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Comment from MarjorieAnne
Very clever rhyming and great woeful subject for a limerick. Syllable count OK except for line two. How about "Who talked too long on his cell phonia?
Also since other lines don't have punctuation I wouldn't use a period at the end either.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Very clever rhyming and great woeful subject for a limerick. Syllable count OK except for line two. How about "Who talked too long on his cell phonia?
Also since other lines don't have punctuation I wouldn't use a period at the end either.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
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You're welcome
Comment from Axiom Gray
Haha very nice. I could follow the rhythm of the poem quite well, and as all Limericks do, it ended humorously. Thank you for sharing your work. It was a pleasure to read it.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Haha very nice. I could follow the rhythm of the poem quite well, and as all Limericks do, it ended humorously. Thank you for sharing your work. It was a pleasure to read it.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Sir. You are too kind.
Comment from kiwisteveh
But there isn't any such place as Livonia..... just kidding!
Good solid entry for the contest... phonia may be a bit of a stretch but squeaks in. The meter is good (unusual for this contest) and the 'plot' holds together.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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But there isn't any such place as Livonia..... just kidding!
Good solid entry for the contest... phonia may be a bit of a stretch but squeaks in. The meter is good (unusual for this contest) and the 'plot' holds together.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from rouskin
Well penned poem in a difficult format Your picture complements the words very well Good luck to you in the contest and have a great weekend
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Well penned poem in a difficult format Your picture complements the words very well Good luck to you in the contest and have a great weekend
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from Kingsland
It is okay to make up words for a limerick. I have heard many limericks with made up words. This limerick is well written and very enjoyable. It was a very creative piece of writing... John
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It is okay to make up words for a limerick. I have heard many limericks with made up words. This limerick is well written and very enjoyable. It was a very creative piece of writing... John
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Imagine him being so involved in his phone call that he doesn't have the sense to get out of the rain! LOL This was a fun read. Good luck in the contest.
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Imagine him being so involved in his phone call that he doesn't have the sense to get out of the rain! LOL This was a fun read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from barleygirl
This limerick is a hot mess, with regards to syllable count. But it's also irresistible, with regards to message. It's a great effort & it would only take a little tweaking to get the syllables to match the required format. Thanks for sharing.
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This limerick is a hot mess, with regards to syllable count. But it's also irresistible, with regards to message. It's a great effort & it would only take a little tweaking to get the syllables to match the required format. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from writer4u
I really like this. When I read it I laughed. You have a great sense of humor that is shown through your writing. keep going!
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I really like this. When I read it I laughed. You have a great sense of humor that is shown through your writing. keep going!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
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Your welcome :)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Looks like someone deducted a star because of "phonia," which I find okay for a limerick. This one is well written rhythmically, the rhymes are clever and the point is funny. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Looks like someone deducted a star because of "phonia," which I find okay for a limerick. This one is well written rhythmically, the rhymes are clever and the point is funny. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from Gargantuan2
the second line is 10 sylables, other than that I loved it! I hope you do okay in the contest. This is an interesting one for humor is usually held in limericks, that's why I like reading them so much :)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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the second line is 10 sylables, other than that I loved it! I hope you do okay in the contest. This is an interesting one for humor is usually held in limericks, that's why I like reading them so much :)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the positive review.