Guided by Faith
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Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. I never saw this coming in your story. But do we ever expect things to go perfectly in life? Emma has so much on her plate and has shown signs of maturing.
I have no clue where this is headed, though I know the writer does and I look forward to it.
Good post, I saw no errors.
John
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Wow. I never saw this coming in your story. But do we ever expect things to go perfectly in life? Emma has so much on her plate and has shown signs of maturing.
I have no clue where this is headed, though I know the writer does and I look forward to it.
Good post, I saw no errors.
John
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. Emma will struggle with this.
Comment from lyenochka
My goodness! I guess this chapter is to give us a stern warning to make sure we have our regular doctor visits and take care of our heart because one never knows. I like that Keith was at peace at the timing and could give that kind of reassuring goodbye, knowing it was his time.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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My goodness! I guess this chapter is to give us a stern warning to make sure we have our regular doctor visits and take care of our heart because one never knows. I like that Keith was at peace at the timing and could give that kind of reassuring goodbye, knowing it was his time.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
this was a very in depth story. I felt like I was right there watching the whole thing unfold. I would imagine that it would be hard to work in a restaurant and keep a handle on your health. It's unfortunate that Keith had to die, on top of all the other issues that have happened to Emma in a short period of time. I suppose she's going to be feeling pretty vulnerable.
Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Hello Barbara,
this was a very in depth story. I felt like I was right there watching the whole thing unfold. I would imagine that it would be hard to work in a restaurant and keep a handle on your health. It's unfortunate that Keith had to die, on top of all the other issues that have happened to Emma in a short period of time. I suppose she's going to be feeling pretty vulnerable.
Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Emma will struggle with the death of her dad. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
How sad. I did not get the chance to say goodbye to either my father or my mother, my sister or for that matter my oldest daughter. These are the four people I have lost that meant so much to me. I have lost favored aunts and cousins as well, having had no chance to say goodbye to either. I realize now that in its own way that was a blessing. I doubt I would have been able to handle the goodbyes.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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How sad. I did not get the chance to say goodbye to either my father or my mother, my sister or for that matter my oldest daughter. These are the four people I have lost that meant so much to me. I have lost favored aunts and cousins as well, having had no chance to say goodbye to either. I realize now that in its own way that was a blessing. I doubt I would have been able to handle the goodbyes.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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It's hard to handle goodbyes. I didn't get to say goodby to my dad, but when Michael died, my son, I did. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jacob1395
I really felt for Emma in this chapter, and I'm really clinging onto hope that her father will make a recovery, but I'm not sure if that's going to happen. Another excellent write Barbara. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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I really felt for Emma in this chapter, and I'm really clinging onto hope that her father will make a recovery, but I'm not sure if that's going to happen. Another excellent write Barbara. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Her dad died at the end of the post. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It used to be that most all men never went to the doctor, me included. We just sort of wait until something bad happens, and many times it's too late. Keith knew what was coming. Well, if he didn't, Barbara did. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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It used to be that most all men never went to the doctor, me included. We just sort of wait until something bad happens, and many times it's too late. Keith knew what was coming. Well, if he didn't, Barbara did. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
This chapter is one of your best. The dialogue is pitch perfect and so is the emotional intensity of your writing. You either have first hand experience of this kind of situation or else have done your research extremely well. Absolutely authentic. Six stars without question.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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This chapter is one of your best. The dialogue is pitch perfect and so is the emotional intensity of your writing. You either have first hand experience of this kind of situation or else have done your research extremely well. Absolutely authentic. Six stars without question.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sanku
Oh! this was an unexpected turning point.So sad.But keith ,a strong man was ready to go and he managed to say everything he wanted to say. Hope Emma and her mother would be strong toface life without him...
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Oh! this was an unexpected turning point.So sad.But keith ,a strong man was ready to go and he managed to say everything he wanted to say. Hope Emma and her mother would be strong toface life without him...
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Emma will struggle with the death of her dad. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
I finally got done, reading this long, sad, detailed chapter. Thanks for keeping us in there. I look forward to more, real soon. I wish ou well with any awards this brings.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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I finally got done, reading this long, sad, detailed chapter. Thanks for keeping us in there. I look forward to more, real soon. I wish ou well with any awards this brings.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Good writing and editing. Everyone is in keeping with how the story has them. Very nice, very good people. Just a suggestion: But do you really need the Ronnie character? How many stalkers can one small town girl have? And a completely clueless one; without enough backstory and motivation to justify his unreasonable and illogical actions.
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"He hasn't had any sleep in probably thirty-six hours.{" "}He knows Pastor Pat's with her. I can promise you he's not far. When he returns, he won't be happy to see you. If I were you, I'd leave."
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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Good writing and editing. Everyone is in keeping with how the story has them. Very nice, very good people. Just a suggestion: But do you really need the Ronnie character? How many stalkers can one small town girl have? And a completely clueless one; without enough backstory and motivation to justify his unreasonable and illogical actions.
notes:
"He hasn't had any sleep in probably thirty-six hours.{" "}He knows Pastor Pat's with her. I can promise you he's not far. When he returns, he won't be happy to see you. If I were you, I'd leave."
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you for finding that error. I have corrected it and appreciate the help. There was a serial killer who followed Emma from college. Calhoun dated Emma in high school and did get what he wanted. His back story has been told, I guess you forgot it.
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I didn't forget, but they barely dated, years ago. I mean, I would add more depth into his obsession with wanting to get into Emma. Men get rejected by women so often, starting in high school and over their single years. Why Emma? What is it that makes him want her so bad, even knowing she is dating the Chief of Police, and doesn't want him. He just pops up. Does he have a life? A job. A home? Is he a virgin too? Has he ever been rejected by a woman? Is he mentally ill? Did something happen to him that made him this way? Did Emma do something to blow his mind? Are there other women in this town? Is she angel beautiful? We don't know why, is what I'm saying.
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He works for a law firm and comes back after college. His parents are divorced, and he lives with his mom. Emma rejected him and there was a bet he could get her in bed. He lost. All of this came out before.
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So, a guy working for a law firm is sexually stalking the girlfriend of the chief of police because he lost a bet of getting her in bed years ago in High school. I'm not saying, you can't do this, but how does that sound from a narrative POV as a writer?
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Plus, in this small town. Everyone knows Emma shot and killed a serial killer a week ago.
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very true, she's vulnerable maybe somebody like Calhaun could take advantage of this situation.
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GREAT!!! He won't be working for this law firm much longer. Nobody said he was smart. Just because he has a degree doesn't mean he's smart.