Sir Derrick of Loserville
Short take on lust.15 total reviews
Comment from TerraDawn
Hahahaha!!! What an amusing piece!! It is so short and to the point, which I guess is really the whole point of the story in general. I thought it was funny, well written and I loved every word you chose. Bravo!!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hahahaha!!! What an amusing piece!! It is so short and to the point, which I guess is really the whole point of the story in general. I thought it was funny, well written and I loved every word you chose. Bravo!!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hi TerraDawn, I am please you were entertained for a moment. That is my only objective when it comes to writing. Thanks for reading and commenting. ZeeZee
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Hahaha....DEFINITELY entertained. Mission accomplished.
Comment from Terror2s
You did a nice job of describing her excitement over Derrick. I didn't see any typos, grammar errors, or spelling errors. The story flowed nicely, although I could have used a little more sensory detail. I don't know what Derrick looks like or really get a sense of why she is drawn to him before she hops into bed. Terror
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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You did a nice job of describing her excitement over Derrick. I didn't see any typos, grammar errors, or spelling errors. The story flowed nicely, although I could have used a little more sensory detail. I don't know what Derrick looks like or really get a sense of why she is drawn to him before she hops into bed. Terror
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Terror2s, thank you so much for reading and commenting. My only objective is to entertain the reader for a moment.. that is all I seem to be capable of. Take care and thank you again. ZeeZee
Comment from darkgreennights
Well well, and you can write fiction too! I shouldnt be suprised, I gave you an excellent, because I actually thought it was, in most cases I do that, becasue I dont know what to say...and I always figure who can it hurt, its not my job to say whether someone can write or not, thats up to agents. But you really can, and when I find that I tell them what I like. Its dark, urban, nasty and real
Kathleen
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Well well, and you can write fiction too! I shouldnt be suprised, I gave you an excellent, because I actually thought it was, in most cases I do that, becasue I dont know what to say...and I always figure who can it hurt, its not my job to say whether someone can write or not, thats up to agents. But you really can, and when I find that I tell them what I like. Its dark, urban, nasty and real
Kathleen
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Its dark urban, nasty and real... can I use that for my book cover? It so perfectly defines me. LOL... Thanks Kathleen, I enjoyed this short little ditty. ZeeZee
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go for it lol lol
Comment from Moira's Amethyst
That was a rather interesting tale and wonder art choice to accompany it. I found you completed a very entertaining storyline. Great work. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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That was a rather interesting tale and wonder art choice to accompany it. I found you completed a very entertaining storyline. Great work. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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HI Poetry's Protege. I appreciate your reading and commenting. ZeeZee
Comment from jeslaf
If I had six you'd get 'em, this is short, sassy, sexy and hysterically funny. I love the way you hook the reader right from the very beginning, with the sense that anything can happen with a nut of an author like you. It's suspenseful, even if the story isn't necessarily one of suspense. You are gifted, and I am in awe. PHD in pussy is a great phrase, and the last line is an excellent clincher. : )
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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If I had six you'd get 'em, this is short, sassy, sexy and hysterically funny. I love the way you hook the reader right from the very beginning, with the sense that anything can happen with a nut of an author like you. It's suspenseful, even if the story isn't necessarily one of suspense. You are gifted, and I am in awe. PHD in pussy is a great phrase, and the last line is an excellent clincher. : )
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thanks.. I have been out of the muse. This was short and satisfying. And that ain't all bad. Love ya Jeslaf, thanks for the great review.