Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "storm warning"A book of Poetry & Writing
178 total reviews
Comment from missjosi
Excellent piece of poetry you really capture the fear and helplessness felt when in a storm at sea... I myself have known something of this fear with waves higher than the boat and my son a toddler.... horrendous... Lovely work :)
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Excellent piece of poetry you really capture the fear and helplessness felt when in a storm at sea... I myself have known something of this fear with waves higher than the boat and my son a toddler.... horrendous... Lovely work :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from marijmd
The poem sets a nice pace - there is tension in the words as the story unfolds and I felt transported along those stormy waters.
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The poem sets a nice pace - there is tension in the words as the story unfolds and I felt transported along those stormy waters.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from victor 66
I enjoyed your poem and the dynamics with the struggle with nature. I have never been at sea in a storm nor have I been in a place when an earthquake was occurring . The thought of either, scares the hell out of me. People who work and live on the sea, must have great courage. Best wishes.
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I enjoyed your poem and the dynamics with the struggle with nature. I have never been at sea in a storm nor have I been in a place when an earthquake was occurring . The thought of either, scares the hell out of me. People who work and live on the sea, must have great courage. Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from MagKing
This is very beautiful and brilliant to come up with.
It has colourful wordings and a powerful imagery.
I wasn't bored for once; it's almost as if I was there, somewhere in the air watching the adventurous sight this piece has pictured with the use of words and figures of speech.
Great write!
You did too well!
MagKing
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This is very beautiful and brilliant to come up with.
It has colourful wordings and a powerful imagery.
I wasn't bored for once; it's almost as if I was there, somewhere in the air watching the adventurous sight this piece has pictured with the use of words and figures of speech.
Great write!
You did too well!
MagKing
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Delahay
I really like the imagery of the sea being a mountain one must fly over, and the description of the sea with white caps of fury is imaginative. There are many such examples of your imaginative imagery throughout this poem. Very well written.
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I really like the imagery of the sea being a mountain one must fly over, and the description of the sea with white caps of fury is imaginative. There are many such examples of your imaginative imagery throughout this poem. Very well written.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was so lyrical in it's style. I liked the way the storm is portrayed as a character and the antagonist. Nice rhythm and the emotional feeling was strong. Great job.
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This was so lyrical in it's style. I liked the way the storm is portrayed as a character and the antagonist. Nice rhythm and the emotional feeling was strong. Great job.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from words
A lovely and fanciful tail of death at sea.
You have told your tale convincingly well.
Love all of the details.
I almost drowned at sea once, but I did not find it peaceful. I was piseed. LOL
Hugs,s
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A lovely and fanciful tail of death at sea.
You have told your tale convincingly well.
Love all of the details.
I almost drowned at sea once, but I did not find it peaceful. I was piseed. LOL
Hugs,s
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from thedreampeddler
Fantastic.
There isn't much else to say.
No flaws at all.
The story is captivating as well.
awesome. six stars.
thedreampeddler
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Fantastic.
There isn't much else to say.
No flaws at all.
The story is captivating as well.
awesome. six stars.
thedreampeddler
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Poet,
You did a good job describing the horrors of going down at sea... very vivid. I can relate all too much to your theme. My son, daughter-in-law, and grand kids were sailing from Southern Cal, to Cobo. Fifty miles into Mexico they were hit by a sudden squall that pulled up seaweed and fouled their prop. They were at the mercy of the sea for four hours before they were drug aground. They lost almost everything, (including the boat to the reef they hit), but their lives were spared.
Your poem brought back those memories, fortunately, they did not suffer the fate of your muse! Stirring write, well done. Best wishes, Bill
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Hello Poet,
You did a good job describing the horrors of going down at sea... very vivid. I can relate all too much to your theme. My son, daughter-in-law, and grand kids were sailing from Southern Cal, to Cobo. Fifty miles into Mexico they were hit by a sudden squall that pulled up seaweed and fouled their prop. They were at the mercy of the sea for four hours before they were drug aground. They lost almost everything, (including the boat to the reef they hit), but their lives were spared.
Your poem brought back those memories, fortunately, they did not suffer the fate of your muse! Stirring write, well done. Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
Very beautifully written. It flows smoothly unlike the rough waters of the ocean. Lots of great imagery in this.
~~Teresa~~
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Very beautifully written. It flows smoothly unlike the rough waters of the ocean. Lots of great imagery in this.
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 16-Jun-2014