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Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "The Peace"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from Jim Wile
This was a fun and gratifying chapter to read, Lea--at least the recollection part. The first part, where you describe your feelings about hearing your mother's voice confirming everything you always thought, was horrible, but the year you spent with P and his family gave not only you, but your readers a brief respite from the horror of your life.
I'm so glad you at least had that one good year to help restore your faith in mankind and to help teach you some of the skills you may have been lacking.
Your last sentence gives us a sense of foreboding, though, as it sounds like the guy you met may not have been great for you. If that's so, at least something good came out of it--your son. I'm anxious to see how this develops. - Jim
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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This was a fun and gratifying chapter to read, Lea--at least the recollection part. The first part, where you describe your feelings about hearing your mother's voice confirming everything you always thought, was horrible, but the year you spent with P and his family gave not only you, but your readers a brief respite from the horror of your life.
I'm so glad you at least had that one good year to help restore your faith in mankind and to help teach you some of the skills you may have been lacking.
Your last sentence gives us a sense of foreboding, though, as it sounds like the guy you met may not have been great for you. If that's so, at least something good came out of it--your son. I'm anxious to see how this develops. - Jim
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Thank you feeding Jim for your very kind review appreciate it so much further to my message now that I am grateful humble and honored!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I wouldn't beat yourself up about not doing things sooner to address issues from your childhood. It often takes time and a lot of growing-up to get everything in perspective and, of course, to grow in confidence. What you're doing now is right but you still can't afford to invest too much emotion into the court process because this could end up compounding your heartbreak. The book is your default and will hopefully stand you in good stead. Whatever the case, your story will be out in the open and this journey will be immensely cathartic for you. It's wonderful reading about the simple pleasures you have in this happy home and your opportunity to laugh and feel at ease for the first time. It's a transitional stage that is essential to restore you back to health both mentally and physically.
There are some small edits along the way: Intro - (T)ime to go on again..; main story - I decided not (to) stop to analyze...but simply (enjoy); when my sides (hurt) so much..; P kept calling him (I)tchy; that was the limit of their (transgressions?); spread out a blanket and (watch); Once in (a while); what it was (to) feel safe; (M)ost of all I learned..; Remembering those times... (take a look at this final para, Lea)
Hope this helps a bit. I enjoyed the read. As ever, your very vivid and honest prose skilfully captures this stage in your life. Take care. Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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I wouldn't beat yourself up about not doing things sooner to address issues from your childhood. It often takes time and a lot of growing-up to get everything in perspective and, of course, to grow in confidence. What you're doing now is right but you still can't afford to invest too much emotion into the court process because this could end up compounding your heartbreak. The book is your default and will hopefully stand you in good stead. Whatever the case, your story will be out in the open and this journey will be immensely cathartic for you. It's wonderful reading about the simple pleasures you have in this happy home and your opportunity to laugh and feel at ease for the first time. It's a transitional stage that is essential to restore you back to health both mentally and physically.
There are some small edits along the way: Intro - (T)ime to go on again..; main story - I decided not (to) stop to analyze...but simply (enjoy); when my sides (hurt) so much..; P kept calling him (I)tchy; that was the limit of their (transgressions?); spread out a blanket and (watch); Once in (a while); what it was (to) feel safe; (M)ost of all I learned..; Remembering those times... (take a look at this final para, Lea)
Hope this helps a bit. I enjoyed the read. As ever, your very vivid and honest prose skilfully captures this stage in your life. Take care. Love Debbie x
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you Debbie again yeah here are a couple of edits to be done for sure I'm going to go ahead and make those corrections thank you so much for your comments they're always so on the money and heartfelt I can see that and feel that in your writing a true and honest friendship for which I thank you very much! May all your days be grand!
Comment from BethShelby
It is aways a relief to see you in a natural situation where everyone acts like people are supposed to act. I glad you were able to be there for a while and start to know what a normal family life was like.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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It is aways a relief to see you in a natural situation where everyone acts like people are supposed to act. I glad you were able to be there for a while and start to know what a normal family life was like.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you Beth for those kind comments! Did you give me the only taste of what a real family should be. that year remains with me and gave me a basis for comparison and an idea about love. Thank you again my friend I'm glad you are here I'm glad that you are reading and I thank you so very much for that I hope your day is the best!
Comment from royowen
Ah the wheel of life, we all experience it, but in different ways depending on our environment, my early home life was in a house where my parent argued incessantly, one could say it was fractured, so I got an insight into normalcy in my friend's homes, coming home late, now you know Lea, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Ah the wheel of life, we all experience it, but in different ways depending on our environment, my early home life was in a house where my parent argued incessantly, one could say it was fractured, so I got an insight into normalcy in my friend's homes, coming home late, now you know Lea, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Hi Roy sorry it took so long to get back to you I've been away in the mountains thank you so much for your kind review and all the wonderful things you have said and for your fine ratings to I hope you have it rockin day Roy!
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Well done Lea
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It seems things were going very well for you at this time. That's good. I can't wait to read more.
But she's still in the stage of not knowing and we must help her along. (comma after knowing)
"look out!" and "he's behind you!" (Look & He's)
"ITCHY!!" He yelled. (he)
"P started howling! Laughing his face off. (don't need beginning quotation marks)
"Works everytime," P chuckled. (every time. Period after time)
With my new friends,we went camping (space after comma)
most of all I learned that life (Most)
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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It seems things were going very well for you at this time. That's good. I can't wait to read more.
But she's still in the stage of not knowing and we must help her along. (comma after knowing)
"look out!" and "he's behind you!" (Look & He's)
"ITCHY!!" He yelled. (he)
"P started howling! Laughing his face off. (don't need beginning quotation marks)
"Works everytime," P chuckled. (every time. Period after time)
With my new friends,we went camping (space after comma)
most of all I learned that life (Most)
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Hi Barbara thank you so much for your kind review as always I appreciate your edit suggestions you're a very helpful I look forward to them very much! Sorry I took so long and responding I've been away in the mountains and there's few areas where cell reception can be had thank you again I hope your day is great!