Comment from P1

Excellent

nearly in tears here
this is an awesome entry to the
contest. it was well written and
a pleasure to rad and review good
luck with it hugs.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008

Thanks so very much paige won. I'm happy you enjoyed this one. The thought of how some of it applies to my relationship with my Dad brings a tear as well.... Maybe one day we'll bury the hatchet.

Again, thanks so very much for your encouragement and good luck wishes xoxoxoxoxoxo

Comment from vertigo50

Excellent

You lines are full of truth. Good work. I know two men who became steril because of exposure to agent orange.

He was different when he returned, all the family did was fight
The effects of Agent Orange finally taking him one night
I smiled when I recalled the way you got me to march in his place
I'd never spared it a thought till then, but did it with pride on my face

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2008

Thank you very much vertigo50. Your comments are much appreciated - have a great day! xoxoxxo

Comment from Adam Smith

Excellent

I think it is interesting to use a poem about a letter to introduce and describe the artifact. This is indeed a creative approach that I hope gets consideration in that regard. It's a heartfelt piece that I think many will relate to, particularly about being too stubborn to put the past aside and move on, even in the knowledge that it would be for the best. I liked this one for its depth of emotion and creativity. Adam

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2008

Thanks very much Adam. High praise indeed coming from the creator of this contest. Will see how the votes pan out...

Thank you also for stopping by and reviewing this; I'm glad you enjoyed it! xoxoxoxo

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

What a touching and emotional poem. The ending, asking for forgiveness, caused a lump in the throat and tears in my eyes. How many misunderstandings seperate parent and child in so many instances? This is deserving of a six, and I of course, have already given my quota out for the week. Best of luck in the contest. Your work is always excellent. This is exceptional. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008

Thanks so much Linda, but it's the thought for sixes that counts! Thanks for your good luck wishes as well and your very kind comments as always xoxoxxoxo

Comment from Wordsnmusic

Excellent

I do enjoy reading your work and I loved this one!

This is sounded so heartfelt and though it may not have, it sounded like you took a great deal of care in this one.

Amber

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008

Hi Wordsnmusic. You know, I did spend a bit of time on this one; kept reading it and finding things wrong, so fixed 'em! I'm glad you enjoyed this, and appreciate that you saw a bit of work had gone into it. Bless you! xoxoxoxxo

Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards

Excellent

Wonderful! So touching, so introspective, so reconciling! Good work. Look forward to reading more of your materials.

Dave

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008

Thank you so very much Dave. I'm glad you enjoyed this one! xoxoxoxo

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

forgiveness and the ability to have a hug before you lose him would be a gift from God...if he is gone then you just make your piece another way with your dad...but first forgive yourself. yours, diana xoxox

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008

Thanks so much Diana, but time will tell... xoxoxoxoxo

Comment from serenityjs

Excellent

this is a very touching poem...
It speaks of regret and love...
that internal human resolve to seeks to make things right...
that internal human resolve that refuses to forgive
lonliness...

love jen

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008

Hi jen! So right, what you say. We're all guilty of this at one time or another. If the olive branch has been offered as I have with little result, then the only thing for it is to wait. Thanks so much for reviewing this and for your thoughtful comments xoxoxoxxoo

Comment from earthlybeing

Excellent

This is a very touching story poem. It was easy to read and I could feel his anguish in his words. It is a very heart felt write and well done. Good luck in the contest. Thanks, Jeanette

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 Comment Written 18-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008

Thanks so much Jeanette. Funny how these sorts of topics flow off my pen lately... Again, thanks very much for your review and thoughts, as always xoxoxoxxo

Comment from Donovan

Excellent

I felt what I think meant when I read your letter. That is all that really counts. Very hard to review personal experiences because they are what they are. I do like subtle, but one area I am not sure about is why the writer and the daughter were estranged. I read several times and it is still not clear...you might want to look at that.

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 Comment Written 18-Aug-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008

Hi Donovan. Firstly, thank you very, very much for your comments and review - they're much appreciated. Second, I don't want to go into the whole sorry story in a poem; it'd end up an epic no-one would want to read! Sometimes, it's best to be kept in the dark...

Again, thank you so very much xoxoxoxoxo