur"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
18 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Imagine a cornered rat. They do ANYTHING to escape. An.Y.Thing. They'd attack a cat or a dog...or a human...if that were their only way out. That's what you're watching here with your mother. She is DESPERATE, so dangerous. But she's also impotent against the truth. An innocent person would never feel the need to go to such lengths.
So proud of you for not losing your resolve. xo
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Imagine a cornered rat. They do ANYTHING to escape. An.Y.Thing. They'd attack a cat or a dog...or a human...if that were their only way out. That's what you're watching here with your mother. She is DESPERATE, so dangerous. But she's also impotent against the truth. An innocent person would never feel the need to go to such lengths.
So proud of you for not losing your resolve. xo
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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My friend, you are the best. You always say the greatest things to keep me upright and forging ahead. It's not by myself that I write this. And I acknowledge that to you. Especially in everyone around me who has been so supportive. Without you I may have not continued thank you so much again you rock!
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Oh no you don't. This courage belongs COMPLETELY to you. I just think you and your talent and your story deserve to be heard. And, as you can see from the reviews you're receiving, YOU ARE BELIEVED. (And that's the biggest problem you're mother is having right now...not so much that you're writing this --though certainly that doesn't thrill her-- but that people who are reading it are standing strong behind you.)
Comment from Chuck Keller
This roller coaster is terrifying
No repeat of K but clearly on the wrong track to exit the ride
It takes great courage to run into the darkness alone.
As for your grandmother, she's a sad look into the past for many women.
A victim of abuse who continues the "tradition" because it's ALL she knows.
Your escape and discontinuation of that "tradition" is difficult but brave.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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This roller coaster is terrifying
No repeat of K but clearly on the wrong track to exit the ride
It takes great courage to run into the darkness alone.
As for your grandmother, she's a sad look into the past for many women.
A victim of abuse who continues the "tradition" because it's ALL she knows.
Your escape and discontinuation of that "tradition" is difficult but brave.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Absolutely right! I mean, it's generational. No one stops it just keeps repeating itself. And what do they say about doing the same thing over and over? Expecting different results that would be insanity. Chuck you're an amazing reviewer just so you know! Thank you. My fine friend always happy to see you had a good holiday and all is well!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You build up so much tension all the way through and the relief when you run is absolutely palpable! Everywhere you seem to be surrounded by wolves waiting to pounce. And even your friend hasn't got an ounce of empathy which leaves me in despair. Your final line is such a strong statement of that ghost inside you, that poor child who is so tragically alone. There are some small edits in the main body: "which woman (they) were going to have.."; she'll (loosen) up; "While R was cosying up beside me(,); "I stood up, scann(ing) the doors(') exact location. But more excellent writing, Lea. Stay strong and as focused as you can in the face of that woman's evil. She wouldn't be like this if you weren't as strong and formidable as you're proving to be. Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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You build up so much tension all the way through and the relief when you run is absolutely palpable! Everywhere you seem to be surrounded by wolves waiting to pounce. And even your friend hasn't got an ounce of empathy which leaves me in despair. Your final line is such a strong statement of that ghost inside you, that poor child who is so tragically alone. There are some small edits in the main body: "which woman (they) were going to have.."; she'll (loosen) up; "While R was cosying up beside me(,); "I stood up, scann(ing) the doors(') exact location. But more excellent writing, Lea. Stay strong and as focused as you can in the face of that woman's evil. She wouldn't be like this if you weren't as strong and formidable as you're proving to be. Love Debbie x
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I took a while. Everyone has their wine this far. No farther she was beyond a prostitute she was a pimp. And she tried to pimp me out. I don't know how many other girls she did this too. I do know that she is out of the business. And she's a postal lady she delivers the mail daily. Things change I guess say sometimes for the better. I appreciate your awesome review is always in your fine rating and your suggestions for edit isn't a program. I can use to check for punctuation? I keep trying to figure it out but I don't know. It isn't my strong suit unfortunately. Thank you again, my friend for all your good words. Your support and the fact that you can see right through me. L o l have a good night!
Comment from Jim Wile
Good for you for getting out of there. Now you're stuck in the dark not knowing where you are, but you'll figure it out. You avoided the worst.
Would it work to have your son call your sisters to corroborate your story, and maybe he will quit believing his grandmother? He seems to have been taken in by her lies. It still might be worthwhile getting away, but it's so sad he is being taken in by her. You know how hard it is not to be believed.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Good for you for getting out of there. Now you're stuck in the dark not knowing where you are, but you'll figure it out. You avoided the worst.
Would it work to have your son call your sisters to corroborate your story, and maybe he will quit believing his grandmother? He seems to have been taken in by her lies. It still might be worthwhile getting away, but it's so sad he is being taken in by her. You know how hard it is not to be believed.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I think what my son is doing right now is airing on the side of caution. I'm kind of fifty fifty I don't know right now but i'm just thinking that this book comes out and I don't have to say anything beyond that point. For now, he knows he can talk to me whenever he wishes. He has my love and so do my grandchildren. Thank you so much jim as usual as you give wonderful review! Your kindness as you do is great to me a superior and wonderful thing! Your time and you're fine rating it's also avaluable thank you So much!
