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Adventures on Kingsley Street

Meet my Family The first in a series of short storys

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Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
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Richard,

This was an awesome story. Is it a true story? I remember growing up with and older brother and a younger sister. My sister and I were always battling. We were 13 months apart. It was great being a kid. Adulting sucks.

Great story looking forward to the next chapter.

Cecilia

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 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2024
    This is a true story. I decided after talking with a friend that I grew up with to write stories of my early years. The more I thought about it, the more I realized I had a fun, but interesting childhood. I hope you read the next one. I make a not so happy visit to the emergency room.
reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 04-Nov-2024
    I thought it might be. What a great childhood. I plan on reading the next one.

    Are you going to progress to your detective days? I'm a crime junkie and I bet you could tell some stories.

    Cecilia
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Funny you should mention my detective days. I wrote some stories but got sidetracked. You should look at my other stories. There are several police ones. Some are actual events, others are based on actual events, but with slight changes. Most of them were written at the beginning of my getting into writing. So they are not all 10s.
    I spent three years as an undercover narcotics detective assigned to a group made up of local officers, county deputies, and state police troopers. It was a large unit with the job of stopping the flow and sale of narcotics into a tri-county area north of Detroit.
    In all my years in my department, those were my favorite. Apparently, I was a frustrated actor and in that job you play various rolls. I would like to think I was very good at my job. Eventually I will write some stories.
    I recently finished writing my first book. It has to do with a kid that because of his best friend becomes involved with the mafia. It needs to be edited and shortened. If by chance you are interested in reading the draft, let me know.
reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 04-Nov-2024
    Richard,
    Please send me the draft I would love to read it. Have you posted the chapters on Fanstory yet?
    Are all the other stories in Fanstory?


    You can send it to caheiskary21@gmail.com if that would be easier.

    Cecilia
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Only the first chapter. That was a long time ago.
    Yes, all of my stories are on FanStory.
Comment from John Cranford
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Hi Richard,

As I said in a previous exchange with you, you are a masterful storyteller. You have a simple, throwback-to-a-different-time style of writing that endears you to the reader. You describe every little boy's childhood...you described mine.

I'm the youngest of three boys and two girls. Your story reminded me of an incident when I was quite small. My brothers built a pole vault in the backyard. I was too small to handle the pole so they made the decision to just throw me over the bar. Before I could protest, I was in the air. I still have a scar on my knuckle where my finger hit the bar as I sailed over it. But as I recall, the most painful part was when I hit the ground on the other side.

Anyone who reads your stories, like me, will be transported back to a time of joy in their youth (although mine was quite painful). I look forward to reading more of your brotherly antics When you can bring back memories to the reader, you have arrived my friend as a writer.

Congratulations!

John

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2024
    John,
    First, thank you for the rating. It is appreciated. Your words were more than kind. I was fortunate to have two big brothers who watched over me. They did not get along, but they both took good care of their little brother.

    I am glad my brothers never got the idea of throwing me anywhere. Your brothers must have forgotten the baby of the family is not to be harmed.

    Too bad you never met my Irish grandmother. She always got a kick out of me and my constant talking. I cannot tell you how many times she told me I had the gift of blarney. Unfortunately, the gift got me in trouble at school.

    You wrote I have a simple throwback-to-a-different-time style of writing. You are right. I guess we all have a style we are comfortable with.

    You wrote. "When you can bring back memories to the reader, you have arrived my friend as a writer."

    On the wall my desk faces, I have a saying that you might find interesting.
    "Why do I write?"
    If my writing touches one person or affects their life.
    Then my writing has achieved something good.

    Richard

Comment from BethShelby
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I really enjoy reading biological stories of those who write on this site. It is mainly the kind I write as well. You were fortunate to have brothers. I was an only child and I missed having siblings. My oldest daughter was three in the 1964. Life was different but her more different in the 40 and 50s. I look forward to reading more of your story.

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 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2024
    Beth, I appreciate you reading my story. I must thank a good friend of mine for bringing up our days on Kingsley Street. The more I thought, the more I realized I had a fun, but interesting youth.
    I hope you will read the next story. It involves a not so pleasant trip to the emergency room.