Again
ABAB Poem60 total reviews
Comment from Titanx9
What I like about this poem is that it shows that real love truly does transcend death. This stanza tells a story of eternal love within these few lines:
For fifteen years his absence filled her days.
No matter where she lay, an empty bed.
Such measured heaviness of spirit weighs
against the sixty years that they were wed.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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What I like about this poem is that it shows that real love truly does transcend death. This stanza tells a story of eternal love within these few lines:
For fifteen years his absence filled her days.
No matter where she lay, an empty bed.
Such measured heaviness of spirit weighs
against the sixty years that they were wed.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you, Dossie, for taking the time to read and review my words. Wouldn't it be nice if my little scenario were true.? - Wendy
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hello, Poet
What a lovely poem! I admire the love and heartfelt
sentiment woven within its lines. My favorite lines are:
My favorite lines:She shouts his name with youth's unbridled glee;
no longer matronly or circumspect.
Along the shell-strewn shores of memory,
quiescent tide pools filled with love collect.
Suggestions for Improvement:
They'd met as children.[;] S[s]ummers by the shore
A wonderful read. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Ray
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Hello, Poet
What a lovely poem! I admire the love and heartfelt
sentiment woven within its lines. My favorite lines are:
My favorite lines:She shouts his name with youth's unbridled glee;
no longer matronly or circumspect.
Along the shell-strewn shores of memory,
quiescent tide pools filled with love collect.
Suggestions for Improvement:
They'd met as children.[;] S[s]ummers by the shore
A wonderful read. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Ray
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you Ray, the semi colon is a brilliant suggestion. Lucky me that you took the time to read and review the work. I am so glad that you liked my little story. I appreciate the good luck wishes and, of course, the stars.
Comment from Creative77
What a lovely piece of writing! You've told such a beautiful story in this special poem. The very last line brings your words to a vivid closing. Excellent job! Best of luck in the contest!
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What a lovely piece of writing! You've told such a beautiful story in this special poem. The very last line brings your words to a vivid closing. Excellent job! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you for spending time reading and reviewing my words. I am so glad that you enjoyed it. I appreciate the good luck wishes and the stars. - Wendy
Comment from Caressa_08
Your are blessed with such talent...I appreciate this poem, as it was lovely & still wiping the tears from my eyes...Hope to read more of your works, as this is the first time here & please keep on writing.
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Your are blessed with such talent...I appreciate this poem, as it was lovely & still wiping the tears from my eyes...Hope to read more of your works, as this is the first time here & please keep on writing.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my words. I welcome you again and look forward to jumping over to see some of your work. --Wendy
Comment from Bobbi22
Love that lasts an eternity - from childhood into the afterlife. You captured the emotion so very well. The joy and the sadness all in one. Very well written moving poem. We should all be so lucky to have someone like that forever.
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Love that lasts an eternity - from childhood into the afterlife. You captured the emotion so very well. The joy and the sadness all in one. Very well written moving poem. We should all be so lucky to have someone like that forever.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you Bobbi for taking the time to read and review my words. I agree that we should all be so lucky. I, unfortunately, will have to rely on my imagination. - Wendy
Comment from Doc Holiday
Almost Titanic-like in its way of reuniting the old with their younger, happier times in youth through death. I found your poem a delight to read. I enjoyed it immensely!
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Almost Titanic-like in its way of reuniting the old with their younger, happier times in youth through death. I found your poem a delight to read. I enjoyed it immensely!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my words. Wouldn't it be great if my little scenario were true? - Wendy
Comment from Joannforsberg
First truly feel the word: Again is a perfect title for any poem. I like simple clear words used to title poems. This type of word seems to make a reader want to know more. Almost like a question needing to be answered. Well done on the poem. It is a sad yet beautiful ending. Blessings, JO
The his dying before her and her finally reuniting and they are young again.
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First truly feel the word: Again is a perfect title for any poem. I like simple clear words used to title poems. This type of word seems to make a reader want to know more. Almost like a question needing to be answered. Well done on the poem. It is a sad yet beautiful ending. Blessings, JO
The his dying before her and her finally reuniting and they are young again.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you, Jo. I went round and round about the title, and finally realized that my "working title" was really the perfect one. I am glad you liked both the title and the poem. -Wendy
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
a fabulous read, Rosehill.
an absolute joy to read aloud,
it trundled off the tongue delightfully!
thank you for sharing, and
good luck for the contest!
warmly, x, eph.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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a fabulous read, Rosehill.
an absolute joy to read aloud,
it trundled off the tongue delightfully!
thank you for sharing, and
good luck for the contest!
warmly, x, eph.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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I thank you for the time you took to read and review my words. I am doubly glad that you mentioned reading it aloud. So important! I appreciate your good wishes and, of course, the stars. - Wendy
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you're muchly welcome, Wendy.
warmly, x, eph.
Comment from Selina Stambi
The years are shed like clothes ... I held my breath as I read this poem that is dripping with such sad nostalgic yearning.
Races to embrace the blue-jeaned boy ..... oh be still my heart!
Fabulous!
spags:
sand-swept toes
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The years are shed like clothes ... I held my breath as I read this poem that is dripping with such sad nostalgic yearning.
Races to embrace the blue-jeaned boy ..... oh be still my heart!
Fabulous!
spags:
sand-swept toes
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for the time you took to read and review my words. I am going to have to talk to "Mr. Ed." I went back and forth between sandswept and sand-swept, finally deciding on the hyphenated version. I have changed that three times now and it keeps reverting to a non-hyphenated, unwanted, third alternative. Time for a techno tete-a-tete ( need some unavailable punctuation there too), with Tom. Thanks for letting me know it did it again. I am glad that you liked the rest of it. ;-) Wendy
Comment from AprilShower
This has a great message, Rosehill. It flows beautifully and has a nice rhyme to it. I enjoyed reading it. For her death was a victory over her missing the love of her life. The picture shows up very nicely, like in a dream, and it goes well with the poem.
April
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This has a great message, Rosehill. It flows beautifully and has a nice rhyme to it. I enjoyed reading it. For her death was a victory over her missing the love of her life. The picture shows up very nicely, like in a dream, and it goes well with the poem.
April
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you April for taking the time to read and review my words. I am so glad you enjoyed it. - Wendy