Dig
You can't stop digging.15 total reviews
Comment from NonnyeLL7
Fantastic.
Thank you for posting this. Hmmm constructive criticism? I said this to another writer and I feel it holds for your work here as well. Perhaps if I were a professional I could offer something that would enhance this piece but for me it did all I need a poem to do. It immediately created a mood, then painted a picture that was vivid and had just enough tension to keep me caring about the outcome.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Fantastic.
Thank you for posting this. Hmmm constructive criticism? I said this to another writer and I feel it holds for your work here as well. Perhaps if I were a professional I could offer something that would enhance this piece but for me it did all I need a poem to do. It immediately created a mood, then painted a picture that was vivid and had just enough tension to keep me caring about the outcome.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the nice remarks and the great review and rating. Gretchen
Comment from Sefiros
The digging theme didn't start with the problem until the middle of the poem. I kept thinking that digging would be a better example if the narrator was trying to run away (digging into a hiding place). But during the middle the digging was used for the acting skills. Nice job. You just have to show that same creativity about digging more towards the beginning.
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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The digging theme didn't start with the problem until the middle of the poem. I kept thinking that digging would be a better example if the narrator was trying to run away (digging into a hiding place). But during the middle the digging was used for the acting skills. Nice job. You just have to show that same creativity about digging more towards the beginning.
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
This is a well told story of how one becomes a junkie slowly one sensation at a time and all the while he is digging his own grave. It is an unusual and creative approach to writing. Second person is not used a lot, but I think it works well here. The story is intense and moving, especially the last four lines.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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This is a well told story of how one becomes a junkie slowly one sensation at a time and all the while he is digging his own grave. It is an unusual and creative approach to writing. Second person is not used a lot, but I think it works well here. The story is intense and moving, especially the last four lines.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from joneau2
Quite an indictment against junkies, and rightfully so. It seems there's so many people around today that can't cope without some kind of fix. No one is exempt ... just consider all the smokers and drinkers. It's no wonder our country is so screwed up ... no doubt our illustrious politicians using the crap, or supporting the drug dealers to line their pockets. I guess you're poem did its do ... emotion!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Quite an indictment against junkies, and rightfully so. It seems there's so many people around today that can't cope without some kind of fix. No one is exempt ... just consider all the smokers and drinkers. It's no wonder our country is so screwed up ... no doubt our illustrious politicians using the crap, or supporting the drug dealers to line their pockets. I guess you're poem did its do ... emotion!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the thoughtful and thought provoking review. Gretchen
Comment from amanda98653
A very lovely piece you've written up there.
I love the use of repetition of "Dig". It really emphasizes the overall meaning of your poem.
You keep on digging till you understand what you find is hard to comprehend..
"You miss your son's first birthday.
But he's too young to understand. "
Very honest and blunt.Love it
-Amanda
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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A very lovely piece you've written up there.
I love the use of repetition of "Dig". It really emphasizes the overall meaning of your poem.
You keep on digging till you understand what you find is hard to comprehend..
"You miss your son's first birthday.
But he's too young to understand. "
Very honest and blunt.Love it
-Amanda
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the wonderfully thought provoking review. Gretchen