Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "the twilight of history and age,"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from elainec4
deepwater,
I thought this an excellent work, and I enjoyed reading and dwelling on your thoughts. My favorite line is: "leaving you to explore the foreign but new roads of life". Look forward to discovering more of your work. elaine
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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deepwater,
I thought this an excellent work, and I enjoyed reading and dwelling on your thoughts. My favorite line is: "leaving you to explore the foreign but new roads of life". Look forward to discovering more of your work. elaine
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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thank you for reading Elaine
Comment from acvguard11
great job..i love the picture you chose....and also i see why this piece is recognized and an all time best...it truly deserves this recognitions...dont let others discourage you if you love to write..great job and keep writing
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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great job..i love the picture you chose....and also i see why this piece is recognized and an all time best...it truly deserves this recognitions...dont let others discourage you if you love to write..great job and keep writing
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
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thank you and i do love to write
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great free verse on the young taking on the world, but i think they need to learn from the elders so they won't make mistakes over and over again.
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great free verse on the young taking on the world, but i think they need to learn from the elders so they won't make mistakes over and over again.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
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thanks for the review
Comment from Paradox Tremors
A great write my friend. I love how you describe the journey of life and well wishes to those you meet along the path. Beautiful and well thought out.
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A great write my friend. I love how you describe the journey of life and well wishes to those you meet along the path. Beautiful and well thought out.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
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thank you
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent poem, which reflected the thoughts of an old man worried about the dark days ahead. I do appreciate your feelings, but I have some disagreement with you on some points. I know full well, it would be foolhardy to criticise a poem which has all the seals, but here are my two cents.
1. What you say about age is true, but you cannot say the same about history. You say it is twilight of history - obviously you mean darkness to come. Incidentally there is a twilight before the dawn also.
2. History is looking up. We have not had any major wars for almost sixty five years. Even the warring factions of the dark continent are realizing the futility of war as an instrument for conflict resolution. The age old autocracies and dictatorships are giving way to democracy. Even Saudi Arabia has now a registered political party for the last few days. The jasmine revolution is spreading fast and the dictators of the Middle East are fleeing, one by one. It is a unipolar world. Of course, the recession, which is troubling now, shall pass, sooner or later. In short, history is looking up, and is much better than what it used to be. There is less scope for negativity. If you mean it is the twilight before the dawn, I agree. However, it wouldn't agree with the general tenre of this poem. I strongly recommend you delete the history part and confine the poem about age for which I have no disagreement.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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An excellent poem, which reflected the thoughts of an old man worried about the dark days ahead. I do appreciate your feelings, but I have some disagreement with you on some points. I know full well, it would be foolhardy to criticise a poem which has all the seals, but here are my two cents.
1. What you say about age is true, but you cannot say the same about history. You say it is twilight of history - obviously you mean darkness to come. Incidentally there is a twilight before the dawn also.
2. History is looking up. We have not had any major wars for almost sixty five years. Even the warring factions of the dark continent are realizing the futility of war as an instrument for conflict resolution. The age old autocracies and dictatorships are giving way to democracy. Even Saudi Arabia has now a registered political party for the last few days. The jasmine revolution is spreading fast and the dictators of the Middle East are fleeing, one by one. It is a unipolar world. Of course, the recession, which is troubling now, shall pass, sooner or later. In short, history is looking up, and is much better than what it used to be. There is less scope for negativity. If you mean it is the twilight before the dawn, I agree. However, it wouldn't agree with the general tenre of this poem. I strongly recommend you delete the history part and confine the poem about age for which I have no disagreement.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
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each to his own my friend i was a soldier and in three wars in the last 40 years remember the US is just one contry in this big world,
Comment from Lise Deangelo
I like the language and rhythm of this writing. An example of what I like in this poem is in the second line: "...travel our souls have engaged..." This is just so evocative. I was wondering if "and" would read smoother than "but" in line five? Overall I think this writing is well-written and polished.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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I like the language and rhythm of this writing. An example of what I like in this poem is in the second line: "...travel our souls have engaged..." This is just so evocative. I was wondering if "and" would read smoother than "but" in line five? Overall I think this writing is well-written and polished.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
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thanks
Comment from NightWriter
"the twilight of history and age" is a beautifully written poem of reflection and journey. Reads smooth with good rhythm throughout. Well done.
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"the twilight of history and age" is a beautifully written poem of reflection and journey. Reads smooth with good rhythm throughout. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
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thank you
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
deepwater:
this sounds as if it is going to be a wonderful
book of introspection as you write from the
heart about your reflections of the dreams and
memories you've had over your lifetime
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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deepwater:
this sounds as if it is going to be a wonderful
book of introspection as you write from the
heart about your reflections of the dreams and
memories you've had over your lifetime
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
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thanks for reading jan
Comment from Addy García
Deepwater:
So we are each our journey on that path of life.
And your poems are interesting thoughts, questions and statements guardre in my heart.
much joy.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Deepwater:
So we are each our journey on that path of life.
And your poems are interesting thoughts, questions and statements guardre in my heart.
much joy.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
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thank you
Comment from mountainwriter49
This is a most interesting musing and
reflection. I enjoyed the read and find
myself still thinking about it after the read.
Thanks for sharing.
ray
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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This is a most interesting musing and
reflection. I enjoyed the read and find
myself still thinking about it after the read.
Thanks for sharing.
ray
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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welcome ray