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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from missy98writer
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Barbara,
Hello to you. Hot damn, You posted on a Tuesday, my friend. I just got my new bed and it's a fully automatic like my old one that had been broken by the fool who put it in eight years ago. This looks the same, but is brand new and the young man knew how to put it together. He noticed where my sister-in-law, Crystal had jerry rigged it with an Arkansas travel book- kind of ironic since they are know for jerry rigging crap. I digress chapter 31 is splendidly written. We come it as Anna handled Mrs Rodgers - the bitch of a mother-in-law from hell, yelling she was lying, but it hurt her son's case- that will teach her to keep her fat mouth shut won't it. How funny she was removed from the room by the bailiff- I could picture the dumbfounded look on her face. I can see why her son was so abusive. It's good the trial went the way it did, but that freaking witch of a mother-in-law hired a PI to get crap on Anna. That bitch needs to stop it. Anna keeps thinking she messed up since a PI is trailing her. I'm glad Paul calmed her down and she agrees to eat with the Rodgers. I feel you're doing the best thing to focus more on Anna's divorce trial that her soon to be exes abuse trial. This was an excellent write, my friend. I look forward to reading Anna's divorce proceedings. Keep on writing with heart, my friend. Have a delightful day. How's school going for you, Mrs Teacher.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    I posted on Sunday, but that's okay. I am happy to hear about your new bed. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by missy98writer on 13-Sep-2011
    I've been sick with a virus with bad diahherrah I spelled wrong but I don't care. I'm so behind on reviewing. Love ya and my new hospital fully electric bed is great and it has a memory form mattress. I have to get used to it. I made sure to keep my trapise bar and they gave me one- but my old one I bought for $200 dollars so I have two of them on my bed I'm laying back in reviewing on my iPod touch.
    Melissa.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
    I will not allow you to be sick.
Comment from Max Edon
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I haven't read the previous chapters,but I found this to be very well written and entertaining. I enjoyed the conversations because they were realistic.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rosine (roneth)
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I do enjoy reading this. I cannot see any areas that you need to improve. The story flows well. Your use of direct speech moves the whole plot along nicely.

I do appreciate the fact that you took the time to inform us about domestic violence.

I will certainly read the entire book.

Thank you.

eep up the good work.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by rosine (roneth) on 13-Sep-2011
    Keep writing!
Comment from RebelRose
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That Mrs. Rodgers scares me. She is a loose cannon.
This is another great chapter. I enjoyed it and look forward to reading about the divorce trial.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ElPoetry001
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Excellent.
Behind closed doors, the aggressor wins. The mental and physical violence is not seen.

In the open the victim wins, because most people see themselves in the position of the victim. And society will not accept violence; domestic, or imported.

The law will back the victim, and the children, the controlling aggressor cannot prevail with an unworthy cause.

Many support groups are available to women who have married a frog, disguised as a Prince, that turns back into a raging, destructive frog. You cannot save this man. Only medical science, psychologists, anger management, and his willingness to change will solve the vicious circle.

A sad story about real life.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from smudge
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Anna hears that her husband has gone to prison and her mother in law has hired a private detective. From an abusive relationship she has found legal and every assistance from her new love and his parents. I like the way you use the dialogue to move the story forward. I think the internal dialogue should have inverted commas as well as italics.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Nope, thought uses on italics, as least in my writting books. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by smudge on 14-Sep-2011
    Your welcome
Comment from goose_b
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Very good. I think your use of dialog moves the story effectively. Since I am only reading a part of one chapter, you dialog helps me to understand the overall story.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
reply by goose_b on 15-Sep-2011
    Hi Barbara, your welcome. goose_b
Comment from dportwood
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barbara,

Nice addition to this continuing story. The court trials are very stressful and you have described feelings and emotions well.

Duane

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
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Mrs. Rodgers has a nerve hiring a detective. Hope Troy stays away from Anna for a while. Anna is stronger than she thinks, and in time will be more confident. Good friends make a great support system. I love this chapter, and hope Bobby will get a stiff punishment.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Excellent writing as always. You keep me coming back and wanting more of your story. Your writing keeps it interesting. Great job.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.