Healing Grief
some things lost can never be retrieved60 total reviews
Comment from Sally Carter
A very beautiful, effective poem. I am sorry I missed it first time around. Just too much to read here!
Congratulations on your well deserved nomination for POM.
Your rhyme and meter are superb, which make this moving poem all the more effective. I was convinced the speaker was talking about the end of a relationship, which I guess is what you intended. You handled that very cleverly - all the clues there on second reading.
A terrific piece of writing, which I enjoyed very much.
Sally
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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A very beautiful, effective poem. I am sorry I missed it first time around. Just too much to read here!
Congratulations on your well deserved nomination for POM.
Your rhyme and meter are superb, which make this moving poem all the more effective. I was convinced the speaker was talking about the end of a relationship, which I guess is what you intended. You handled that very cleverly - all the clues there on second reading.
A terrific piece of writing, which I enjoyed very much.
Sally
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Sally, thank you so very much for stopping by.I apologize for the late reply. I appreciate you very much..jlsavell
Comment from stephenie khan
Another great poem...I really admire your writing style...and I sense this poem is about someone..who you loved very much passed on...I almost lost my husband...to a heart attack and six blockages...so he had bypass surgery...thankfully he is now well..I hope that your grief has become easier by time..I would like to be your fan...but I do not know how to do it...I am new to Fanstory...with affection steffy I wish I could write like you
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Another great poem...I really admire your writing style...and I sense this poem is about someone..who you loved very much passed on...I almost lost my husband...to a heart attack and six blockages...so he had bypass surgery...thankfully he is now well..I hope that your grief has become easier by time..I would like to be your fan...but I do not know how to do it...I am new to Fanstory...with affection steffy I wish I could write like you
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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stephanie khan, thank you so very much for stopping by ot read and review my work. I am thrilled you thought this poem was deserved of a six!! Again thank you..oh yes and I am sure you can write as good if not better than I ...I will check out your work, but it might take a few days.again thank you...jlsavell
Comment from Philip Webster
Well deserving of maximum stars, this is powerful and something we can all identify with. Having parkinsons affects my concentration but it also means I read slowly, and your poem touched me deeply. Excellent.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Well deserving of maximum stars, this is powerful and something we can all identify with. Having parkinsons affects my concentration but it also means I read slowly, and your poem touched me deeply. Excellent.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Philip Webster, once again I am truly humbled by your exceptional review. I must apologize for responding so late, I did not mean to be rude. I must check out your portfolio..
how are you doing..there was a wonderful writer friend on this site who also had parkinsons..his poetry is beautiful, but I think he is no longer on this site.. I will certainly check oput your portfolio..in the meantime..thank you so very much once again for your support of my work..jlsavell
Comment from PUPA
I had missed this one, but somehow I was destined to see it! I so enjoy your beautiful and smooth writing that glides with grace down the page. I love the prayers inbetween and the presentation is so fine.
Thanks for sharing, oh, I haven't told you how touching your words are.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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I had missed this one, but somehow I was destined to see it! I so enjoy your beautiful and smooth writing that glides with grace down the page. I love the prayers inbetween and the presentation is so fine.
Thanks for sharing, oh, I haven't told you how touching your words are.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 21-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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PUPA, I apologize for just responding to this wonderful review. Your comments and compliments touch my heart deeply..again thank you...jlsavell
Comment from Aislinge
What a beautiful poem! The words flowed well, and the emotion drawn out by the verse is intense. The memorandum, though in tribute to a spouse, I imagine, may also apply (and reminded me of) the loss of a parent. You've inspired me to revisit my mother's grave yet again.
Thank you for sharing this moving poem!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2010
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What a beautiful poem! The words flowed well, and the emotion drawn out by the verse is intense. The memorandum, though in tribute to a spouse, I imagine, may also apply (and reminded me of) the loss of a parent. You've inspired me to revisit my mother's grave yet again.
