RESIDUE OF WAR
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Comment from NadineM
This is a great poem and tribute to a hero and soldier who returned from war, never to be the same! The emotional scars are deeply carved and the pains will forever make the heart ache.
I especially liked:
And you returned all in one piece
In the midst of the media lies
No visible marks were seen on you
'Cept the pain that lived in your eyes
These lines really touched my heart by its truth, painful as it is.
Thanks for being the constant supporter of your Glen and all others like Glen who only cared with their heart and did the best job possible for their countries!
Great poem. Thank-you for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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This is a great poem and tribute to a hero and soldier who returned from war, never to be the same! The emotional scars are deeply carved and the pains will forever make the heart ache.
I especially liked:
And you returned all in one piece
In the midst of the media lies
No visible marks were seen on you
'Cept the pain that lived in your eyes
These lines really touched my heart by its truth, painful as it is.
Thanks for being the constant supporter of your Glen and all others like Glen who only cared with their heart and did the best job possible for their countries!
Great poem. Thank-you for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Hear! Hear! All those who have served their time in this war, as well as any war situation, deserve only the greatest respect and humility to be shown them.
Those who leave heartfelt words as a critique like yours for a work that was very hard to do, will remain in a pocket of my memory for always. You and other kind reviewers who've had nothing but positive words to say about this work have reaffirmed my faith in human nature. Thank you Nadine xoxoxoxoxxoo
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
what a beautiful picture and wonderful poem to one of the true heroes in our world. of course, we don't hear or see these stories as they don't sell papers, or so they say. I wonder if they've ever truly tried. Please tell your Glen thank you for helping to keep me safe and for his love of the children.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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what a beautiful picture and wonderful poem to one of the true heroes in our world. of course, we don't hear or see these stories as they don't sell papers, or so they say. I wonder if they've ever truly tried. Please tell your Glen thank you for helping to keep me safe and for his love of the children.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Good on you Rdfrd. In keeping you safe, his tribute has managed to receive a review fit for a published novelist. This is why our heroes do this: not only to preserve peace, but also to keep people such as yourself alive and happy and to spread their light like your comments have done. Bless you xoxoxoxoxxo
Comment from serenityjs
this poem brought me to tears. your message is loud and clear....it is disturbing to me that this world has become a place where we celebrate death more than we celebrate life, this poem reminds others to live...............
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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this poem brought me to tears. your message is loud and clear....it is disturbing to me that this world has become a place where we celebrate death more than we celebrate life, this poem reminds others to live...............
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Looking at the photo brings me to tears still. And reviews packed with warmth like yours will keep 'em comin'! Bless you, your words and your world. xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from ravenshadowwinds
A heartfelt tribute to someone very dear to yourself and to history. It flowed well, it wasn't sing song enough to take away from the painful realisation that he's experienced turmoil.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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A heartfelt tribute to someone very dear to yourself and to history. It flowed well, it wasn't sing song enough to take away from the painful realisation that he's experienced turmoil.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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I appreciate your comments and rating raven. Bless you xoxoxoxo
Comment from Soloneili
Wow that is one lucky guy in the picture. I hope he has read this, it is so very touching and insightful. The photo says it all, and your poetry is just that, poetry, completely sincere and understanding. What a lucky guy.
Loved it.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Wow that is one lucky guy in the picture. I hope he has read this, it is so very touching and insightful. The photo says it all, and your poetry is just that, poetry, completely sincere and understanding. What a lucky guy.
