Maybe
When do you stop a friend from doing something wrong?23 total reviews
Comment from Scarbrems
This is very good. It's a dilemma many face - should I speak/wil they listen, etc. If this is a potential scenario you are imagining for a friend then maybe if you say something now you'll have fewer "maybes", but then again you'll probably have different ones. People will always think there is something they could have done, even if there wasn't.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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This is very good. It's a dilemma many face - should I speak/wil they listen, etc. If this is a potential scenario you are imagining for a friend then maybe if you say something now you'll have fewer "maybes", but then again you'll probably have different ones. People will always think there is something they could have done, even if there wasn't.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from carlaedi
Very sad and powerful writing. This is incredibly simple but oh so emotional that it becomes absolutely beautiful. Sometimes it's the simplest way of saying things that is the most effective. I absolutely loved this piece, can't fault it at all. Beautiful job.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Very sad and powerful writing. This is incredibly simple but oh so emotional that it becomes absolutely beautiful. Sometimes it's the simplest way of saying things that is the most effective. I absolutely loved this piece, can't fault it at all. Beautiful job.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from Glasstruth
Maybe is one of the least favorable words around. It means you've made mistake; maybe which is a case of denial shows how the word doesn'r even want to exist, but it does. Something that we can all relate to. Definitely well written. Les
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Maybe is one of the least favorable words around. It means you've made mistake; maybe which is a case of denial shows how the word doesn'r even want to exist, but it does. Something that we can all relate to. Definitely well written. Les
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh I am so glad this is fiction - it is, isn't it? It is truly heart-wrenching and you've written it so forcefully! Your repeat of 'maybe' reinforces the anguish and the doubt so well! A great short, short story!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Oh I am so glad this is fiction - it is, isn't it? It is truly heart-wrenching and you've written it so forcefully! Your repeat of 'maybe' reinforces the anguish and the doubt so well! A great short, short story!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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For the moment it is fiction, at least the last few lines. I just hope it remains that way. Thank you for your great review.
Comment from Gungalo
There's nothing you could have done. Take it from me there is absolutely nothing. She'd just come back at a later date and do it anyways. Sigh ...
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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There's nothing you could have done. Take it from me there is absolutely nothing. She'd just come back at a later date and do it anyways. Sigh ...
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the review. This is an ongoing problem, I'm trying to motivate myself to be upfront with her about how I feel.
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Just say it for her sake.
Comment from Sasha
This is very well written and sends a powerful and important message. I like how this is put together and basically a continuous use of the word 'maybe'. We all could learn from this and probably have someone in our own lives that this could apply to. Excellent work with this one. I enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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This is very well written and sends a powerful and important message. I like how this is put together and basically a continuous use of the word 'maybe'. We all could learn from this and probably have someone in our own lives that this could apply to. Excellent work with this one. I enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your review and input. Appreciate it.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a sad story my friend I think if you had told her she wouldn't have listened people have to want a friends help if they don't you can't make them take it thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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This is a sad story my friend I think if you had told her she wouldn't have listened people have to want a friends help if they don't you can't make them take it thank you for sharing
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Probably true, but still...maybe. Thanks for thee great and understanding review.
Comment from EMB
This is a moving and powerful piece, G. It's difficult to live a life of "maybes" and "what ifs." I liked how you chronicled the possible actions that "could have been." This is good and necessary work.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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This is a moving and powerful piece, G. It's difficult to live a life of "maybes" and "what ifs." I liked how you chronicled the possible actions that "could have been." This is good and necessary work.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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I had to get it out somehow. Hopefully someone who reads it will do something that I didn't. Thanks for the great eview.
Comment from Sefiros
Very good. You list out all the flashbacks, the what ifs, all the things you could have done differently in simple sentences. My only gripe is that I didn't get the "glass" term in the first sentence. I only knew this was about alcohol when you put in the Chardonnay. Replace "glass" with "cup" or "wineglass." That will make for a smoother rhythm.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Very good. You list out all the flashbacks, the what ifs, all the things you could have done differently in simple sentences. My only gripe is that I didn't get the "glass" term in the first sentence. I only knew this was about alcohol when you put in the Chardonnay. Replace "glass" with "cup" or "wineglass." That will make for a smoother rhythm.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Sorry about the confusion in the beginning. This was a last minute piece and I didn't do much to it before posting it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from bossladyone
I am truly sorry for your loss. I like it. It is well written. I had a brother that drank his self to death. I always wonder if there was something I could of said or done to help him overcome his problem. So I am glad you trusted us enough to share this. Thank you
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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I am truly sorry for your loss. I like it. It is well written. I had a brother that drank his self to death. I always wonder if there was something I could of said or done to help him overcome his problem. So I am glad you trusted us enough to share this. Thank you
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the great review and the words of support. Greatly appreciated.