Clever Birdies Poop
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Comment from Domino 2
Seems like the worst tree in town to park under.
I think the driver will need more than 'spit' to clean that off.
Clever and fun entry.
Good luck, Ted
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Seems like the worst tree in town to park under.
I think the driver will need more than 'spit' to clean that off.
Clever and fun entry.
Good luck, Ted
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Ted - Glad you found it clever and fun ... ;)
Comment from allborn66
Oh My - we actually had that happen to one of our customers. Her car broke down in our very small parking lot. The birdie must have loved the color of her car or something - because it was covered by the time she was able to find help to fix it. We've had other people leave their cars over night in our lot, and the birds ignored their cars.
The poem is brilliant. It captures the emotions well. Clever word choice.
Barbara
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Oh My - we actually had that happen to one of our customers. Her car broke down in our very small parking lot. The birdie must have loved the color of her car or something - because it was covered by the time she was able to find help to fix it. We've had other people leave their cars over night in our lot, and the birds ignored their cars.
The poem is brilliant. It captures the emotions well. Clever word choice.
Barbara
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Barbara - Glad you liked this poem - Enjoyed hearing about your unfortunate customer's car that got hit by the bird-poop. Appreciate your comments ... ;o)
Comment from brentman99
Love the picture. The only thing I'm wondering is if the second verse has eight syllables. I've seen people use words that end in "ed" as both one and two syllable words, so I'm not sure anymore. Otherwise, a good effort. Brent
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Love the picture. The only thing I'm wondering is if the second verse has eight syllables. I've seen people use words that end in "ed" as both one and two syllable words, so I'm not sure anymore. Otherwise, a good effort. Brent
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thanks. 'washed' is one syllable, so the second line has seven syllables. Glad you liked the picture. Appreciate your comments ... ;o)
Comment from baustian64
How cute this is. But birds have to poop some place. And if the cars are in the way and clean why not? After all we all want a clean place to do our business and I guess so do birds.
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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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How cute this is. But birds have to poop some place. And if the cars are in the way and clean why not? After all we all want a clean place to do our business and I guess so do birds.
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Glad you liked it and you make a good point. If I was a bird, I'd pick the cleanest car available to do my business. And, I'd re-target those cars where the drivers got the most upset. Sometimes the birds really have it in for us as the Hitchcock movie, 'The Birds' illustrates so well ... ;o)