The Animal Doctor
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Comment from lindalcreel
Margaret should have thought about Nathaniel before she married the baron. Now, she thinks being the spoiled girl that she is, that she can just come back into his life and he will forget about Grace and the baby. I know she is up to no good, but we'll see just how far she'll go, and if Nate will fall victim and destroy everyone who cares about him.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Margaret should have thought about Nathaniel before she married the baron. Now, she thinks being the spoiled girl that she is, that she can just come back into his life and he will forget about Grace and the baby. I know she is up to no good, but we'll see just how far she'll go, and if Nate will fall victim and destroy everyone who cares about him.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Yep, you nailed it. Smile. This next chapter is going to be hard. I want to be true to the characters, but not disappoint my fans. Thank you for hanging in there with this story.
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My pleasure:)
Comment from mfowler
I'm new to the book, but I thoroughly enjoyed this snippet of life from the 1920's. You have encapsulated the time in so many details, but details which fill out and paint the narrative being played out. Your characters emerge immediately from the page, even the flitatious Margaret who enters only briefly. I love the characterisations of the black workers, and your descriptions of the vets routines are delightful You use dialogue with natural ease. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I'm new to the book, but I thoroughly enjoyed this snippet of life from the 1920's. You have encapsulated the time in so many details, but details which fill out and paint the narrative being played out. Your characters emerge immediately from the page, even the flitatious Margaret who enters only briefly. I love the characterisations of the black workers, and your descriptions of the vets routines are delightful You use dialogue with natural ease. Excellent work.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you mfowler so much. You have thoroughly reviewed my work and it is a pleasure to have you as a reviewer.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi amahra,
A scheming lady, an 'innocent' vet, a new mum and baby ... I sense a rough and rather tricky ride for the vet and his wife before this is over.
Nicely done, you've built up an interesting situation.
Patrick
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Hi amahra,
A scheming lady, an 'innocent' vet, a new mum and baby ... I sense a rough and rather tricky ride for the vet and his wife before this is over.
Nicely done, you've built up an interesting situation.
Patrick
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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thank you, Patrick.
Comment from jadapenn
I enjoyed the chapter. I haven't read any of the previous chapters. This is a laid-back scene with no great conflict or tension. I smiled. Did Vets really go around in such fancy cars way back. I would have thought a truck was the thing to use. Well written. I didn't notice any spag. luv jada
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I enjoyed the chapter. I haven't read any of the previous chapters. This is a laid-back scene with no great conflict or tension. I smiled. Did Vets really go around in such fancy cars way back. I would have thought a truck was the thing to use. Well written. I didn't notice any spag. luv jada
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you jadapenn. Not all Vets, but Nathan is rich.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I like the tension in this chapter, and the rhythm of your well constructed work. This is a nicely done written that held my attention all the way through. Love the fantasy art work too.
Great job Amahara,
:)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I like the tension in this chapter, and the rhythm of your well constructed work. This is a nicely done written that held my attention all the way through. Love the fantasy art work too.
Great job Amahara,
:)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where margaret is going to be persistent in her pursuit of nathan and grace is comfortable about nathan's fidelity. nathan vows never to be alone with margaret
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where margaret is going to be persistent in her pursuit of nathan and grace is comfortable about nathan's fidelity. nathan vows never to be alone with margaret
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you for stopping by and reading my latest chapter.
Comment from darla1977
I was immediately caught up in this, I will have to read the rest! You are wonderful with descriptive words! The story is very well written, and presented beautifully! Great use of language for the different characters!
Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I was immediately caught up in this, I will have to read the rest! You are wonderful with descriptive words! The story is very well written, and presented beautifully! Great use of language for the different characters!
Well done!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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thank you darla. I'm so glad you told me what you liked about the writing. I really appreciate it.
Comment from kiwijenny
This is a great chapter with a lot of attention to detail . I love the description of the fat dog farting in the corner:o)........there is a typo...radient....should be radiant. :o) Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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This is a great chapter with a lot of attention to detail . I love the description of the fat dog farting in the corner:o)........there is a typo...radient....should be radiant. :o) Well done
God bless
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the read and for catching the typo. Bless you back.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hmmm ... trouble brewing in paradise! Never a dull moment for our handsome and now wealthy vet!
Poor Grace!
I'm hoping he sends Duchess Maggie packing.
Nice, Aunty. :)
xxx
Sonali
He hurried up the (staircase), squinting
"Good (m)orning, Joseph
Nathan eased (himself) onto the back seat. Joseph
doorway and blew her a kiss as the black and grey (1926) Cadillac sped off under a beautiful
Nathan was already looking over (the day's) schedule
and little Jenny's spaniel is well (overdue) for its litter."
fatigue, or just plain (overweight). If I told Jim Tucker
greeted Nathan with a wide smile, (and flour) all the way up to her elbows .. remove 'had'
Woman, keep you bloomers on, will ya'(?)"
I been bottle feedin' em'(,) though."
You sit down now(,) and eat your breakfast
brown eyes could see(,) (h)er pale cheeks flushed(,) and her pink lips in a sensuous
(B)ack at Ten Oakes, a confident Grace counted .. remove 'but' - try not to begin a sentence, particularly a new para, with 'but', 'and', etc.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Hmmm ... trouble brewing in paradise! Never a dull moment for our handsome and now wealthy vet!
Poor Grace!
I'm hoping he sends Duchess Maggie packing.
Nice, Aunty. :)
xxx
Sonali
He hurried up the (staircase), squinting
"Good (m)orning, Joseph
Nathan eased (himself) onto the back seat. Joseph
doorway and blew her a kiss as the black and grey (1926) Cadillac sped off under a beautiful
Nathan was already looking over (the day's) schedule
and little Jenny's spaniel is well (overdue) for its litter."
fatigue, or just plain (overweight). If I told Jim Tucker
greeted Nathan with a wide smile, (and flour) all the way up to her elbows .. remove 'had'
Woman, keep you bloomers on, will ya'(?)"
I been bottle feedin' em'(,) though."
You sit down now(,) and eat your breakfast
brown eyes could see(,) (h)er pale cheeks flushed(,) and her pink lips in a sensuous
(B)ack at Ten Oakes, a confident Grace counted .. remove 'but' - try not to begin a sentence, particularly a new para, with 'but', 'and', etc.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you, my dear. I'll go back over it.
Comment from seaglass
This is the first I've read of this book but I was able to catch the drift. I will try to catch more chapters. Questions: Is the setting America, I presume so because of the black servants and their dialog, however, we have no royalty so thought the "duchess" would make it England? Also, why would they name their baby after the women he is cheating with. It is skillfully written.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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This is the first I've read of this book but I was able to catch the drift. I will try to catch more chapters. Questions: Is the setting America, I presume so because of the black servants and their dialog, however, we have no royalty so thought the "duchess" would make it England? Also, why would they name their baby after the women he is cheating with. It is skillfully written.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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First, thank you so much, seaflass for taking the time to read and comment on my story. I really appreciate it. Now, for you questions: earlier chapters hold these answers. Margaret is not royalty, she just was pressured into marrying a Duke by her social climbing father. And Nathan was able to get away with naming his daughter Margaret because his mom's name is Margaret. Hope that clears things up.