The Painter and the Dragon
he could have been a fearless knight21 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
Thanks for reviving this writing! I loved this little tale and I always love monster stories, even when they are not monsters. A very nice "modern" fairy tale, with as very positive tone and finish.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thanks for reviving this writing! I loved this little tale and I always love monster stories, even when they are not monsters. A very nice "modern" fairy tale, with as very positive tone and finish.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Hi Jim,
I pulled this out from 2010, soon after joining Fanstory. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate your kind review, and the gift of stars!
Cheers,
Kimbob
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It seems you've always been a talented writer!
Comment from papa55mike
A slight change in subjects opened many new doors into his life. I love the twist at the end. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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A slight change in subjects opened many new doors into his life. I love the twist at the end. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Hi Mike,
Thanks so much for your kind words, the wish for luck with my writing, and the gift of stars! I dug this one out from 2010, the year I joined Fanstory.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I thought this had many lovely lines. It would be the kind of poem I would use in a middle school to be an example of a fantasy poem. Nice lines include:
Then up the slippery precipice,
The dragon swiftly climbs.
Its curly claws don't tear her dress.
Nor is she begrimed.
and also:
Amble, gambol, ramble, roam,
Along the beach below,
She reels and falls into the foam!
Her horse runs to and fro!
Nice read.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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I thought this had many lovely lines. It would be the kind of poem I would use in a middle school to be an example of a fantasy poem. Nice lines include:
Then up the slippery precipice,
The dragon swiftly climbs.
Its curly claws don't tear her dress.
Nor is she begrimed.
and also:
Amble, gambol, ramble, roam,
Along the beach below,
She reels and falls into the foam!
Her horse runs to and fro!
Nice read.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much, Crystie! I really appreciate your kind review, and so many shiny stars!
I've been dealing with an aching hip, and not able to sit in this chair very long. So I thought I'd resurrect a few poems from my first year in Fanstory, 2010. This particular poem only received 8 reviews back then, but now it's up to "Recognized" status, at least, with 21 reviews.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment from bard owl
I finally found it. You have written many things! This is an exceptional piece of poetry. It goes along with my reading Beowulf recently. I enjoyed the smoothness of his poem, the rhythm and rhyme and the happy ending!
Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I finally found it. You have written many things! This is an exceptional piece of poetry. It goes along with my reading Beowulf recently. I enjoyed the smoothness of his poem, the rhythm and rhyme and the happy ending!
Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Wow! Thanks so much for searching out this early poem, Linda. I really didn't expect you to do that. I just wanted to share my dragon poem. I appreciate your kind review, and all the glitter!!!
Big Hugs
Kimbob
Comment from adewpearl
amble, gambol, ramble, roam - that line alone is utterly fantastic with its internal rhyme, alliteration, use of great verbs, flow :-)
Wonderful flow and abab rhyming, excellent story line - great visuals - this is just a delight, my poetic friend :-) What a fun story poem this would be to read aloud. Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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amble, gambol, ramble, roam - that line alone is utterly fantastic with its internal rhyme, alliteration, use of great verbs, flow :-)
Wonderful flow and abab rhyming, excellent story line - great visuals - this is just a delight, my poetic friend :-) What a fun story poem this would be to read aloud. Brooke
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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oh thank you so much, Brooke! This is one of my favorite Children's poems. I've never read it to any kids. In fact, I don't think I've read any of my poetry to kids. But my son has. He is an elementary school teacher. Another teacher in East Saint John is a friend of my former boss at Moosehead, and she has also read my poetry to her students. If I ever get published, I would love to visit schools and the library and read to kids. I have watched Sheree Fitch present her poems to some kids when she was in Rothesay one time. She is fabulous with them. I'm so glad you liked this poem! It took me a long time to complete it, but worth every minute!
