An Opportunistic Killing
Fanstory suspects.24 total reviews
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Thesis,
Honest guv, it weren't me, so it must be Fred wot dun it.
Amusingly whimsical, I enjoyed reading this. Its well described and good dialogues help it along in the Agatha Christie style.
Patrick
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Hi Thesis,
Honest guv, it weren't me, so it must be Fred wot dun it.
Amusingly whimsical, I enjoyed reading this. Its well described and good dialogues help it along in the Agatha Christie style.
Patrick
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Mr. John Thesis, accomplished author ... I'm glad I participate as an innocent member here. (Hmmm, let me enjoy my rare moments of fame with this contest before I go on...) This is an interesting story, fancy making our friend the checkered handkerchief owner be a murderer, and killing another friend, Ray, without any reason, and suspecting Bob only because this time he is after me in the list of ten... Anyway, this is hilarious. Just hope Lola won't be angry for involving her alter ego romantically!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Hi, Mr. John Thesis, accomplished author ... I'm glad I participate as an innocent member here. (Hmmm, let me enjoy my rare moments of fame with this contest before I go on...) This is an interesting story, fancy making our friend the checkered handkerchief owner be a murderer, and killing another friend, Ray, without any reason, and suspecting Bob only because this time he is after me in the list of ten... Anyway, this is hilarious. Just hope Lola won't be angry for involving her alter ego romantically!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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She lets me use Gia on occasion. My first two purple prose stories involve her, with Lola's permission. I ove the essence of Gia, she's so cool. I tried to keep you safe in my story, hope you didn't mind.
This was really hard to write. I didn't want to offend anyone. - John
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Ha, of course, I know everything is written in a fun and playful mood...:) That's the essence of the contest, right?
Comment from missy98writer
thesis,
I'm glad some of your stories involve Gia and your alter ego John. We move from two purple prose with these two to a mystery involving fanstorians. A cleaver written mystery story in my opinion. Does Lola know what you wrote about her? She'll be flattered. You kept me guessing until near the end. The checkered handkerchief gave away the killer. It was annabella. A wonderful entry for the FanStory Clue writing prompt. Cool photo.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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thesis,
I'm glad some of your stories involve Gia and your alter ego John. We move from two purple prose with these two to a mystery involving fanstorians. A cleaver written mystery story in my opinion. Does Lola know what you wrote about her? She'll be flattered. You kept me guessing until near the end. The checkered handkerchief gave away the killer. It was annabella. A wonderful entry for the FanStory Clue writing prompt. Cool photo.
Melissa.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Hi, Melissa. Thanks for your wonderful comments. No, I don't think Lola read it yet. Gia is such a wonderful character, I'm happy that Lola likes what I'm doing with her. Wait....did I say that wrong? Lol. - John
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Wonderful story. Keep on thrilling us with stories about Gia and John.
Melissa.
Comment from sugardog
I thought your mystery murder story was really fun to read. you did a great job writing it and made it interesting using a lot of familiar names in it. I am not sure who the murederer is-I am not good at guessing these kind of things, but I really enjoyed it!
"To answer your question, Ms. Donato I was looking at you(should be-your)heels for any trace of blood or tissue."
Good luck in this fun contest! Dana
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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I thought your mystery murder story was really fun to read. you did a great job writing it and made it interesting using a lot of familiar names in it. I am not sure who the murederer is-I am not good at guessing these kind of things, but I really enjoyed it!
"To answer your question, Ms. Donato I was looking at you(should be-your)heels for any trace of blood or tissue."
Good luck in this fun contest! Dana
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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THanks, DAna. I fixed the "your". I'm happy you enjoyed it. Look at anabelle's stories to find the connection to checkered. - John
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Oooh, I will. Thanks!! Dana
Comment from highlander104
This is a fun read. I think you did a clever job weaving our fanstory members and some of their characters into a rather fun mystery story. (Shame on you, Thesis, hanging out in a hot tub with Gia. Does Lola29 know about this?)
