The Devil Fights Back
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Did Dana offer too much information to help with this task? I'm wondering if she didn't. I can't wait to find out. I do hope Brian will remain safe. You're doing a good job writing this.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Did Dana offer too much information to help with this task? I'm wondering if she didn't. I can't wait to find out. I do hope Brian will remain safe. You're doing a good job writing this.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Barbara. Dana certainly may have overstepped her role here. We'll find out what Fran thinks of this soon.
Comment from Elias Noor
This chapter is engaging, blending corporate intrigue, ethical dilemmas, and personal manipulation effectively. The dialogue is sharp, revealing the characters' motives and personalities well. However, the pacing could be slightly tightened in parts to maintain the tension and avoid overexplaining.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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This chapter is engaging, blending corporate intrigue, ethical dilemmas, and personal manipulation effectively. The dialogue is sharp, revealing the characters' motives and personalities well. However, the pacing could be slightly tightened in parts to maintain the tension and avoid overexplaining.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thanks very much, Elias. I do have a tendency to overexplain at times. If you could give me an example or two of something you think I should cut or trim down, that would be much appreciated.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I loved how your chapter kept the tension. Your use of Dana's calculated moves and inner thoughts really brought her character to life. I could feel her discomfort and determination all at once. Also, that bit of humor with "peaks, so to speak" was great! Your story is interesting and keeps me eager to see how Dana handles these morally gray situations. Keep up the amazing work!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I loved how your chapter kept the tension. Your use of Dana's calculated moves and inner thoughts really brought her character to life. I could feel her discomfort and determination all at once. Also, that bit of humor with "peaks, so to speak" was great! Your story is interesting and keeps me eager to see how Dana handles these morally gray situations. Keep up the amazing work!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you for this wonderful review, Michael, and for those 6 stars too. This is one of those gray areas that borders on entrapment. We'll see how Fran responds to this soon enough.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
The sad thing about the article written here (by the way, nice job on that) is that this is exactly the kind of misinformation we deal with every single day. I remember a time when nothing made it to print until it had been fact-checked numerous times. Now these things are written purposefully by those who aim to fill our heads with whatever narrative is convenient to them.
"He came around his desk and put his hand on my shoulder." - Why do men assume it's okay to touch a woman, especially a female who reports to them. I put up with that shit during my other life working in an office.
Leonard is not so dumb that he is willing to cross a line; or maybe he is. But Dana may be doing something that will backfire on her and those she's supposed to be helping.
We'll see!
xo
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The sad thing about the article written here (by the way, nice job on that) is that this is exactly the kind of misinformation we deal with every single day. I remember a time when nothing made it to print until it had been fact-checked numerous times. Now these things are written purposefully by those who aim to fill our heads with whatever narrative is convenient to them.
"He came around his desk and put his hand on my shoulder." - Why do men assume it's okay to touch a woman, especially a female who reports to them. I put up with that shit during my other life working in an office.
Leonard is not so dumb that he is willing to cross a line; or maybe he is. But Dana may be doing something that will backfire on her and those she's supposed to be helping.
We'll see!
xo
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Your analysis of that article was spot on. That's exactly the point I was trying to make--that so much in the media is poorly sourced, leaving us not knowing what to believe. They will print or report on whatever supports their agenda with the slimmest of "facts."
Dana is overstepping, but she's impulsive and impatient. Let's see how Fran reacts to it when she finds out.
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There you go again, talking like your characters are real:-)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Looks to be overstepping the parameters of a confidential witness, more like a participant. Hope it doesn't bite her.
Nicely written. Good work and best wishes.
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Looks to be overstepping the parameters of a confidential witness, more like a participant. Hope it doesn't bite her.
Nicely written. Good work and best wishes.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thanks very much, Wayne. I think this was a little more than Fran bargained for when she made Dana a CI. We'll see if any good comes of it.