Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Hah! Good one!
Well written.
Welcome to FanStory. I've been considering myself a Newbie, but after seeing so many others with announced first posts and such I looked and saw that I was not (3 years and 300+ posts - Wow! I'm surprised)
Your surprise ending is great.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hi Navada, Welcome, and it's nice to meet you. I enjoyed reading your story, and I found it very relatable, especially:

It means I'm often up late at night

(I'm in that club too. One of the best things about FS, is that the "light" is always on. There is always someone here waiting to read your work and engage in a lively review.)

A fun and relatable story. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thank you so much! Yes, since joining up, I find myself up at all hours and engaging with other's fabulous writing, and really enjoying the process of writing myself after a long gap. :)

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I didn't expect the ending. How clever. The font is suitable for the subject matter.
Do prisoners in Australia do physical labor during the day? That confused me. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks for your review! Although I'm Australian, this story wasn't set in any particular place. I don't think Australian prisoners break rocks or perform similar tasks, but I believe they do in some other cultures. Anyway, it worked as a device for the story.

Comment from Kerry Foley

Excellent

Hello there, my friend . I love your hundred word story.
They do say that creative people's minds are more active at night. I believe it to be true. Many nights I'm up reading or writing.
"Cell mate" that was funny a piece of humor always goes a long way.
It is a wonderful site, I remember when I joined I was on here day and night . Trying to get back to that for the new year.

Happy new year to you!

-Kerry

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks so much, Kerry! I'm spending a lot of time on here of late. It's quite addictive! :)

reply by Kerry Foley on 04-Jan-2024

It is. Just as I was going to post I had a dear friend pass away. It threw me out of sync. I need to regroup, and collect my thoughts.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

This is an excellent entry to the newbie flash fiction contest.
Good story contexts and a prime twist for its conclusion. All Pareto flash fiction captured.

Best of luck in the challenge,
John

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks so much, John! :)

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Lol I like the ending - humorous twist. Very nice entry that engages the reader right from the start. You're a great poet and now you're making your mark in the land of prose!

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Lol. Excellent. What a fabulous flash-fiction with a fine twist at the end, and very smoothly and concisely written. Deserves to win, (even though I haven't read any other entries yet). Great image to support your words. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thank you so much, Wendy! :)

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Well you appear to have hit the word count which is always nice. These pieces can be tricky to write given to limited rd count but this flows well and doesn't feel rushed or chopped.

Best of luck to you
GMG

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thank you - it is indeed a challenge and I often find myself writing, re-writing and condensing. I appreciate the feedback that it doesn't feel chopped. :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. That's funny that you made it sound biographical but at the end, we realize that your narrator is in a cell so is probably not in Australia after all. I wonder if there are members here that could be in prison. Hmm. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Yes - once I wrote this, it actually opened a can of worms for me mentally. I had to decide just evil he should be! :)

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Nice story and for a moment you got me with the cellmate routine:) Welcome to the fanstory world and good luck with the contest and with your writings.

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 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thank you so much! :)