Jean K.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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This is a fun read. I think you did a clever job weaving our fanstory members and some of their characters into a rather fun mystery story. (Shame on you, Thesis, hanging out in a hot tub with Gia. Does Lola29 know about this?)
Jean K.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Shhhhh, Don't speak so loud. She's pissed enough that Gia and I are ...you know...physical. But I have to say, Gia is so worth it. Lol. Thanks for a fun review, Jean. - John
Comment from wierdgrace
Wow, I surely have missed checking on the contest, this one seem that it would be fun, especially using your fellow fanstorians, I loved it, well done, and a great entry, I will be checking out the voting booth soon.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Wow, I surely have missed checking on the contest, this one seem that it would be fun, especially using your fellow fanstorians, I loved it, well done, and a great entry, I will be checking out the voting booth soon.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Thanks, Grace. It was a really fun contest. It was actually harder to write, because it was about fellow authors. - John
Comment from Freeflyer
What fun.
Oh, the next time you do this add me. I could be in America visiting my friends in California. I may resent some comments made by certain reviewers. No one would suspect me. I possibly would have left behind vegemite sandwiches that I had shared with my victim before the nasty deed.
This was great. Good luck in the competition. I am now off to do some research into your fans, people you are fans of and whatever else that can help me check out this "checked handkerchief". Wish me luck.
Maz.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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What fun.
Oh, the next time you do this add me. I could be in America visiting my friends in California. I may resent some comments made by certain reviewers. No one would suspect me. I possibly would have left behind vegemite sandwiches that I had shared with my victim before the nasty deed.
This was great. Good luck in the competition. I am now off to do some research into your fans, people you are fans of and whatever else that can help me check out this "checked handkerchief". Wish me luck.
Maz.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Lol. I'll make it easy for you. It's a woman. Her name starts with a and ends with e. Once you figure her out, look for a story that has the word checkered in it. - What's wrong with vegemite sandwiched. I look at them as fortified mayonaise, lol. Thanks, Maz for your fun review. - John
Comment from Begin Again
John,
Loved it immensely...You did a fantastic job as usual. It's going to be really difficult to determine a winner. I'm amazed how clever and entertaining each and every story was...Must be because it's about us, huh? A writer's ego!!!!
Really enjoyable read...Wish you the best of luck!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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John,
Loved it immensely...You did a fantastic job as usual. It's going to be really difficult to determine a winner. I'm amazed how clever and entertaining each and every story was...Must be because it's about us, huh? A writer's ego!!!!
Really enjoyable read...Wish you the best of luck!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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This was really tough to write. I really like the stories, although someone should tell Jackeyboy that I'm not a girl, lol. I agree, they were really good. Best of luck, Carol. I did see that half-smile, smirk. - John
Comment from Frank Fiction
It seems like an inside joke, so I do not know who did committed the murder, but the writing is excellent, so do I really care. The suspense was good as was the mystery. thanks.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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It seems like an inside joke, so I do not know who did committed the murder, but the writing is excellent, so do I really care. The suspense was good as was the mystery. thanks.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Thanks, Frank. The prompt was quite different. We had to pick a killer from the top ten ranked short story people, provide clues and identify who was killed and why. Based on previous stories for the top ten, I pulled bits and pieces to weave the story. The checkered handkerchief came from Anabelle's story, "The checkered killer," so those reading her work would know it was she who committed the murder. - Thesis
Comment from anabelle
LOL! Well, that got a laugh out of me. That's hilarious. Really good story. You did a wonderful job of bringing things to a peak.
Best of luck in the contest. I'm still laughing, by the way.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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LOL! Well, that got a laugh out of me. That's hilarious. Really good story. You did a wonderful job of bringing things to a peak.
Best of luck in the contest. I'm still laughing, by the way.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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I'm glad you thought it was humorous. Thanks for being a willing participant. - John