Searching
a young boy's desperate search for a father's love16 total reviews
Comment from Katiesherrill
This just made me cry. What a sad story so wonderfully and carefully told. I hope you do write a story, it sounds like there is a lot to be told. Thank you for sharing this. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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This just made me cry. What a sad story so wonderfully and carefully told. I hope you do write a story, it sounds like there is a lot to be told. Thank you for sharing this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Wow - thanks. -J
Comment from BethShelby
This is sad that a child who can't get the positive attention he needs so badly has to settle for negative attention. I guess children need attention any way they can get it.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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This is sad that a child who can't get the positive attention he needs so badly has to settle for negative attention. I guess children need attention any way they can get it.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thanks for the excellent review.
Comment from Charlene0513
A very profound writing prompt that truly kept me wanting to know more. You set it up nicely.
It had some very hard places to read with the troubles this little boy faced.
It was excellent writing!
Charlene
wanted his father to notice him. (omit 2nd "to")
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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A very profound writing prompt that truly kept me wanting to know more. You set it up nicely.
It had some very hard places to read with the troubles this little boy faced.
It was excellent writing!
Charlene
wanted his father to notice him. (omit 2nd "to")
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate your sharp eye with my 2 to's. -J
Comment from adewpearl
Negative attention is far better than no attention - that, tragically, is the motto of many a child whose parent just doesn't seem to care for any number of reasons. You convey that well in this sad story of a boy who only catches his dad's eye in destructive ways. This is most thoughtful. Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Negative attention is far better than no attention - that, tragically, is the motto of many a child whose parent just doesn't seem to care for any number of reasons. You convey that well in this sad story of a boy who only catches his dad's eye in destructive ways. This is most thoughtful. Brooke
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you very much. -J
Comment from ZeBestBlonde1
Hello to you, elusive poet of Searching...
A most EXCELLENT and POWERFUL title that truly does your story justice.
I liked the picture, but these NEVER influence my rating-just the writer's work
Your story is exceptionally well told-not just from the boys' eyes, but others as well-nice
Sorry for your loss, truly
this is a fine tribute to your thoughts and words of love and loss and desire for attention-which I LOVED the part where you say he longed for his dad's eye, not attention-this was good!
Best to you and your entry, truly!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Hello to you, elusive poet of Searching...
A most EXCELLENT and POWERFUL title that truly does your story justice.
I liked the picture, but these NEVER influence my rating-just the writer's work
Your story is exceptionally well told-not just from the boys' eyes, but others as well-nice
Sorry for your loss, truly
this is a fine tribute to your thoughts and words of love and loss and desire for attention-which I LOVED the part where you say he longed for his dad's eye, not attention-this was good!
Best to you and your entry, truly!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you enjoyed this. -J
Comment from poetknowit
Well-written and full of sensitivity and understanding of the reasons "difficult" children act out.
In the very last sentence, I would suggest a comma after the prase "Only ten years old".
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Well-written and full of sensitivity and understanding of the reasons "difficult" children act out.
In the very last sentence, I would suggest a comma after the prase "Only ten years old".
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you very much, and thank you too for the comma suggestion. I missed that one. -J