Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Chapter 12; part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Scornwell
Once again, you story is well written. The characters come across well and the dialog sounds natural and seems appropriate for the characters. I didn't find any mistakes.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Once again, you story is well written. The characters come across well and the dialog sounds natural and seems appropriate for the characters. I didn't find any mistakes.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Well done. You've captured the conflict and confusion one would expect when The chain of command is challenged while trying to cope with a fluid situation. The last part of the chapter--the execution of the operation--is a bit of a summary. It needs fleshing out, when you're up to it. I'm anxious to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Well done. You've captured the conflict and confusion one would expect when The chain of command is challenged while trying to cope with a fluid situation. The last part of the chapter--the execution of the operation--is a bit of a summary. It needs fleshing out, when you're up to it. I'm anxious to see what happens next.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from FredCollingwood
Another wonderful contribution to your book. I've been enjoying it. I, too have been wondering how you are doing, and I wish you the very best.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Another wonderful contribution to your book. I've been enjoying it. I, too have been wondering how you are doing, and I wish you the very best.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Fireshadow
Barbara, this is another terrific installment in this complex and very interesting storyline. The narrative flows smoothly propelled by crisp, sharp dialogue and excellent descriptions. I look forward to reading the outcome of this specific event, hoping that all girls are left unharmed. Very well done, my friend.
Ama
P.S. Also look forward to you future posting on your chemo saga. I always keep you in my prayers. Many blessings to you.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Barbara, this is another terrific installment in this complex and very interesting storyline. The narrative flows smoothly propelled by crisp, sharp dialogue and excellent descriptions. I look forward to reading the outcome of this specific event, hoping that all girls are left unharmed. Very well done, my friend.
Ama
P.S. Also look forward to you future posting on your chemo saga. I always keep you in my prayers. Many blessings to you.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
This particular chapter has me intrigued about YOUR past. Have you ever worked with the police or military? Has your husband been able to tell you about maneuvers in such a manner that you can write them out? This was well constructed and came out in a very believable manner. I will remember you in my prayers as you continue your chemo - blessing on the anonymous angels that help you to promote your work! ~patty~
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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This particular chapter has me intrigued about YOUR past. Have you ever worked with the police or military? Has your husband been able to tell you about maneuvers in such a manner that you can write them out? This was well constructed and came out in a very believable manner. I will remember you in my prayers as you continue your chemo - blessing on the anonymous angels that help you to promote your work! ~patty~
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. My husbamd did twenty-three years in the military. He was a CID agent, so I have used him and some of my friends' husbands, special forces for information.
Comment from Begin Again
Barbara,
How ever and whenever you are able to post is a blessing to all of us..Your story continues to intrigue and offer an array of interesting aspects to it. Thank you for continuing to entertain us during your own personal struggles.
My thoughts and prayers are with you...
Smiles, CArol
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Barbara,
How ever and whenever you are able to post is a blessing to all of us..Your story continues to intrigue and offer an array of interesting aspects to it. Thank you for continuing to entertain us during your own personal struggles.
My thoughts and prayers are with you...
Smiles, CArol
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. If I stop writing or being busy, I would be a weeping mess.
Comment from bookishfabler
Hey there. Great job. This was a very action packed and exciting chapter.
He glanced in the direction (-that)(the) voice came from and saw the dark shadow of a female figure shielding a larger male figure.
"Matt called you and told you (to) keep me busy until he arrived, didn't he?"
"There's no way he could have (could've)prevented it." (I don't think she would take the time to say each word. LOL)
Joe rubbed his forehead with his hand. "How much fire power is the reaction team bringing with them?"
(Unless he usually rubs his forehead with his foot, I'd leave out with his hand.)
The second man fired and missed Joe. As Joe shot his weapon, a third man entered the room from a door on the left. The second man fell, as the third man wrestled Joe to the floor.
(I would give each of these men something distinguishing, say a fat guy and a bearded man, a man with no neck or a guy wth a potmarked face. then refer to this feature, since the team doesn't know there names. Reason, after a while, first guy, second guy, and thrid guy all get blended.)
Hugs and Happy Holidays
Book
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Hey there. Great job. This was a very action packed and exciting chapter.
He glanced in the direction (-that)(the) voice came from and saw the dark shadow of a female figure shielding a larger male figure.
"Matt called you and told you (to) keep me busy until he arrived, didn't he?"
"There's no way he could have (could've)prevented it." (I don't think she would take the time to say each word. LOL)
Joe rubbed his forehead with his hand. "How much fire power is the reaction team bringing with them?"
(Unless he usually rubs his forehead with his foot, I'd leave out with his hand.)
The second man fired and missed Joe. As Joe shot his weapon, a third man entered the room from a door on the left. The second man fell, as the third man wrestled Joe to the floor.
(I would give each of these men something distinguishing, say a fat guy and a bearded man, a man with no neck or a guy wth a potmarked face. then refer to this feature, since the team doesn't know there names. Reason, after a while, first guy, second guy, and thrid guy all get blended.)
Hugs and Happy Holidays
Book
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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I like your ideas and get to them. I made a hard copy so I don't miss anything. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Tellis
Whoohoo, some really good action here and I hope they can take these scumbags down without anyone one the good side dying. I really enjoyed this chapter.
Tellis
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Whoohoo, some really good action here and I hope they can take these scumbags down without anyone one the good side dying. I really enjoyed this chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 08-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from K. L. Bauman
Love the action and suspense--and the hero, giving his life for the girls, of course. As usual, you have written a wonderful, gripping chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Love the action and suspense--and the hero, giving his life for the girls, of course. As usual, you have written a wonderful, gripping chapter.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from misscookie
God bless you and keep you strong through the chemo.
As always your story still keeps me reading it to the end.
there is never a dull moment.
this is a great write. I'm sending you somthing Pm If I do it correct.
stay strong my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2010
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God bless you and keep you strong through the chemo.
As always your story still keeps me reading it to the end.
there is never a dull moment.
this is a great write. I'm sending you somthing Pm If I do it correct.
stay strong my friend.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouragement.