The Trining
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "THE PAPPERING INCIDENT, ETC."A man must discover his identity and destiny.
21 total reviews
Comment from Loren (7)
Twists and turns of a Shakespearean play even with some of the melodrama with the possibility of Docktrex being exposed as a fraud. Intriguing dialogue that moves the story along with just enough of a hint of deception to keep the reader guessing and of course, reading : )
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Twists and turns of a Shakespearean play even with some of the melodrama with the possibility of Docktrex being exposed as a fraud. Intriguing dialogue that moves the story along with just enough of a hint of deception to keep the reader guessing and of course, reading : )
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Loren, you are so encouraging at a time I was feeling like I have to inject some action, just to keep the pages turning. Bless you, my friend. OMG!!! You caught me by surprise with the 6-er! Thank you so much!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Jay never know what you are going to come up next in your very interesting story
Glad you explained what ---
pappering means
continue on
Gert
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Hi Jay never know what you are going to come up next in your very interesting story
Glad you explained what ---
pappering means
continue on
Gert
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thank you for coming back. Honestly, I'm not taking roll, but I always get a kick out of having you come in and take a seat.
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You are welcome Jay
Drop by and take a look at my work if you get a chance.
Smiles
Gert
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Will do. BTW, why isn't it coming up on messages. I'm sure I have you favorited. If not it will be corrected.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good introduction that describes the atmosphere and sets the tone of this chapter. Good clear dialogue that display the emotion as well as what's going on. Good transition between events. Nice steady pace leading to an emotional conclusion.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Good introduction that describes the atmosphere and sets the tone of this chapter. Good clear dialogue that display the emotion as well as what's going on. Good transition between events. Nice steady pace leading to an emotional conclusion.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thank you, Righteous Riter, for stopping by and reading. Hope you catch Part 2. I hated to split the chapter up, but it would have been over 4,000 wds. Thanks again. I respect you as a writer.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh, I would hate to be cast into a place like that where I didn't understand life at all and the language was so weird. I liked your characters, they are believable and interesting, Giddy
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Oh, I would hate to be cast into a place like that where I didn't understand life at all and the language was so weird. I liked your characters, they are believable and interesting, Giddy
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Glad to have you back, Giddy. Thanks for reading and enjoying.
Comment from Zue65
Is Doctrex the jovial man, generous with his money that Klasco was talking about, or is he a modern man trapped in another alien space? The events in your story are so mysteriously woven that it is difficult for the readers to guess, which make your story more interesting. An excellent write. God bless.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Is Doctrex the jovial man, generous with his money that Klasco was talking about, or is he a modern man trapped in another alien space? The events in your story are so mysteriously woven that it is difficult for the readers to guess, which make your story more interesting. An excellent write. God bless.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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No, no, no, the man Klasco was referring to was one from the Far Northern Province who had infiltrated the Kabeezan Province. A spy. Thank you for your kind words and may God richly bless you, as well.
Comment from Liandra
Captivating - I'm learning as well as Doctrex, the different meanings behind the spoken word. There's a definite blending of two worlds or better still, dimensions. Am I right in thinking there has been a 'tear' in the dividing membrane?
This story is loaded with suspense, which is great!
:) Liandra
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Captivating - I'm learning as well as Doctrex, the different meanings behind the spoken word. There's a definite blending of two worlds or better still, dimensions. Am I right in thinking there has been a 'tear' in the dividing membrane?
This story is loaded with suspense, which is great!
:) Liandra
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Massive thanks for the 6 stars, Liandra! You read the chapter, didn't you, when he was pulled into the realm he now is in. I don't know whether you'd call that a tear or not. Wouldn't matter anyway; the membrane heals itself. Thank you again.
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You're welcome, my friend. I'm enjoying the adventure.
Liandra
Comment from Walter L. Jones
create, draw and pull, your world, flesh and flash, from earths center to heavens core, play with and form, you capture and hold me once again, thank you for inviting me to your tale..Walt
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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create, draw and pull, your world, flesh and flash, from earths center to heavens core, play with and form, you capture and hold me once again, thank you for inviting me to your tale..Walt
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Spoken like a real poet, Walter. Thank you for coming back to The Trining.
Comment from c_lucas
Learning a new culture and language isn't easy. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Learning a new culture and language isn't easy. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you, Charley for reading this.
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You're welcome, Jay. Charlie
Comment from dreamin'
"You know--how they papper?" Oh my God, I love that. Jay, I'm still thinking about the last chapter, and what it was about it that I just couldn't get into. Maybe it was the quick move to let Klasco everything, and then not really know how to explain it. I think I was struggling along with him.
This chapter is flowing a lot better, and I am in love with all the new words I'm learning. I want to be a Kabeezan and speak Grosslin!
You must be taking your time reading before sending out, because once, again, there are no edits on this. Anxiously waiting for part deux of this chapter.
In the meantime, I am going back to the previous chapter to see if I can pinpoint what bugged me. I've actually been thinking about this since I posted my review, so there is something I missed or misinterpreted.
thanks for a great read,
Debbie
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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"You know--how they papper?" Oh my God, I love that. Jay, I'm still thinking about the last chapter, and what it was about it that I just couldn't get into. Maybe it was the quick move to let Klasco everything, and then not really know how to explain it. I think I was struggling along with him.
This chapter is flowing a lot better, and I am in love with all the new words I'm learning. I want to be a Kabeezan and speak Grosslin!
You must be taking your time reading before sending out, because once, again, there are no edits on this. Anxiously waiting for part deux of this chapter.
In the meantime, I am going back to the previous chapter to see if I can pinpoint what bugged me. I've actually been thinking about this since I posted my review, so there is something I missed or misinterpreted.
thanks for a great read,
Debbie
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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You do my soul good, Debbie! If you find out what it is in the previous chapter, please let me know. I'm juggling a lot of intelligent concepts and my mind isn't up to it! I feel like such a fraud. Sound familiar?
Comment from Ritsal
This is an interesting chapter with the introduction of pappering. The action slows down allowing us to catch our breath. Can't wait for the next chapter in this epic adventure. Just a couple edits:
...Robbers would be also be Kazbeezans--need to swat a be
It was probably for fire wood or food --firewood
Best wishes,
Rita
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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This is an interesting chapter with the introduction of pappering. The action slows down allowing us to catch our breath. Can't wait for the next chapter in this epic adventure. Just a couple edits:
...Robbers would be also be Kazbeezans--need to swat a be
It was probably for fire wood or food --firewood
Best wishes,
Rita
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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I'm so happy you liked this, Rita. I'm gonna go right in and make the corrections, while it's still a new post. Thanks.
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You're welcome. :)