The Frog That Couldn't Swim
A Super Pig adventure29 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well I think it is really a good poem for children. I would put more emphasis on not swimming alone. You got a chuckle from me with...."The brothers had never seen a pig in a mask and cape". I think it is worth more effort if needed. xsx Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Well I think it is really a good poem for children. I would put more emphasis on not swimming alone. You got a chuckle from me with...."The brothers had never seen a pig in a mask and cape". I think it is worth more effort if needed. xsx Nancy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much Nancy. Rox
Comment from writerwish
I don't know what others thought but I loved this story. The bully idea was cool. I loved the way the father had faith in him. I thought the pig was not necessary but kids like super heroes.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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I don't know what others thought but I loved this story. The bully idea was cool. I loved the way the father had faith in him. I thought the pig was not necessary but kids like super heroes.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Well the stories are part of a Super Pig series, so we need Super Pig. =} Thanks so much, rox
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh this is a wonderful story for children! I loved it, and I think kids will too, very much. Even without illustration, they'll be picturing this story in their heads, the descriptions and characters are so rich.
A charming read. :0)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Oh this is a wonderful story for children! I loved it, and I think kids will too, very much. Even without illustration, they'll be picturing this story in their heads, the descriptions and characters are so rich.
A charming read. :0)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much. My Super Pig stories are my first love, so fun to write. Rox
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow... I think you have a great story here mixing the development of self esteem, family interaction of the sister sticking up for little brother, bullying aspect which is so prevalent in today's society (done simply for kids to understand) and a happy ending. Great animal names!!!
Nicely done, John
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Wow... I think you have a great story here mixing the development of self esteem, family interaction of the sister sticking up for little brother, bullying aspect which is so prevalent in today's society (done simply for kids to understand) and a happy ending. Great animal names!!!
Nicely done, John
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much John. I was fun to be writing another SP story. =} Rox
Comment from Spiritual Echo
There's a great analogy for kids that don't stay in step with school expectations. My grandson is moving to grade 3 and is only JUST starting to read and have confidence in his ability to figure it out. H only go there because of encouragement not bullying, so there is some real meat here, relatable for kids that don't do thing on time or as expected.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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There's a great analogy for kids that don't stay in step with school expectations. My grandson is moving to grade 3 and is only JUST starting to read and have confidence in his ability to figure it out. H only go there because of encouragement not bullying, so there is some real meat here, relatable for kids that don't do thing on time or as expected.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Bullying is becoming a plague in our schools. It shouldn't. Teachers should be more aware, but they have so many kids and I'm sure can't keep track of all that is going on. It's sad that parents aren't teaching kindness at home. Thanks so much. Rox
Comment from barkingdog
Cute as the dickins, Rox. I like your cast of characters. The bullies are bullies and cute little Justus sounds like any little kid who wants to grow up(learn to swim).
Why not have him call Papa Frog Papa instead of Daddy?
I know the following are things you'd probably catch later but here goes:
bigger than Izabella(,) and she knew she
-"Why can't I swim, (D)addy?" asked Justus.
-the next summer(,) and he won the race again
-"Thank you(,) Super Pig,"
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Cute as the dickins, Rox. I like your cast of characters. The bullies are bullies and cute little Justus sounds like any little kid who wants to grow up(learn to swim).
Why not have him call Papa Frog Papa instead of Daddy?
I know the following are things you'd probably catch later but here goes:
bigger than Izabella(,) and she knew she
-"Why can't I swim, (D)addy?" asked Justus.
-the next summer(,) and he won the race again
-"Thank you(,) Super Pig,"
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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I wondered about daddy and papa, so I did change it all to papa. Thanks so much for catching the errors and the kind review. It was fun to be writing a SP story again. =} Rox
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a brilliant story, Rox, just a couple of nits.
...Come on(,) Justus - comma before name, direct address.
...Thank you(,) Super Pig
...Did you see me(,) (D)addy - Capital again, when direct address.
This is really well written, it is the type of story children love. Your names are fun, and it also sends out a message, not to go into the water without someone with you.
Lovely! :) Sandra xsx
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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This is a brilliant story, Rox, just a couple of nits.
...Come on(,) Justus - comma before name, direct address.
...Thank you(,) Super Pig
...Did you see me(,) (D)addy - Capital again, when direct address.
This is really well written, it is the type of story children love. Your names are fun, and it also sends out a message, not to go into the water without someone with you.
Lovely! :) Sandra xsx
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much Sandra,for catching my errors and the great review. Was so fun to write another SP story. I missed her. =} Rox
Comment from SaluteDobby
The only thing to fear is fear itself is the message that comes across to the readers. Well written. I liked the name "Fred. E", a play on the name "Freddie". The characters are life-like, with distinct personalities.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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The only thing to fear is fear itself is the message that comes across to the readers. Well written. I liked the name "Fred. E", a play on the name "Freddie". The characters are life-like, with distinct personalities.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review. I love writing my SP stories, it's just too fun. Rox
Comment from Titanx9
I read every line carefully and could find nothing wrong. I became a big kid reading this well-written, action-packed story about the frog who couldn't swim. It should be a hit with small children, as well as some adults - LOL. Overall, it's a great story with great dialogue and interaction between your animal characters. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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I read every line carefully and could find nothing wrong. I became a big kid reading this well-written, action-packed story about the frog who couldn't swim. It should be a hit with small children, as well as some adults - LOL. Overall, it's a great story with great dialogue and interaction between your animal characters. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much. What a great review! It was very fun to write. I love doing my SP stories. Rox
Comment from adewpearl
Come on, Justus -add comma for direct address
I really like the characters
Good use of natural-sounding dialogue
Do you think I'll learn to swim, daddy - Daddy
excellent message about bullying
I love the premise of a frog who can't swim
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Come on, Justus -add comma for direct address
I really like the characters
Good use of natural-sounding dialogue
Do you think I'll learn to swim, daddy - Daddy
excellent message about bullying
I love the premise of a frog who can't swim
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for catching the errors and the great review. It was fun to be writing another SP story. Rox