Willing Hearts
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Comment from BOO ghost
BOO is reading..."How many girls were rescued?"
"Fifteen total. Twelve were under sixteen. We arrested eight of Chen's men." Oh, a bust! "I know Mateo went to an escort service and Jose and Noah left sometime during the night. Okay, an escort service. As her eyes met his, Galvin said, "Look away. I'm not falling victim of your bewitching eyes."
"What?"
"You use your eyes to trap men under your spell." Like this, "You can't leave. I'm in protective custody. You need to make sure I'm safely inside. It's a rule, remember? You don't even follow policy unless it suits you. Go figure." Is he breaking protocol? Nicely woven chapter, Barbara. Didn't notice any flaws, my mind focused on the plot and narrative.
BOO!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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BOO is reading..."How many girls were rescued?"
"Fifteen total. Twelve were under sixteen. We arrested eight of Chen's men." Oh, a bust! "I know Mateo went to an escort service and Jose and Noah left sometime during the night. Okay, an escort service. As her eyes met his, Galvin said, "Look away. I'm not falling victim of your bewitching eyes."
"What?"
"You use your eyes to trap men under your spell." Like this, "You can't leave. I'm in protective custody. You need to make sure I'm safely inside. It's a rule, remember? You don't even follow policy unless it suits you. Go figure." Is he breaking protocol? Nicely woven chapter, Barbara. Didn't notice any flaws, my mind focused on the plot and narrative.
BOO!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the kind support.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Well, Calvin is a first class jerk. He's immature and I don't like him. I'm glad Sami put him in his place. This was a good chapter and I'm hoping Sarah is pregnant. That would be a happy circumstance to happen. This was another great installment. Gretchen
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Well, Calvin is a first class jerk. He's immature and I don't like him. I'm glad Sami put him in his place. This was a good chapter and I'm hoping Sarah is pregnant. That would be a happy circumstance to happen. This was another great installment. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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We will find out, I don't think Sunday, but the following Sunday if Sarah is pregnant. It's soon any way. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
My traveling weeks have put me a little behind even thought I tried to keep up, but I'm sure I'll be back up to snuff in a week or two. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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My traveling weeks have put me a little behind even thought I tried to keep up, but I'm sure I'll be back up to snuff in a week or two. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I hope the traveling is going well. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OOOOH Good on Sami!! She's a spirited vixen when she wants to be. Now what will that idiot boss do now? He's not a happy bunny, is he? LOL. I really enjoyed this chapter. Well done, my friend.:)) Sandra xxx
I have just one little question, the sentence beloew. You say he 'stomped ti the car and pulled the handle..... Then after the alarm sounded, he again hurried to his car. Wasn't he already there? I think you need to remove the last sentence? .......
He stomped to the door and pulled the handle. The alarm sounded. "They'll know you're there." (He hurried to his car.)
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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OOOOH Good on Sami!! She's a spirited vixen when she wants to be. Now what will that idiot boss do now? He's not a happy bunny, is he? LOL. I really enjoyed this chapter. Well done, my friend.:)) Sandra xxx
I have just one little question, the sentence beloew. You say he 'stomped ti the car and pulled the handle..... Then after the alarm sounded, he again hurried to his car. Wasn't he already there? I think you need to remove the last sentence? .......
He stomped to the door and pulled the handle. The alarm sounded. "They'll know you're there." (He hurried to his car.)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I have that area fixed. Thank you for bringing it to my attention. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Jacob1395
I really like how you keep the tension ticking up a notch, Barbara, especially when they are waiting to hear news about the missing girls. I also liked the conversation between Sami and Sarah when Sarah was discussing that she might be pregnant. Another excellent read, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I really like how you keep the tension ticking up a notch, Barbara, especially when they are waiting to hear news about the missing girls. I also liked the conversation between Sami and Sarah when Sarah was discussing that she might be pregnant. Another excellent read, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
Love the way Sami responds to Baldwin. She gives him what for, especially when he makes comments about her eyes and she threatens to report him to his supervisor. Interesting story about Sarah, who thinks she may be pregnant. It provides some interesting insight into the lives of the agents. Some of the girls were rescued, but Myra still hasn't been found, apparently. Baldwin tries to blame Noah and his crew, but he doesn't even have a clear picture of what really happened. Great chapter, as usual. judi
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Love the way Sami responds to Baldwin. She gives him what for, especially when he makes comments about her eyes and she threatens to report him to his supervisor. Interesting story about Sarah, who thinks she may be pregnant. It provides some interesting insight into the lives of the agents. Some of the girls were rescued, but Myra still hasn't been found, apparently. Baldwin tries to blame Noah and his crew, but he doesn't even have a clear picture of what really happened. Great chapter, as usual. judi
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Baldwin is a pain. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
I like Sami's spunk. Good for her, speaking her mind. She has hit the nail on the head with regard to Galvin. This is an excellent chapter, very engrossing. Well done!
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I like Sami's spunk. Good for her, speaking her mind. She has hit the nail on the head with regard to Galvin. This is an excellent chapter, very engrossing. Well done!
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Sami does have spunk. It gets her into trouble sometimes. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Ohhh, I like how Sami handles Galvin the supervisor. She's a handful isn't she!
Great read. I think that I am all caught up now. Ha! Great read, my friend.
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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Ohhh, I like how Sami handles Galvin the supervisor. She's a handful isn't she!
Great read. I think that I am all caught up now. Ha! Great read, my friend.
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the support.
Comment from Sankey
I like how Sami throws the rules back at Galvin. This is still very good reading. Ulla has had another crisis so no new chapter from her again! One spag...here's that addition again... "We already know what you were attracted to[o]."
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I like how Sami throws the rules back at Galvin. This is still very good reading. Ulla has had another crisis so no new chapter from her again! One spag...here's that addition again... "We already know what you were attracted to[o]."
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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GRR that little word gets me every time. I have made the correction. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Sami can certainly look after herself. I like her spirit, as do the others in the house it seems. Still no nearer finding Myra though and we await a breakthrough. Excellent dialogue continuing to build character and advance plot. I'm confused about this: You got resume builders on that thing.
Well done, Barbara, on another excellent chapter! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Sami can certainly look after herself. I like her spirit, as do the others in the house it seems. Still no nearer finding Myra though and we await a breakthrough. Excellent dialogue continuing to build character and advance plot. I'm confused about this: You got resume builders on that thing.
Well done, Barbara, on another excellent chapter! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. Yes, Sami's spunky and it gets her into trouble sometimes.