Loved it.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Thanks so much Soleneili. No, I haven't had the guts to show it to him yet. It's a very touchy subject still and I don't know how he'd react if he knew I'd posted this....then again it may not bother him - I just don't know!! We are both lucky people. And me particularly with a review as generous and thoughtful as yours. Bless you xoxoxoxxoo
Comment from bard owl
What a wonderfully uplifting poem you have written. Your words are an inspiration and should lighten the heart of all who read it and bemoan the war. This piece flows very smoothly and the rhyme and rhythm are without flaw. Please tell Glen, that all of us admire and take heart in the work that such kindness as his has shown the world. Excellent. Blessings, bard owl
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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What a wonderfully uplifting poem you have written. Your words are an inspiration and should lighten the heart of all who read it and bemoan the war. This piece flows very smoothly and the rhyme and rhythm are without flaw. Please tell Glen, that all of us admire and take heart in the work that such kindness as his has shown the world. Excellent. Blessings, bard owl
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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And bless you back bard owl. Glen's always been the sort of person that puts his duty first, but even in the midst of this he saw a real need for the children to have some sunshine put into their lives. He organised a toy drive through Rotary here in our quiet Aussie town, and they were over the moon with their gifts. Amidst the warcries, their glee could be heard right over the top of it. Thank you so much xoxoxoxoxox
Comment from Nedrajean
This showed the other side - like you say, the non-news worthy one. I feel sometimes you didn't use true rhyme, and a couple stanzas didn't read as smoothly as they might have - but it sure didn't distract from the message. Good read and work.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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This showed the other side - like you say, the non-news worthy one. I feel sometimes you didn't use true rhyme, and a couple stanzas didn't read as smoothly as they might have - but it sure didn't distract from the message. Good read and work.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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And I'm thanking you for noticing that my rhyme and meter were both a bit off. Trouble is, no matter how many times I've read this over and over, I can't bring myself to alter it as I feel it would detract from its message. Thank you so much for your review and kind words xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Curt Mongold
So very touching and so very true. The photo brought tears to my eyes. I can't imagine the untold stories our boys have of helping those poor children. May the seeds planted by the extra ordinary men like your husband grow into a garden of peace. As an ex-military man myself, Glen, I salute you.
And I salute you too my friend, for this beautiful write.
Curt
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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So very touching and so very true. The photo brought tears to my eyes. I can't imagine the untold stories our boys have of helping those poor children. May the seeds planted by the extra ordinary men like your husband grow into a garden of peace. As an ex-military man myself, Glen, I salute you.
And I salute you too my friend, for this beautiful write.
Curt
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Your words brought a lump to my throat, and I truly appreciate your review and comments, more than I can express here. Thank you Curt, from the bottom of my heart xoxoxoxoxxoo
Comment from writerjen
Nice poem, thoughtful and full of emotion. One question, in stanza 7 you spoke of "your tortured minds" you used plural"minds" but in the rest of the poem it seemed to be addressed to one person. Were you writing to all soldiers or just one person? Might want to fix that..otherwise, great poem.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Nice poem, thoughtful and full of emotion. One question, in stanza 7 you spoke of "your tortured minds" you used plural"minds" but in the rest of the poem it seemed to be addressed to one person. Were you writing to all soldiers or just one person? Might want to fix that..otherwise, great poem.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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In that stanza I wanted to show that I wasn't the only one wondering....This work was done with a view to giving Glen the appreciation I feel he deserves, but also in a round about way, acknowledging our understanding of what these boys can be left with on their return, even if there is nothing visible that arouses immediate sympathy. Thanks for questioning that, but I hope you can understand, I simply can't bring myself to change its content. Your review and comments are both very much appreciated. Bless you xoxoxoxxoo
Comment from BWitch
If I could give a standing ovation right now I would. This brought tears to my eyes.
The true casualties of war are indeed the soldiers who the "people" patch up with bandaids in the form of medals.
We can only guess the horror these men and women have been through and seen, and it`s the ones like yourself who make it that wee bit easier for them to live with what they have seen, by not judging and sitting quietly, often saying nothing.
Bravo to you.
This is absolutely brilliant.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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If I could give a standing ovation right now I would. This brought tears to my eyes.
The true casualties of war are indeed the soldiers who the "people" patch up with bandaids in the form of medals.
We can only guess the horror these men and women have been through and seen, and it`s the ones like yourself who make it that wee bit easier for them to live with what they have seen, by not judging and sitting quietly, often saying nothing.
Bravo to you.
This is absolutely brilliant.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2008
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Bravo back to you Bwitch for your comments, great review and also for feeling the message of this piece as deeply as you obviously have. I really think I am a narcissist because every time I look at the picture and read the poem I get all teary myself!! I'd make a rotten comedian coz I'd be laughing at my own jokes I think....
Your comments and reviewe are absolutely brilliant, and truly appreciated xoxoxoxoxoxxoxo