Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Jonathan's dilemma"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
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Comment from dmt1967
A loyal man now there's a novelty I like this a man that wont stray if given it on a platter is very far fetched though very well written thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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A loyal man now there's a novelty I like this a man that wont stray if given it on a platter is very far fetched though very well written thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks MILLION, dmt1967! I'm sorry I'm so backed up with my thank you responses!
Comment from adewpearl
continued good use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in death/deplore and Dean's dubious
rifed with strife - rife with
excellent character description
Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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continued good use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in death/deplore and Dean's dubious
rifed with strife - rife with
excellent character description
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks!!
Comment from angelmagnet
Thank you for this chapter, I didn't remember Jonathan's situation. You certainly make his contentment very clear. I'm not liking Leslie Ann already again for disturbing this scene of marital bliss
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thank you for this chapter, I didn't remember Jonathan's situation. You certainly make his contentment very clear. I'm not liking Leslie Ann already again for disturbing this scene of marital bliss
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, angelmagnet! Sorry to be so backed up with my responses.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Lets hope he can fight it off. I hope he is intelligent enough to realize he is a happy man and doesn't need extra attention from other females. Leslie Ann just needs her ego stroked. Well done Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Lets hope he can fight it off. I hope he is intelligent enough to realize he is a happy man and doesn't need extra attention from other females. Leslie Ann just needs her ego stroked. Well done Nancy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Nancy!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem effectively conveys the theme that it IS possible (up to this point anyway) to resist temptation and be faithful.
Line 10--"He" should be omitted.
Stanza 6--The 's should be on "Dean."
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Your well-written poem effectively conveys the theme that it IS possible (up to this point anyway) to resist temptation and be faithful.
Line 10--"He" should be omitted.
Stanza 6--The 's should be on "Dean."
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thank for the sharp eye and for the great review! I'm sorry to be so late responding.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this s is well written my friend with good rhyming through the poem it is easy to follow and again I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Yes this s is well written my friend with good rhyming through the poem it is easy to follow and again I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Jill!
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Dossie,
Johathan is a very lucky man to have Mary Ann and the joy and dedication she has brought to his life. Temptations come and go, but she has been enough for him so far. Leslie Ann does not share the same moral standards. Her passions are leading to temptations that may destroy a family. My friend, the chapter is outstanding.
Curtis
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Dossie,
Johathan is a very lucky man to have Mary Ann and the joy and dedication she has brought to his life. Temptations come and go, but she has been enough for him so far. Leslie Ann does not share the same moral standards. Her passions are leading to temptations that may destroy a family. My friend, the chapter is outstanding.
Curtis
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Steliano
Hi Titan, I really enjoyed your love story, Sexuality shared is a joy of life, and grows stronger when children and career
play their parts, a happy man, and a happy woman, creates life long love, devotion, and happiness. We all seek our own Mary. Well done.
Regards
Steliano
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Hi Titan, I really enjoyed your love story, Sexuality shared is a joy of life, and grows stronger when children and career
play their parts, a happy man, and a happy woman, creates life long love, devotion, and happiness. We all seek our own Mary. Well done.
Regards
Steliano
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Well, you didn't think too much of this chapter, but it's all good. I appreciate your comments. Dossie
Comment from Ekim777
For sure we learn more about our poet, the narrator than about Jonathan who is illustrated in a stereotyped way. Our might not know much about men. Men don't rely on their good looks in the work place unless they are actors. It seems that his chief challenge is reassure his loving wife. And she might plagued by the most common and painful of ailments; a touch jealousy when every phantom seems to be a living threat to her happiness. Surely there was some emotional upheavals between them, but such of life and human love. Shelley said, Love for a man is thing apart. It is woman's whole existence. It seems that Jonathan is not troubled by any bad conscience and rightfully so. An interesting read. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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For sure we learn more about our poet, the narrator than about Jonathan who is illustrated in a stereotyped way. Our might not know much about men. Men don't rely on their good looks in the work place unless they are actors. It seems that his chief challenge is reassure his loving wife. And she might plagued by the most common and painful of ailments; a touch jealousy when every phantom seems to be a living threat to her happiness. Surely there was some emotional upheavals between them, but such of life and human love. Shelley said, Love for a man is thing apart. It is woman's whole existence. It seems that Jonathan is not troubled by any bad conscience and rightfully so. An interesting read. -Ekim777
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Ekim77, I am so sorry to be so late responding to this great review. I like your comment on Shelley. Thanks a million!
Comment from chasennov
'Jonathan's Dilemma.' This is a very ripe piece of writing which I enjoyed very much. The poem is packed with formulated structure. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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'Jonathan's Dilemma.' This is a very ripe piece of writing which I enjoyed very much. The poem is packed with formulated structure. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, chasennov! I'm sorry for taking so long to say thank you. I appreciate this stellar review, it warms my heart!
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You're very welcome.