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I can understand that. Just make sure that he reads it, though. You might not want to wait until all three volumes have been completed.
Comment from BethShelby
Lea, many people who have grow up in abusive household and finally excaped as you did become totally estranged from their family and never have contact with their mother again. The mother never sees her grandchildlren. You didn't choose to do that. You must have some feelings for her, since she is still able to hurt you. Running away from the friend in whole house you are staying, isn't working out very well. She is trying to turn you into a prostitute so in order for that not to happen it seems you'd need to come with another option for a roof over your head. How old are you at this point? I'm anxious to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Lea, many people who have grow up in abusive household and finally excaped as you did become totally estranged from their family and never have contact with their mother again. The mother never sees her grandchildlren. You didn't choose to do that. You must have some feelings for her, since she is still able to hurt you. Running away from the friend in whole house you are staying, isn't working out very well. She is trying to turn you into a prostitute so in order for that not to happen it seems you'd need to come with another option for a roof over your head. How old are you at this point? I'm anxious to see what happens next.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I was seventeen years old at the time. As I'm sure you've noticed this, you read along. My family didn't teach us anything valuable for the outside world. Just more like we were there slaves and didn't much care beyond that. So no lifeskills did we learn other than I worked hard my whole life cause I did it in the home too. Thank you Beth. I so appreciate you and your common. You have an interesting way of seeing things which brings you write Claire to the meat of the matter. Thank you again. Have a great evening!
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting presentation of these parts of your life story, very creatively done. What a lot you have suffered, and it sounds as if your mother's abuse was never-ending, leading to a number of regretted decisions, although probably initially they were to crowd out the pain. Well done.
Wendy
Edits: she'll loosten up. (loosen)
I stood up (and) scanned the doors (door's) exact location.
I heared (heard) R yelling.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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An interesting presentation of these parts of your life story, very creatively done. What a lot you have suffered, and it sounds as if your mother's abuse was never-ending, leading to a number of regretted decisions, although probably initially they were to crowd out the pain. Well done.
Wendy
Edits: she'll loosten up. (loosen)
I stood up (and) scanned the doors (door's) exact location.
I heared (heard) R yelling.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Wendy, thank you so very much for your edit suggestions. I really appreciate that my punctuation isn't my strong suit. I'm trying to find a program that will point out those kinds of errors to me. But I'm not sure which one I tried grammarily. But it won't translate to this sight for some reason. Thank you very much again for your kind review. By the way i'm so happy that you're here and reading along. For your fine rating too I am especially grateful having awesome night!
Comment from Jacob1395
This is another powerful, well told piece, Lea. I really want something horrible to happen to these men, who think they can easily exploit. Your emotions come through very well in your writing. This is an excellent chapter.
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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This is another powerful, well told piece, Lea. I really want something horrible to happen to these men, who think they can easily exploit. Your emotions come through very well in your writing. This is an excellent chapter.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you Jacob, I appreciate this very much. I'm happy that you're reading along with me. I understand some chapters are hard to reap given the nature of it, and so I especially appreciate it and your kind review and you're ready means much to me. Thank you so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, you are running again, away from another danger you have walked into Lea. This sounds like a vicious circle, but this time you know you have a choice. Your friend here is actually no friend at all as she has introduced you into the dangerous world of prostitution. You are having to grow up very fast Lea.
Regarding your present situation with your Mother. I think, by allowing ourselves to be hurt by someone, we in a way give permission for them to do it. Learning to be indifferent to someone who is hellbent on hurting you will dismiss them and they will no longer have any control over you. It is a lesson worth learning Lea.
Another fine chapter here, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Oh my goodness, you are running again, away from another danger you have walked into Lea. This sounds like a vicious circle, but this time you know you have a choice. Your friend here is actually no friend at all as she has introduced you into the dangerous world of prostitution. You are having to grow up very fast Lea.
Regarding your present situation with your Mother. I think, by allowing ourselves to be hurt by someone, we in a way give permission for them to do it. Learning to be indifferent to someone who is hellbent on hurting you will dismiss them and they will no longer have any control over you. It is a lesson worth learning Lea.
Another fine chapter here, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Yes, you're absolutely right about that. I usually come around to the right conclusions. But I have to go through the initial hurt. Sometimes it goes directly to anger. But you're right. I shouldn't maintain more a loose sort of attitude. But I'm on the outside looking in. Yes, I do have to separate myself from the family's bs This came to a ahead once before was gone for 5 years. It is the most peaceful five years of my life. Thank you Dolly so much. I appreciate you and all your thoughts are important to me. You have much wisdom to impart and you can relate to me in many ways. But I very much appreciate that I bought you and the kind review too I hope you have a great night!
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I lived a very different life away from my family for a number of years with no contact with them. When I eventually went back to see them, they had reduced in size so much and were so insignificant to me and everything seemed to be put into perspective from then on and they had no control over my life anymore. It was very different for my siblings who stayed under their control, love Dolly x
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Old woman I take my example from you!