Comment from
RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
Lovely piece of poetry in the form of 'A Triolet' fulfilling all the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme!
Simple and impressive wording.
Smooth and pleasant flow.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery and pictorial quality.
Good alliteration in grubby glasses;living life;butterflies and bees;running round
"Chasing butterflies and bees,
running round without a care.
Living life the way you please,
cherry blossom in your hair."
Excellent!
Good Luck!!
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)