Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from EMB
This was pretty good writing. Even though I'm jumping in the middle of this, I can still enjoy the mastery of your writing ability. I particularly like how crisp your dialogue was. And, of course, having great tension such as this doesn't hurt either.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This was pretty good writing. Even though I'm jumping in the middle of this, I can still enjoy the mastery of your writing ability. I particularly like how crisp your dialogue was. And, of course, having great tension such as this doesn't hurt either.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Edward. I appreciate you checking out my chapter and also your generous review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Another really great chapter, Bev. Superb writing.
You left us with questions still to be answered and more yet being asked.
The tension continues to build. I suspect our detective's skepticism will be proved wrong about this 'entity'. I'm very intrigued.
Excellent writing, my friend.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Another really great chapter, Bev. Superb writing.
You left us with questions still to be answered and more yet being asked.
The tension continues to build. I suspect our detective's skepticism will be proved wrong about this 'entity'. I'm very intrigued.
Excellent writing, my friend.
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, Av. I'm really appreciative of your generous review and supportive insights. Yes, Derek is in denial right now LOL. Hope your festivities are going well, my lovely friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from AprilShower
There was just a right amount of tension in this chapter. It appears we are close to finding out who the murderer is. Could murderer be one of the victims of Monsignor Lew Flaherty's or a relative of a victim? Well done, Bev. I'm anxious to read the next chapter.
April
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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There was just a right amount of tension in this chapter. It appears we are close to finding out who the murderer is. Could murderer be one of the victims of Monsignor Lew Flaherty's or a relative of a victim? Well done, Bev. I'm anxious to read the next chapter.
April
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi, April. Thank you much for your very generous review and support. I so appreciate your continued interest! Hugs, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. :o)
Comment from c_lucas
You are reaching, but you haven't overreached. This is very well written with a a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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You are reaching, but you haven't overreached. This is very well written with a a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Charlie, thank you for your generosity. Warm regards, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
Comment from Glasstruth
This has plenty of excitement going for it. Murder, cover-up. Great dialogue. It flows just right down the page and left me wondeting with that great hook. Superb! Les
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This has plenty of excitement going for it. Murder, cover-up. Great dialogue. It flows just right down the page and left me wondeting with that great hook. Superb! Les
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi, Wes. Thank you much for your generous and supportive review. I really appreciate it! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from DALLAS01
murder again.need quotation marks.
Again, the detailed description of even the tiniest movements brings this story to life. It is like watching it on a stage.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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murder again.need quotation marks.
Again, the detailed description of even the tiniest movements brings this story to life. It is like watching it on a stage.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thanks so much, Dallas. I appreciate your continued support and gracious review. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Meta~Mark
wow- a priest, a murder a cover up, revenge, how about a script for nationwide TV, I loved the dialogue and flow of this delightful read, BRAVO!!!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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wow- a priest, a murder a cover up, revenge, how about a script for nationwide TV, I loved the dialogue and flow of this delightful read, BRAVO!!!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, Mark. I really appreciate your support! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again you have left a great hook for us. I can't wait for the answer. Your story flowed well and the at a good pace. Your characters remain strong.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Once again you have left a great hook for us. I can't wait for the answer. Your story flowed well and the at a good pace. Your characters remain strong.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, barbara. I appreciate your generous review and words of support. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from JW
You definitely ended this chapter with an interesting hook that would make the reader want to read more. Good job.
Regardless of the items below, overall, this was another well written chapter.
You may want to review the following:
a vein spasomed (spasmed) in the priest's right temple
He was convicted of statuatory (statutory)rape
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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You definitely ended this chapter with an interesting hook that would make the reader want to read more. Good job.
Regardless of the items below, overall, this was another well written chapter.
You may want to review the following:
a vein spasomed (spasmed) in the priest's right temple
He was convicted of statuatory (statutory)rape
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I'm going to have to start paying you for editorial assistance, Jonathon! Thanks for the supportive review and sharp eye for spaggies. Warmest regards, Bev
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My pleasure. :-) JW
Comment from robina1978
One spello in your intro bit:it should be no one. I am wondering if the father is now under suspicion as things get taped and the chair stands differently. Not quite sure though.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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One spello in your intro bit:it should be no one. I am wondering if the father is now under suspicion as things get taped and the chair stands differently. Not quite sure though.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the suggestions and review, Ine. I appreciate it. Bev
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most welcome, Ine