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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Piggies Grandma
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I enjoyed reading this chapter very much Barbara. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. It seems like they are going to take their relationship to the next level.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from James McCorkle
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I like tis story.and the people in it. The pace is acceptable and enjoyable with proper conversation and attention paid to the young child MIchael. Keep this going and let us all enjoy the growing affection between Anna and Troy. WEll done. James McCorkle.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review
reply by James McCorkle on 19-Jan-2012
    Keep going. James.
Comment from KinaSalad
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Hi there Barbara, I enjoyed reading your story here and I understand it does take a long time for a woman to build up her self-esteem after an abusive relationship. Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
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Thanks for another good chapter. It's good to see that Troy and Anna are finally having some time together.

Are you sure you want to be in here for this.(?)"

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2012


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    Thank you for the catch and I appreciate it.
Comment from misscookie
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As alwaysI enjoyed reading your chapters they are always intersresting
and never a dull moment. I feel as if I kopw the chacthers in your story.
Thank you for sharing. If you don't mind me asking how many pages are in your novel?
I

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by misscookie on 18-Jan-2012
    My pleasure.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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It does, I'm sure, take a long time to recover, if at ever. Tell your hubby that I love the picture. Well written chapter. I can't wait to see if they kiss!!! Debbie

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2012


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Comment from CALLAHANMR
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Hi Barbara:)
Another excellent post. you continue to show the long healing process to overcome past esteem-destroying abuse.

That loud muffler again. Now I think it has been heard too many times, without even a cursory look at the offending vehicle. Anna's and Troy's eyes would be drawn toward such a loud vehicle, especially since it has already created concern.

Ah, a kiss? Perhaps Anna is healing faster than I realized.

Love and Irish hugs,

Roger

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012
    We shall wait and see about that muffler. Thank you for the kind review and the support you continually give me.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
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Anna continued with the apartment cleaning chores. --- Justa suggestion: How about "Anna continued cleaning the apartment."

"I need to get groceries.["]

Troy hung the painting --- When you hang a painting, isn't there a bunch of "Is that okay?" "No, a little to the right or the left or up or down." "Is it straight?" I've never seen anything get hung so easily.

Something just occurred to me. Michael was only seven months old when this story started, so Anna wasn't married to bobby all that long. Some months have gone by since, so shouldn't she be gaining her strength back a little quicker than this? Was she a wimp before? Did her dad beat her?

Roberta

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012
    Anna's abuse was very serve and her father didn't beat her, but was extremely controlling. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tango494
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This was another awesome submission, I loved it. My favorite line was;

""Surprise me."

"It's okay for you to have a preference. I'm honestly asking for your opinion." ".

I can not tell you many times I have had the exact conversation. That is one of the things I so love about your writing, how you capture reality in your work. Thanks for sharing and keep up the awesome job.


 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review and your insight.
Comment from TammyGail
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This was another amazing chapter Barbara, always compelling and so very touching, heartfelt indeed it is such things even happen. Loved your lovely imagery your husband crafted for you. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to read and review

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your kind review.