Kimbob
Comment from Jenn Starr
This was cool- Not much else comes to mind other than this being a pretty cool poem- I can't think of any criticisms- I really enjoyed it! ;)
Take care
JennStarr*
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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This was cool- Not much else comes to mind other than this being a pretty cool poem- I can't think of any criticisms- I really enjoyed it! ;)
Take care
JennStarr*
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Thanks Jenn! I am so glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you stopping by to review my poem, and for the stars as well!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment from Minglement
This is much longer poetry than I usually choose to read, but I couldn't put it aside. The rhyme and rythm so captivated me, as well as your beautifully told story. Bravo!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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This is much longer poetry than I usually choose to read, but I couldn't put it aside. The rhyme and rythm so captivated me, as well as your beautifully told story. Bravo!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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thanks so much for stopping by to review my poem, Minglement! It is quite a saga, isn't it? I just couldn't seem to find an ending, so I kept writing. I can see it as a complete book on its own someday. I hope. I really appreciate your kind review, and the stars!
cheers
Kimbob
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You're so welcome. I really enjoyed it. Take care -
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You're so welcome. I really enjoyed it. Take care -
Comment from animatqua
Oh I love this story! I do not see dragons as monsters, but as ancient, wise, and filled with Creation. I am so glad you chose to portray them in this beautiful light.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Oh I love this story! I do not see dragons as monsters, but as ancient, wise, and filled with Creation. I am so glad you chose to portray them in this beautiful light.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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thanks, animatqua! Did you read my other dragon poem, "The Dragon of Dark Harbour"? I love including dragons in my poetry. I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for your kind review, and the stars!
Kimbob
Comment from DrJane
This poem is absolutely delightful! Your imagery is so much fun and draws the reader in immediately. Notes: Stanza 13, Line 1: "suddenly"; Stanza 16, Line 3: "its"; Stanza 18, Line 1: "its"; Stanza 22, Line 4 and St. 23, Line 1: Need quote marks since these are two different stanzas; Stanza 25, Line 1: "grateful"; Line 3: "Sedgewick"; Also please consider capitalizing the beginnings of all lines for consistency.
Blessings,
Jane
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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This poem is absolutely delightful! Your imagery is so much fun and draws the reader in immediately. Notes: Stanza 13, Line 1: "suddenly"; Stanza 16, Line 3: "its"; Stanza 18, Line 1: "its"; Stanza 22, Line 4 and St. 23, Line 1: Need quote marks since these are two different stanzas; Stanza 25, Line 1: "grateful"; Line 3: "Sedgewick"; Also please consider capitalizing the beginnings of all lines for consistency.
Blessings,
Jane
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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Thanks Dr Jane. I have made the corrections you suggested. You have a good eye! I hope you might review some of my other poems.
Kim
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Thanks so much, Kim~~I'll be watching for them. :)
Blessings,
Jane
Comment from rama devi
Warm welcome to FS Father flaps!
This is delightful and extremely well penned.
You must have been writing poetry a LOGN time to have developed such perfect craft
original rhyming, flawless meter adn flow, fine imagery and inventive story-line, all key ingredients for poetic storytelling. this would make a superb entry for the Tell a story in a poem contest.
This is quite long, but held my attention from start to finish. enjoyable and entertaining. I applaud your masterful use of poetic devices like alliteration, etc. Your original rhyming is commendable!
favorite bits-
He takes some brushes from his cloak,
made fresh from tail of squirrel.
A wooden panel made of oak
will soon feel Sedgewick's swirl.
Where crooked cliffs are splished and splashed
with pounding ocean flow,
the bones of whales lay dished and dashed,
as white as any snow.
I did not notice any nits or spags, but also did not read second time with 'spag-specs' on.
Looking forward to perusing more of your work.
Polished and impressive.
Warmly, rd
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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Warm welcome to FS Father flaps!
This is delightful and extremely well penned.
You must have been writing poetry a LOGN time to have developed such perfect craft
original rhyming, flawless meter adn flow, fine imagery and inventive story-line, all key ingredients for poetic storytelling. this would make a superb entry for the Tell a story in a poem contest.
This is quite long, but held my attention from start to finish. enjoyable and entertaining. I applaud your masterful use of poetic devices like alliteration, etc. Your original rhyming is commendable!
favorite bits-
He takes some brushes from his cloak,
made fresh from tail of squirrel.
A wooden panel made of oak
will soon feel Sedgewick's swirl.
Where crooked cliffs are splished and splashed
with pounding ocean flow,
the bones of whales lay dished and dashed,
as white as any snow.
I did not notice any nits or spags, but also did not read second time with 'spag-specs' on.
Looking forward to perusing more of your work.
Polished and impressive.
Warmly, rd
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind words, rama devi. This is one of my favorite poems, but many more to come. I am new to Fanstory so I'm not sure about contests yet, or how to go about it. Just sharing my poems right now. You never know where the pen will take you when you start a new poem!
cheers
Kim