Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Change"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Heynonni
I like your musing on the cowboy way. In spite of what Willie Nelson says, I prefer cowboys to doctors and lawyers and such. Maybe what the cowboy's women want to change is that their work keeps them indoors while the cowboy enjoys (and suffers from) the great outdoors. One question - in line 3, did you mean to say "as the cowboy 'works' away", rather than as the cowboy "workers" away? Good thoughts - keep it up - gotta do something when the blows too hard to see the field.
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
I like your musing on the cowboy way. In spite of what Willie Nelson says, I prefer cowboys to doctors and lawyers and such. Maybe what the cowboy's women want to change is that their work keeps them indoors while the cowboy enjoys (and suffers from) the great outdoors. One question - in line 3, did you mean to say "as the cowboy 'works' away", rather than as the cowboy "workers" away? Good thoughts - keep it up - gotta do something when the blows too hard to see the field.
Comment Written 04-May-2010
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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thanks for the comments i will make the change
Comment from Mariea
Loved this one too. The day to day work never stops, but you wouldn't swap it for quids. Just one small 'spag' for u to look at.
3rd line - workers/works
PS. Would u mind if I knew your first name, don't like using pseudonyms.
Have a great day, hugs Mia
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
Loved this one too. The day to day work never stops, but you wouldn't swap it for quids. Just one small 'spag' for u to look at.
3rd line - workers/works
PS. Would u mind if I knew your first name, don't like using pseudonyms.
Have a great day, hugs Mia
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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thanks for the comment Mia
Gary
Comment from Connie C
I have read a few of your poems today and must tell you that I really like what you've submitted so far. I'm guessing that this poem, "Change," pretty much says it all when it comes to the life of a cowboy and the women in his life. I think there might be a small error in the last line: either "women" should be "woman" (singular) or "wants" should be "want" if women is indeed plural. But that's a small error, and the whole poem is nevertheless quite good. I'll be looking for more of your poetry. Connie C
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
I have read a few of your poems today and must tell you that I really like what you've submitted so far. I'm guessing that this poem, "Change," pretty much says it all when it comes to the life of a cowboy and the women in his life. I think there might be a small error in the last line: either "women" should be "woman" (singular) or "wants" should be "want" if women is indeed plural. But that's a small error, and the whole poem is nevertheless quite good. I'll be looking for more of your poetry. Connie C
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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thanks for the comment Connie
Comment from Frank Fiction
A sometimes funny poem about cowboys and their non-cowgirls. I see a cowboy theme for you, the continuation of the cowboy. I enjoyed it. Thanks.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
A sometimes funny poem about cowboys and their non-cowgirls. I see a cowboy theme for you, the continuation of the cowboy. I enjoyed it. Thanks.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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thank you frank
Comment from jwlee211
Ah I am a cowboy and I have to say that country women wouldn't trade us for anything. I like the tribute to the cowboy's work.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
Ah I am a cowboy and I have to say that country women wouldn't trade us for anything. I like the tribute to the cowboy's work.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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thank you
Comment from kintesiegel
that's a nice looking, ah, horse, you got there. Women are crazy. I can tell you that because I am one. Maybe we are all nuts. Anyway, this poem is a good one, says what you want. keep writing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
that's a nice looking, ah, horse, you got there. Women are crazy. I can tell you that because I am one. Maybe we are all nuts. Anyway, this poem is a good one, says what you want. keep writing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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thank you
Comment from Pili Pubul
I like this poem , it seems a shorter version ,inspired in your poem "The quest", It must not be easy the life of a cowboy's wife, isolated and hard.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
I like this poem , it seems a shorter version ,inspired in your poem "The quest", It must not be easy the life of a cowboy's wife, isolated and hard.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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thanks again Pili
Comment from dotti_1965
I love cowboy stories or poems. This one is a different kind of one. It paints a great picture,but it dose not seem to be very smooth when reading.
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
I love cowboy stories or poems. This one is a different kind of one. It paints a great picture,but it dose not seem to be very smooth when reading.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks for the comments
Comment from Josipher32
deepwater,
"Change" was a very well written western poem. There was good use of rhyming throughout. The imagery presented was clever.
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
deepwater,
"Change" was a very well written western poem. There was good use of rhyming throughout. The imagery presented was clever.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you