Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
The story is progressing nicely despite the continued pressure of cassie's kidnap.
It seems like Joe and sara's relationship may also be getting basck on track.
I am pleased to hear that your chemo theraphy went well - another big step...
Juliette
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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The story is progressing nicely despite the continued pressure of cassie's kidnap.
It seems like Joe and sara's relationship may also be getting basck on track.
I am pleased to hear that your chemo theraphy went well - another big step...
Juliette
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. Your characters are real people who get irritable and say things they wish they had not. Your writing draws me right into their space.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. Your characters are real people who get irritable and say things they wish they had not. Your writing draws me right into their space.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Earthwriter
very nice Barbara I thought you conveyed the drama of this piece really nicely i could picture the situation quite easily well done
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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very nice Barbara I thought you conveyed the drama of this piece really nicely i could picture the situation quite easily well done
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from marcellawachtel
Lots of action here; very well paced, and this reader is grateful for the dribs and drabs of information you give us as the plot unfolds. I hope you are considering bringing Cassie home alive, well and untouched.
And How are you? Was it as bad as you anticipated? I'm hoping that each subsequent treatment will affect you less. Do stop and rest. Breath deep and remember you are on your way to wellness. There will be time enough for all you need to do. Plenty of it. Thanks for your virtual hug. Her's one right back at you!
Marcella
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Lots of action here; very well paced, and this reader is grateful for the dribs and drabs of information you give us as the plot unfolds. I hope you are considering bringing Cassie home alive, well and untouched.
And How are you? Was it as bad as you anticipated? I'm hoping that each subsequent treatment will affect you less. Do stop and rest. Breath deep and remember you are on your way to wellness. There will be time enough for all you need to do. Plenty of it. Thanks for your virtual hug. Her's one right back at you!
Marcella
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. The chemo treatment wasn't too bad. The worse side effect is being tired.
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That is good news.I hope that that will be the worst of it till it's over. Marcella
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi barbara,
The pace is picking up nicely now and the introduction of a white slave trafficking ring for porn is very topical.
Well written and good tension throughout.
Patrick
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Hi barbara,
The pace is picking up nicely now and the introduction of a white slave trafficking ring for porn is very topical.
Well written and good tension throughout.
Patrick
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from E.P. Thomas
Barbara,
Another great chapter with a good blend of narrative and descriptive writing. The pace is just right for the story line and the characters are developing nicely. Glad to see you back at your craft.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Barbara,
Another great chapter with a good blend of narrative and descriptive writing. The pace is just right for the story line and the characters are developing nicely. Glad to see you back at your craft.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Tellis
I'm glad she's beginning to think straight about Joe. He sounds liek a terrific guy and not the animal she is worried about. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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I'm glad she's beginning to think straight about Joe. He sounds liek a terrific guy and not the animal she is worried about. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Meshe Nair
Another interesting chapter. Great to see that you are back so soon from chemo and already wrote another chapter. Hope you are feeling better and stronger each day.
A minor word missing
room, she Joe was on the couch = room, she saw Joe was on the couch
Meshe Nair
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Another interesting chapter. Great to see that you are back so soon from chemo and already wrote another chapter. Hope you are feeling better and stronger each day.
A minor word missing
room, she Joe was on the couch = room, she saw Joe was on the couch
Meshe Nair
Comment Written 01-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Yes, I will have to make that correction. Thank you for catching it.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
Nice job with this chapter.
I've been informed that I'm too liberal with "fivers." and if the post needs any work I shouldn't award them.
I found one "nit" but I'm not taking off for it.
[she Joe was on the couch] -- You left something out.
Ted
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Hi Barbara :)
Nice job with this chapter.
I've been informed that I'm too liberal with "fivers." and if the post needs any work I shouldn't award them.
I found one "nit" but I'm not taking off for it.
[she Joe was on the couch] -- You left something out.
Ted
Comment Written 01-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Yes, I need to make that correction. It has been mentioned to me and I forgot. I will take care of it. I think I mentioned to you before 1-4 mistaked a 5, 5-8 mistakes a 4. I don't know to do it so people don't accuse me of favoritism. Or get angry over nic picking.
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Hi Barbara :)
An honest critique is just that. If a member gets upset with "nits" they shouldn't be posting material for review.
Ted
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I guess that's true. I have had people tell me that I am being nit picky.
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I don't think you're a nit-picker. Norma is and I love her for it, We sometimes disagree, but she's usually right on.
Ted
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Thank you. I try not to nit pick.
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If you see a "nit" mention it. You don't have to downgrade for a few.
Writers hate "nits" because they want to believe the piece is perfect.
Ted
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I wait for 4 different nits before I downgrade it. If it's the same nit over and over again, I don't.
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Hi :)
That's a good policy :)
Comment from carl8447
good work, you have yourself a nice little caper, you just have to be careful which path you go down, you don't want to go down the boring, good work, watch your path.
carl
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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good work, you have yourself a nice little caper, you just have to be careful which path you go down, you don't want to go down the boring, good work, watch your path.
carl
Comment Written 01-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.