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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "End of the Road for Jane"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from patcelaw
this is very well written and a nice chapter for the book and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It reads very well when it is read aloud and I enjoyed knowing all the things about Jane and her talents. Patricia.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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this is very well written and a nice chapter for the book and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It reads very well when it is read aloud and I enjoyed knowing all the things about Jane and her talents. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I always read all my work aloud before I post it. The musician in me isn't satisfied until it sounds like a song.
Thank you for all your kind words here. xoxox
Comment from Gayla putnam
I don't want to go on a road trip with Jane. (Oh, wait a minute. I think I have been on one.) In a few paragraphs, the reader is fully engaged with your characters. I like the visual images, e.g., "Hippopotamus deflating a pool raft or eyes jostling out of the sockets." Your dry humor works beautifully. I can't wait for the next installment at the Fanstory convention. gayla
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I don't want to go on a road trip with Jane. (Oh, wait a minute. I think I have been on one.) In a few paragraphs, the reader is fully engaged with your characters. I like the visual images, e.g., "Hippopotamus deflating a pool raft or eyes jostling out of the sockets." Your dry humor works beautifully. I can't wait for the next installment at the Fanstory convention. gayla
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Ohhh, it's going to be a doozy! Thanks so much for joining us on this wild ride, Gayla!! xoxox
Comment from Esther Brown
Hey, not fair. Using up my sixes like that! Giggles filling up space, eyes jostling out of sockets. I so love your word pictures, they evoke the intended and add rather than detract from your writing. I think I might have thought you were spitfire on my contest with the red-headed girl? Esther
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Hey, not fair. Using up my sixes like that! Giggles filling up space, eyes jostling out of sockets. I so love your word pictures, they evoke the intended and add rather than detract from your writing. I think I might have thought you were spitfire on my contest with the red-headed girl? Esther
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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What a SUPER nice review this is!!
I do love Spitfire; she's extremely fun and plucky...so, we have lots in common!!
xoxoxo
Comment from GWHARGIS
Now that, my Yankee friend, was a cliff hanger. In the best possible way. So, I'm a low class Dixie chick in her eyes. Bwahaha, I love it! This did not disappoint in the slightest. I felt all of your pent up aggression and frustration bubble to the top as soon as you saw her at the car. Perfect delivery. You had me perfect with my add ons about her terrible poetry. This was awesome, Rachelle. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Now that, my Yankee friend, was a cliff hanger. In the best possible way. So, I'm a low class Dixie chick in her eyes. Bwahaha, I love it! This did not disappoint in the slightest. I felt all of your pent up aggression and frustration bubble to the top as soon as you saw her at the car. Perfect delivery. You had me perfect with my add ons about her terrible poetry. This was awesome, Rachelle. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I know my road buddy, Gretchen Hargis!! And NOBODY gets to diss her (well, except me, of course...) Thanks for the resounding review. Very much appreciated. xoxoxo
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I must admit that the title of this chapter got me smiling LOL Limo driver, indeed. lol An extremely fun take-down of that obnoxxxxxxxxious cow. on to the convention we go!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I must admit that the title of this chapter got me smiling LOL Limo driver, indeed. lol An extremely fun take-down of that obnoxxxxxxxxious cow. on to the convention we go!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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At last!!! Thanks for this adorable review. Very much appreciated. xoxxo
Comment from pome lover
OMG! sounds like your friend, Tova pulled a fast one.
Boy howdy, as some say here in Texas, that would fry my grits!
Can't wait to read the next installment.
Getting rid of Jane deserves a celebration. You truly created the perfect person to ...dislike intensely.
Good luck. Also, really neat scene between you and Rebeckah. Heart warming.
Katharine
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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OMG! sounds like your friend, Tova pulled a fast one.
Boy howdy, as some say here in Texas, that would fry my grits!
Can't wait to read the next installment.
Getting rid of Jane deserves a celebration. You truly created the perfect person to ...dislike intensely.
