Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Shoe"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from BethShelby
This sound better than sleeping under the stairs. I could like you're able to sleep most anywhere. Does this place come with meals if you get to stay? It sound like the man isn't so happy about it. The women seem kind.
I'm wondering who have you all these boxes about your life and why?
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This sound better than sleeping under the stairs. I could like you're able to sleep most anywhere. Does this place come with meals if you get to stay? It sound like the man isn't so happy about it. The women seem kind.
I'm wondering who have you all these boxes about your life and why?
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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At this point I hadn't worked out the details with the lady yet she had fed me and allowed me to rest. It's time for the next step. Thank you again always happy to see you. You know, really have some interesting questions. Answer cool things to say I appreciate that about you! Thank you again!
Comment from jim vecchio
There is no way I would fault you on the storyline as this is YOUR story. I hate to mention this, but there were a few areas where grammar needed a small bit of straightening. These may appear to be very minor, but are indicative of my own works which others have reviewed and given me hints for improvement. He looked at me with a slightly startled expression on his face then quickly replaced it with the narrowing of his black eyes. (comma after face), Her husband flapping his hands in the air (husband was flapping?)
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat. (Needs comma after Mrs. D) Also, the title "African Queen" should be in italics.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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There is no way I would fault you on the storyline as this is YOUR story. I hate to mention this, but there were a few areas where grammar needed a small bit of straightening. These may appear to be very minor, but are indicative of my own works which others have reviewed and given me hints for improvement. He looked at me with a slightly startled expression on his face then quickly replaced it with the narrowing of his black eyes. (comma after face), Her husband flapping his hands in the air (husband was flapping?)
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat. (Needs comma after Mrs. D) Also, the title "African Queen" should be in italics.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Jim yeah, punctuation isn't my strong suit, so my book will soon go for editand we'll clean app all of these fun things and I appreciate you pointing them out to me because they are like gold and they can only improve things. Thank you for your kind review for your time it is top notch to me!
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One of the FS readers has started to teach me about one of my weakest points, which is meter. We all can learn from this site!
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Thank you!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh dear, just when you think you might have found some stability, it feels like it might just as quickly dissipate again. You're exhausted but always vigilant, expecting the worst. You take the reader into that warm, inviting setting and for a moment we find some relief too, however temporary. Thanks for sharing, Lea. Stay strong. Debbie x
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Oh dear, just when you think you might have found some stability, it feels like it might just as quickly dissipate again. You're exhausted but always vigilant, expecting the worst. You take the reader into that warm, inviting setting and for a moment we find some relief too, however temporary. Thanks for sharing, Lea. Stay strong. Debbie x
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hi Debbie, thank you for your support is always very important to me. I always appreciate your reviews too. And happy to see your name. Come up thank you again I hope you have an awesome day!