Thank you for sharing this moving poem!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2010
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Aislinge, thank you so very much for stopping by to read nad review my poem. I am truly humbled by your 6. This was a very emotional poem to write. I am sorry for your loss. Yes please do visit your mother's grave..again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
Comment from Adeseun
I want to believe
I want to affirm
Love is real to life
Humility works endurance
Tenderness of heart glues to other
Goodness is key to joy
Care continuously lives in appreciation
Memory paints clearly the personality
Who lives in us had touched the soul
Heart can not be gate crashed
Respect is recipocal
sowing determines the harvest
Blessing of goodwork outlives man
Incorruptible is the preciousness of ston
Deeds are written on marble of time
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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I want to believe
I want to affirm
Love is real to life
Humility works endurance
Tenderness of heart glues to other
Goodness is key to joy
Care continuously lives in appreciation
Memory paints clearly the personality
Who lives in us had touched the soul
Heart can not be gate crashed
Respect is recipocal
sowing determines the harvest
Blessing of goodwork outlives man
Incorruptible is the preciousness of ston
Deeds are written on marble of time
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Adeseun, thank you so much for stopping by. What a beautiful commentary you have written here. I shall remember it..again thank you..jlsavell
Comment from midgev
What a beautiful poem. You had me believe you would reunite. And I believe you will, someday, in another time and space. I love the repeated appeal to God, changed up a bit each time. The ending was a sad surprise. Loved it!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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What a beautiful poem. You had me believe you would reunite. And I believe you will, someday, in another time and space. I love the repeated appeal to God, changed up a bit each time. The ending was a sad surprise. Loved it!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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midgev, I apologize for just responding to this wonderful review. Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate you...jlsavell
Comment from Hitcher
Beautifully written Jimi, absolutely beautiful, you have written loss and all the emotions associated with it with a refined pen, the reader is drawn in, mesmerized and flooded with deep stirring emotion, I think this one will touch the heart and minds of all who read it...LOVED IT!
Definitely worth waiting for! :)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Beautifully written Jimi, absolutely beautiful, you have written loss and all the emotions associated with it with a refined pen, the reader is drawn in, mesmerized and flooded with deep stirring emotion, I think this one will touch the heart and minds of all who read it...LOVED IT!
Definitely worth waiting for! :)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Hitcher, once again I must thank you for such a wonderful review and for your loyal support of my work. Your comments and compliments are always so encouraging and up-building..again thank you my friend..sorry about the delay in responding..I cannot seem to catch up with responding and reviewing..jimi
Comment from Gooloom
Can grief be ever gotten over? why is it that after a person dies we want more time "to make between us these things right." Jsavell, you have written a very poignant treatise on Grief. "I need to see his loving face--God grant me a moment of Grace" All your cries are now coming to the surface. You have brought out your sense of futility and regret very well in your poem. And lastly the rose you take to put on his grave ,your waiting to be held in his robust arms all are beautifully written in poetic form. And lastly "I needed to come to this place and let him know I am all right" shows that to some extent you have come to terms with your grief. Well written poignant piece. Gooloom
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Can grief be ever gotten over? why is it that after a person dies we want more time "to make between us these things right." Jsavell, you have written a very poignant treatise on Grief. "I need to see his loving face--God grant me a moment of Grace" All your cries are now coming to the surface. You have brought out your sense of futility and regret very well in your poem. And lastly the rose you take to put on his grave ,your waiting to be held in his robust arms all are beautifully written in poetic form. And lastly "I needed to come to this place and let him know I am all right" shows that to some extent you have come to terms with your grief. Well written poignant piece. Gooloom
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Gooloom, thank you so very much for such a wonderful review. I appreciate and respect reviewers who really take time with one's poetry, as you do.. again thank you//
I apologize for the late response..
jlsavell
Comment from kingskid
Wow I actually do not have the right or sufficient words to desribe this beautiful tribute to your late loved one.
Your words are poignant and sad.
Your grief and longing come through so very strongly.
How sad it is to be the one left behind.
This is one of the most powerful poems I have read on grief. I could not pick out a particular verse, they are all beautiful.
Blessings
Norms
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Wow I actually do not have the right or sufficient words to desribe this beautiful tribute to your late loved one.
Your words are poignant and sad.
Your grief and longing come through so very strongly.
How sad it is to be the one left behind.
This is one of the most powerful poems I have read on grief. I could not pick out a particular verse, they are all beautiful.
Blessings
Norms
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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kingskid, now I am at a loss for words and truly truly humbled. thank you so very very much. I am moved that you thought my offering was worthy of a 6. oh goodness thank you once again.
I apologize for just responding..jlsavell