The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Lucy Makes the Right Moves"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
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Comment from Tatarka2
I thought this chapter was great. The plot is moving along nicely, and, as you almost always do, you have shown, rather than told, us what the characters are thinking and feeling. This seems like an intriguing setup for whatever is to come. Congrats on getting Lucy "inside" in such a believable way. It's exciting by itself, and really moves the plot along, as I said.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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I thought this chapter was great. The plot is moving along nicely, and, as you almost always do, you have shown, rather than told, us what the characters are thinking and feeling. This seems like an intriguing setup for whatever is to come. Congrats on getting Lucy "inside" in such a believable way. It's exciting by itself, and really moves the plot along, as I said.
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Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Hi. I'm hopelessly behind, so I'm just going backwards! Delighted you liked this. I think everyone is where I want them now. Lucy turned out to be a stronger character than I envisioned at first. Glad you like her too. mikey
Comment from Michaelk
Good chapter. Tense as usual. Maybe a little levity to lighten things up before the tension gets too much. I think bard would be perfect for that. It would be interesting to see diamond do something goofy to go along with bard, it would be unexpected.
Your scene with tenaya in the compound was fantastic.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Good chapter. Tense as usual. Maybe a little levity to lighten things up before the tension gets too much. I think bard would be perfect for that. It would be interesting to see diamond do something goofy to go along with bard, it would be unexpected.
Your scene with tenaya in the compound was fantastic.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Glad you are liking it. The Bard should make an appearance in the next chapter. Trying to get him back in the middle. mikey