Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Part four Chapter four"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from God's Writer
A very well written short story. I like the flow of this story. You kept my interest up throughout the whole story. The feelings you use sets this poem above much of what I have read on this site. Great job!!!!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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A very well written short story. I like the flow of this story. You kept my interest up throughout the whole story. The feelings you use sets this poem above much of what I have read on this site. Great job!!!!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for sharing.
Comment from sunnilicious
Advertising.... I'll be darn. I studied 3-years of advertising, marketing & communications in my undergrad years. I'm a Bewitched Fan. And the amount of commercial jingles that I can sing could just shock anyone senseless. So I totally love this chapter!
I don't ever want a divorce. So I'm not married yet. But Anna & Bobby, it's an imperative. That title?!!!
You kept me reading. It is coming along as a good book. Great author notes too. Very informative.
All the best,
-Sunnilicious
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Advertising.... I'll be darn. I studied 3-years of advertising, marketing & communications in my undergrad years. I'm a Bewitched Fan. And the amount of commercial jingles that I can sing could just shock anyone senseless. So I totally love this chapter!
I don't ever want a divorce. So I'm not married yet. But Anna & Bobby, it's an imperative. That title?!!!
You kept me reading. It is coming along as a good book. Great author notes too. Very informative.
All the best,
-Sunnilicious
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and the support. I appreciate both.
Comment from Nanashirley
It's a good chapter. I like the way the man works. I am not sure there are many that would go this fare to help someone especially where violence is a sure thing.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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It's a good chapter. I like the way the man works. I am not sure there are many that would go this fare to help someone especially where violence is a sure thing.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jennlynne
Thanks so much Barb for your work. Domestic violence should not and must not be tolerated in any form. I very much like your characters. The dialog flows well as does the chapter. Looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Thanks so much Barb for your work. Domestic violence should not and must not be tolerated in any form. I very much like your characters. The dialog flows well as does the chapter. Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Herb
I've missed to much to really understand the plot. But this seems well written. I was able to follow the dialog with ease. the chapter was maybe a little small?
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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I've missed to much to really understand the plot. But this seems well written. I was able to follow the dialog with ease. the chapter was maybe a little small?
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nanna
Sorry I came in at the middle, but I felt I could understand the character Troy. At first I wondered if he was looking for the woman meaning her harm, but then I became sure he meant well. I found it a little sad how quickly her boss gave away her location, if it had been a nasty husband then the consequences could have been bad. I see at the end that you are involved or have been in battered women's movements. I work at Citizens Advice as a volunteer and we are able to put people in touch with the safe house in the city. Sadly we cannot have a safe house on our island, it is too small and the men would soon find it. Good luck with your story and I hope all goes well for you. You sound very brave. nanna
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Sorry I came in at the middle, but I felt I could understand the character Troy. At first I wondered if he was looking for the woman meaning her harm, but then I became sure he meant well. I found it a little sad how quickly her boss gave away her location, if it had been a nasty husband then the consequences could have been bad. I see at the end that you are involved or have been in battered women's movements. I work at Citizens Advice as a volunteer and we are able to put people in touch with the safe house in the city. Sadly we cannot have a safe house on our island, it is too small and the men would soon find it. Good luck with your story and I hope all goes well for you. You sound very brave. nanna
Comment Written 31-May-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Anna did not go to her parents. Mr Keller actually knew very little information that will help. I appreciate it your kind review.
Comment from Tellis
I think if she is running for her and her sons life she will be okay if she left the state and no jury is going to let that creep have their son. Great chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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I think if she is running for her and her sons life she will be okay if she left the state and no jury is going to let that creep have their son. Great chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 31-May-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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It may depend on the state and the judge. I know in many states she could not leave without filing for divorce. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mara del Mar
It is a good chapter, where you can appreciate the interest of Troy to find Anna. For an abused woman is hard to believe again in love. Let's hope Ana can overcome this trauma. Congratulations, well done.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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It is a good chapter, where you can appreciate the interest of Troy to find Anna. For an abused woman is hard to believe again in love. Let's hope Ana can overcome this trauma. Congratulations, well done.
Comment Written 31-May-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Collie-Bug
I thought this was a great chapter and am interested in the story. I wonder though if you could alter an existing character to spice the story up. What if the secretary was male and gay? Just a suggestion but you might want to think about livening up your characters for the reader.
take care
V
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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I thought this was a great chapter and am interested in the story. I wonder though if you could alter an existing character to spice the story up. What if the secretary was male and gay? Just a suggestion but you might want to think about livening up your characters for the reader.
take care
V
Comment Written 31-May-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2011
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This is the only time in the story we will probably meet this secretary, so I see no reason to even give her the time of day. Although this is romantic fiction, I am trying to make it realistic and my fans who have been abused or know someone who has been abused like the way I am handling the story. As for spicing up the story, I would assume spousal abuse is spicy enough. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Very interesting chapter. Its was a surprise the way this one played out. I like it a lot. This is another great chapter. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-May-2011
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Very interesting chapter. Its was a surprise the way this one played out. I like it a lot. This is another great chapter. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-May-2011
reply by the author on 31-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.