Guided by Faith
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Comment from estory
Seth and Emma appear to be slowly settling into their relationship. He is there for her, mourning her father, he is there for her when she faints, and she seems to be finally accepting this role for him. She only makes a couple of those 'you're bossy' half hearted comments. I think you can edit out some of the small talk about what they are eating and wearing and things like that. Keep it focused on what really matters; how she is dealing with the loss of her father and how Seth is suppoting her when she needs the support. estory
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Seth and Emma appear to be slowly settling into their relationship. He is there for her, mourning her father, he is there for her when she faints, and she seems to be finally accepting this role for him. She only makes a couple of those 'you're bossy' half hearted comments. I think you can edit out some of the small talk about what they are eating and wearing and things like that. Keep it focused on what really matters; how she is dealing with the loss of her father and how Seth is suppoting her when she needs the support. estory
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Those parts are in there to help build their relationship. I will reread with your thoughts on my mind. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
this was an interesting and in-depth chapter. I personally wouldn't be able to stomach just plain chicken broth myself. If it was noodle soup, I'd be OK though. I think that Seth and Emma are playing with fire. The desire is obviously there and it's asking a lot of anyone to resist for too long. It would have seemed more appropriate for Seth to sleep downstairs, but I don't know where the story is going. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Hello Barbara,
this was an interesting and in-depth chapter. I personally wouldn't be able to stomach just plain chicken broth myself. If it was noodle soup, I'd be OK though. I think that Seth and Emma are playing with fire. The desire is obviously there and it's asking a lot of anyone to resist for too long. It would have seemed more appropriate for Seth to sleep downstairs, but I don't know where the story is going. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Do you need a question mark?
He grinned. "There is." He checked the time. "Think you can be downstairs in thirty minutes."(?)
I really enjoyed this chapter. It's nice to see how protective Seth is of Emma. He spoils her and it's the best thing he can do with Emma during this hard time.
I want to read the last chapter but I'm sad, I'm going to miss them.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Do you need a question mark?
He grinned. "There is." He checked the time. "Think you can be downstairs in thirty minutes."(?)
I really enjoyed this chapter. It's nice to see how protective Seth is of Emma. He spoils her and it's the best thing he can do with Emma during this hard time.
I want to read the last chapter but I'm sad, I'm going to miss them.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I am going to miss Seth and Emma myself. They became like family to me.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Suppose Emma is finally accepting the fact she needs Seth, probably more than she realizes.
Have to admit, was not sure if you intended all this dialogue to almost read like a script or not?
However, it did paint a clear illusion.
He best hurry up and marry her. Then again, why rush? Neither one of them is going anywhere any time soon.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Suppose Emma is finally accepting the fact she needs Seth, probably more than she realizes.
Have to admit, was not sure if you intended all this dialogue to almost read like a script or not?
However, it did paint a clear illusion.
He best hurry up and marry her. Then again, why rush? Neither one of them is going anywhere any time soon.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have a feeling Seth isn't sure how long he can keep his hands to himself.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a lengthy post for me, Barbara and, although dialogue is always good for character-building, personally I thought it dominated too much and was inclined to turn your lovely story into a drama script. That said, your chapter is a pleasing one to read and you address Emma's grief with sensitivity and skill. It was never going to be easy for her after all she's gone through over the last few weeks - an emotional roller-coaster, in fact. But she has great support, of course, from Seth and her mother. Meanwhile, Seth's self-discipline is definitely being put to the test (nice thought at the end). Small suggestion: I wouldn't say "Her body's (revolting)..." Reacting, maybe, but 'revolting' has another unfortunate meaning. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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This is a lengthy post for me, Barbara and, although dialogue is always good for character-building, personally I thought it dominated too much and was inclined to turn your lovely story into a drama script. That said, your chapter is a pleasing one to read and you address Emma's grief with sensitivity and skill. It was never going to be easy for her after all she's gone through over the last few weeks - an emotional roller-coaster, in fact. But she has great support, of course, from Seth and her mother. Meanwhile, Seth's self-discipline is definitely being put to the test (nice thought at the end). Small suggestion: I wouldn't say "Her body's (revolting)..." Reacting, maybe, but 'revolting' has another unfortunate meaning. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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I see what you're staying about revolted. I'll think about that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Barbara, you're never going to forgive me. I have totally miscalculated and I don't have a sixer left. This chapter is as usual worth a six. What has happened is bringing her closer to Seth. I can't wait to reading on. A hug, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Oh, Barbara, you're never going to forgive me. I have totally miscalculated and I don't have a sixer left. This chapter is as usual worth a six. What has happened is bringing her closer to Seth. I can't wait to reading on. A hug, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Don't worry about the six. I appreciate your encouraging review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
This story is moving right along. It is very realistic that Keith's passing would push them closer together.
I slept all night, so no rushing today. A sixer for me. Great read!
D
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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This story is moving right along. It is very realistic that Keith's passing would push them closer together.
I slept all night, so no rushing today. A sixer for me. Great read!
D
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful support.
Comment from Sanku
After an emotionally draining day Emma is vulnerable and she has accepted the fact that she needs Seth. The scene is beautifully described. The tender romance is what I love about this..
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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After an emotionally draining day Emma is vulnerable and she has accepted the fact that she needs Seth. The scene is beautifully described. The tender romance is what I love about this..
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I'm with Seth on this. Emma is too needy now to control her behavior, so it is up to Seth to be good. Seth needs to tell Emma about the conversation he had with her father. About her father giving them his blessing and hope for a long married life with lots of children. They have no need to wait.
Jake and Susan slowly grow close. That's what my fevered brain sees anyway.Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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I'm with Seth on this. Emma is too needy now to control her behavior, so it is up to Seth to be good. Seth needs to tell Emma about the conversation he had with her father. About her father giving them his blessing and hope for a long married life with lots of children. They have no need to wait.
Jake and Susan slowly grow close. That's what my fevered brain sees anyway.Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Seth does tell her about his conversation with Keith at exactly the right time. I can't remember if it's in the next post or the one after it, but it's coming up. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
First line of new post: expecting Emma to OPEN it.
I'd rather deal with A few rumors than something . . .
SIXTH sense
My MIND'S made up
I like that last line, Barbara! Knowing it will all be tied up in three more chapters is good - this will be a long-awaited ending - and a happy one, I hope.
Have a great week, and we'll see you for chapter 35.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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First line of new post: expecting Emma to OPEN it.
I'd rather deal with A few rumors than something . . .
SIXTH sense
My MIND'S made up
I like that last line, Barbara! Knowing it will all be tied up in three more chapters is good - this will be a long-awaited ending - and a happy one, I hope.
Have a great week, and we'll see you for chapter 35.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Again, thank you for the catches. I changed the first sentence as I posted and still go it wrong. LOL I appreciate all the help and the kind review.