An Innocent Affair?
A lusty afternoon19 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
Wow, it's been a long time since I reviewed something of yours. Have you been away? Anyway, I see you're still at it with your hot and heavy stuff. This was really fun and I loved the ending, which I did not expect at all. BRAVO
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Wow, it's been a long time since I reviewed something of yours. Have you been away? Anyway, I see you're still at it with your hot and heavy stuff. This was really fun and I loved the ending, which I did not expect at all. BRAVO
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from TammyGail
:) Great story Thesis I love it.... I like that pretty rose picture too ... But I loved the ending "So much for a romantic anniversary getaway," I said, reaching for my bra and panties.
"I know, but we can always continue this when we get home," he said.
"What makes you think I'd let you do that to me at home? I said teasingly."
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:) Great story Thesis I love it.... I like that pretty rose picture too ... But I loved the ending "So much for a romantic anniversary getaway," I said, reaching for my bra and panties.
"I know, but we can always continue this when we get home," he said.
"What makes you think I'd let you do that to me at home? I said teasingly."
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from lola29
John, this is an excellent entry for the contest, and I'll wager the winner. You always add that special flavor of mystery, and then the added punch, an extraordinary twist.
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John, this is an excellent entry for the contest, and I'll wager the winner. You always add that special flavor of mystery, and then the added punch, an extraordinary twist.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from Connie P
I knew there was a hook coming but couldn't figure it out. Really well done. I didn't spot any spag but was a little too caught up to count on catching any. My only suggestion for correction (since this is a contest entry) would be the ellipses 'word space ... space word'.
Connie
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I knew there was a hook coming but couldn't figure it out. Really well done. I didn't spot any spag but was a little too caught up to count on catching any. My only suggestion for correction (since this is a contest entry) would be the ellipses 'word space ... space word'.
Connie
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from Adora Bayles
Surprise, surprise! That ain't my boyfriend. That's my husband! I found a typo, nothing bad, just the slip of a finger:neck and he kissed me while her unbuttoned my blouse, WHILE HE UNBUTTONED)
I am an 80 year old bundle of feminine passion with a younger man in my life. I thoroughly (and I mean THOROUGHLY) enjoyed your story!
Adora
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Surprise, surprise! That ain't my boyfriend. That's my husband! I found a typo, nothing bad, just the slip of a finger:neck and he kissed me while her unbuttoned my blouse, WHILE HE UNBUTTONED)
I am an 80 year old bundle of feminine passion with a younger man in my life. I thoroughly (and I mean THOROUGHLY) enjoyed your story!
Adora
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from christine hendershot
Really really hot great sex scene! Great visuals loved the elevator scene, I laughed when the old man said Bullshit, The ending surprised me and I loved that, the sex was so intense I truly believed this couple were having an affair, just like the man in the elevator. Great job.
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Really really hot great sex scene! Great visuals loved the elevator scene, I laughed when the old man said Bullshit, The ending surprised me and I loved that, the sex was so intense I truly believed this couple were having an affair, just like the man in the elevator. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from Larrypic11
I've seen several stories with this type of ending since I've been on FS. You did a particular good job of the erotic writing, sense of building urgency and keeping the reader going until the end. Good luck in the contest
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I've seen several stories with this type of ending since I've been on FS. You did a particular good job of the erotic writing, sense of building urgency and keeping the reader going until the end. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from WilliamDeen
He surprised my saying change my to me
I kinda figured it out before the ending ... But it was a good story!
I enjoyed reading your excellently written story, Pamela
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He surprised my saying change my to me
I kinda figured it out before the ending ... But it was a good story!
I enjoyed reading your excellently written story, Pamela
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from adewpearl
What a fun ending - I thought it was going to be his wife on the line, calling him back home and leaving the narrator in an emotional tailspin. I love that they were celebrating their anniversary in such a naughty way. LOL
Your erotica is delightfully seductive but never raunchy. I had a great time reading this :-) Brooke
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What a fun ending - I thought it was going to be his wife on the line, calling him back home and leaving the narrator in an emotional tailspin. I love that they were celebrating their anniversary in such a naughty way. LOL
Your erotica is delightfully seductive but never raunchy. I had a great time reading this :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2011