Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Disclosure"A complete story in written as a poem.
37 total reviews
Comment from Patricia Forsythe
Hello,
Congratulations on your win. This is a beautiful poem
as the truth has become known on the deathbed but the result is sad for him. Well done.
Pat
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Hello,
Congratulations on your win. This is a beautiful poem
as the truth has become known on the deathbed but the result is sad for him. Well done.
Pat
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Pat that you so much for giving me one of those coveted six stars. I appreciate the congratulations. I'm glad you liked the poem.
Beth
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You don't need this review, but I had to tell you: this poem is elegant. I haven't read anything posted that could touch it. What a great way to win a contest. Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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You don't need this review, but I had to tell you: this poem is elegant. I haven't read anything posted that could touch it. What a great way to win a contest. Nancy
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Nancy thank you so much for the six star rating. Actually I did need that one becuase just one more review gave it an all time best status which I didn't have on this one. I really appreciate those lovely comments. I'm just sorry you didn't get points or member dollars for your time.
Beth
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Congratulations! Nancy
Comment from rama devi
WOW! I can see why this won. Excellent poem - poignant, well crafted and presented with stunning artwork. CONGRATULATIONS on winning he contest. Proud of you. NO nits except the mete sounds ever so slightly forced on the line You were kidnapped at two. Because of the unnatural accent on WERE.
The poem is otherwise masterful and certainlydeserves the win! BRAVO
Love rd
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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WOW! I can see why this won. Excellent poem - poignant, well crafted and presented with stunning artwork. CONGRATULATIONS on winning he contest. Proud of you. NO nits except the mete sounds ever so slightly forced on the line You were kidnapped at two. Because of the unnatural accent on WERE.
The poem is otherwise masterful and certainlydeserves the win! BRAVO
Love rd
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for the review on one that didn't carry any points or dollars. I was pleasantly surprised to win. I enjoy doing the poems that you have to work certain words into. I may take another look at the line you mention.
Love,
Beth
Comment from bob cullen
Congratulations on a most deserved victory.
Three things amazed me about this poem. First it didn't receive at least one six star rating, I've just rectified that. Second, someone gave it only four stars, obviously she doesn't understand balance and syllable count, And thirdly, it beat my entry. Just joking.
A truly great poem. I am envious of your skill
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Congratulations on a most deserved victory.
Three things amazed me about this poem. First it didn't receive at least one six star rating, I've just rectified that. Second, someone gave it only four stars, obviously she doesn't understand balance and syllable count, And thirdly, it beat my entry. Just joking.
A truly great poem. I am envious of your skill
Comment Written 19-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2010
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Thank you Bob, I really appreciate the six star rating. I think that tends to happen when you post late in the week after everyone runs out of six stars. Actually I had wondered if only entries with six stars and with all time best status were considered. It is nice to know that doesn't affect it. I was surprised to win.
Beth
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Thank you Bob, I really appreciate the six star rating. I think that tends to happen when you post late in the week after everyone runs out of six stars. Actually I had wondered if only entries with six stars and with all time best status were considered. It is nice to know that doesn't affect it. I was surprised to win.
Beth
Comment from sasil
I love a poem that tells a story, and this one does it well! Congratulations on your winning entry, poet. I was moved by the element of "deception of conception", and wondered what relief this unveiling provided the narrator. Emotional work balanced in meter and rhyme. Gifted...
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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I love a poem that tells a story, and this one does it well! Congratulations on your winning entry, poet. I was moved by the element of "deception of conception", and wondered what relief this unveiling provided the narrator. Emotional work balanced in meter and rhyme. Gifted...
Comment Written 18-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for the lovely review. It was a pleasant surprise to win.
Beth
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Have a blessed holiday!
Comment from Mastery
Congratulations, Beth! Wow...what A great job you have done here. You deserved to win. I particularly liked this stanza:
"A man is bound with earthly ties
entwined around his heart,
but sometimes when he learns the truth,
it tears his world apart."
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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Congratulations, Beth! Wow...what A great job you have done here. You deserved to win. I particularly liked this stanza:
"A man is bound with earthly ties
entwined around his heart,
but sometimes when he learns the truth,
it tears his world apart."
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 18-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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Thank you Bob, It is one of the few things I've written that wasn't based on anything personal. I was shocked that I won because I've never managed to get better than a second on the FanStory based contest.
Comment from Realist101
How did I miss this?? Is is a blind contest? WHat a devastating situation! Perfect work for this, it's hard to incorporate words given like this! Congratulations Beth! VERY outstanding work!! ") This would also be a great short story! ") Susan
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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How did I miss this?? Is is a blind contest? WHat a devastating situation! Perfect work for this, it's hard to incorporate words given like this! Congratulations Beth! VERY outstanding work!! ") This would also be a great short story! ") Susan
Comment Written 18-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much Susan, No it wasn't a blind contest. It is about the only thing I've written that is entirely fiction. I couldn't believe it won since I've never gotten a first place in those contests before. By the way, Thanks for the lovely Christmas card.
Merry Christmas,
Beth
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") well, this wasn't in my messages? I'm sorry. Well, it's very well done, you are a great writer. And you're welcome for the card! I'm happy it made it okay! ") Stay warm!! HUG! Susan
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Congratulations on your win with this one. It is extraordinary and so worthy of the win! Love the flow and the story! Well done! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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Congratulations on your win with this one. It is extraordinary and so worthy of the win! Love the flow and the story! Well done! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 18-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much. It is the first time I've won a first place in fanstory contests. I'm surprised and pleased.
Beth
Comment from WRITER1
How very well you weaved this wonderful piece. I wish you so much luck in this contest. I personally have never tried to get one of these off the ground.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2010
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How very well you weaved this wonderful piece. I wish you so much luck in this contest. I personally have never tried to get one of these off the ground.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and comment. I actually enjoy doing these with the words. I enjoy word puzzles so maybe that is why.
Beth
Comment from humpwhistle
Nice job, Beth. I have yet to try one of these "word" contests. It looks difficult to me. This reads much like the lyrics of an old English or Scottish folk song. I can hear the fiddle. Good Luck. Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2010
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Nice job, Beth. I have yet to try one of these "word" contests. It looks difficult to me. This reads much like the lyrics of an old English or Scottish folk song. I can hear the fiddle. Good Luck. Peace, Lee
Comment Written 29-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2010
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Thanks Lee, I appreciatete the review and comments. I've been trying to hear that fiddle. Actually these contests where you have to use certain words are fun. I think it's because I like word puzzles. They aren't that hard to do. You should try one.
Beth