Good luck. Also, really neat scene between you and Rebeckah. Heart warming.
Katharine
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Katharine, how I love your reviews every week! They are so personal and encouraging and engaging. Thank you for being along on this wild ride!! xoxox
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it is a pleasure!
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You sweetie, you. xoxo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am so glad you and Gretchen got rid of Jane. It should have happened at the beginning, but it made for a great story. I can't wait to read more. So happy I get to read this. I do hope we see Rebekah again.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I am so glad you and Gretchen got rid of Jane. It should have happened at the beginning, but it made for a great story. I can't wait to read more. So happy I get to read this. I do hope we see Rebekah again.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Rebekah was the reason we had to tolerate Jane as long as we did. We did it to spare her youth and naievete! Without her on board, though, the gloves were off!!
Thanks for this terrific review - and fear not; we WILL be going back to visit Rebekah once the convention is over.
I honestly do look forward to your reviews every week. xoxox
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Muted by 7? Poor them, as they are not able to read one of the best things on FanStory right now.
The bad news here is that Jane will not go away, at least not for good. She'll be at the convention and in full pissed-off attitude. Look out, girls!
We'll call this "showdown, phase 1" perhaps.
A well done chapter with a good pace and lots of Jane-inspired tension. I'm loving this series you and Gretchen are co-writing!
xoxo
SSSPT
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Muted by 7? Poor them, as they are not able to read one of the best things on FanStory right now.
The bad news here is that Jane will not go away, at least not for good. She'll be at the convention and in full pissed-off attitude. Look out, girls!
We'll call this "showdown, phase 1" perhaps.
A well done chapter with a good pace and lots of Jane-inspired tension. I'm loving this series you and Gretchen are co-writing!
xoxo
SSSPT
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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First of all, HAHAHAHAHAHA to "SSSPT." You slay me.
Second, they actually CAN still read my stuff, since I don't believe in muting. They just never lower themselves to reviewing...though there is not a doubt in my mind but that they are reading. I can't read their masterpieces, however, and to that, I say, "Thank gawd!" It saves me a LOT of eye-rolling.
Third, thank you for this delightful review...and you're so right: it's only Phase 1. Lots of "showdown" material coming down the pike!
xoxoxo
Comment from BethShelby
This lady must have been spoiled from the time she entered the world. It seems impossible for her to get the message no one is impressed with her. You've created a very unlikable character. I'm glad she is fiction, but she has some sisters who aren't
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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This lady must have been spoiled from the time she entered the world. It seems impossible for her to get the message no one is impressed with her. You've created a very unlikable character. I'm glad she is fiction, but she has some sisters who aren't
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Ohhh, that she DEFINITELY does!!
Every reviewer has despised this character! Gretchen and I have been delighted about that.
Thanks for your lovely review!!
xoxox
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hah!
Rachelle!
What a heartwarming exchange between you and Rebekah, and what a hoot between you and Jane. Poor Jane... not!
I've come close to knowing a few "Jane's" in my life, but nowhere as obnoxious as your Jane.
And I laughed aloud at the reference to your "7 mutes." Sigh... I only am muted by 2 = always have to outdo me! :) :) :)
Much enjoyed!
Lots of emotion = highs and lows in one chapter!
Onward!
diane
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Hah!
Rachelle!
What a heartwarming exchange between you and Rebekah, and what a hoot between you and Jane. Poor Jane... not!
I've come close to knowing a few "Jane's" in my life, but nowhere as obnoxious as your Jane.
And I laughed aloud at the reference to your "7 mutes." Sigh... I only am muted by 2 = always have to outdo me! :) :) :)
Much enjoyed!
Lots of emotion = highs and lows in one chapter!
Onward!
diane
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I think I should teach a master class: How to Be Muted on FS, as I seem to have it down to a science!!
Thank you for your very nice review; you have the nicest way of making me feel like this story is keeping on track. I appreciate that.
xoxoxo