Venus and Aphrodite
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Comment from Chocolate Chip
I never thought the primal need for human connection could turn into a house of horrors. The truly frightening part of this experiment is the twins were created through one man's need to control his sexual desires. A wonderfully unique spin on the traditional horror story. I liked the way you used gore in the non-traditional sense. Bravo for pushing the envelope to make us as readers think!
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I never thought the primal need for human connection could turn into a house of horrors. The truly frightening part of this experiment is the twins were created through one man's need to control his sexual desires. A wonderfully unique spin on the traditional horror story. I liked the way you used gore in the non-traditional sense. Bravo for pushing the envelope to make us as readers think!
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from CR Delport
This is very well written and makes for a good story, one you can easily rework into a book. I think this should do well in this contest. Well done and good luck.
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This is very well written and makes for a good story, one you can easily rework into a book. I think this should do well in this contest. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from comanalbert
Amazing and wild. So real and possible! You have the imagination of Wilbur Smith and Hemingway put together. If they could know, both Greek and Romans will put a statue in Parthenon/Collosseum.
Great story, how do you come up with them?
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Amazing and wild. So real and possible! You have the imagination of Wilbur Smith and Hemingway put together. If they could know, both Greek and Romans will put a statue in Parthenon/Collosseum.
Great story, how do you come up with them?
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Thank you very much. I really appreciate the stars and the great review. The idea came from the picture of the twins, or one girl. She looked creepy and yet, innocently beautiful.
Comment from Michaelk
Excellent story. I was completely enthralled by it. Your characters were well done as well as your descriptions. Using sex as a weapon isn't a new concept but you've done it very well here. The fire scene was agonizing. Thinking about people that are so driven by must that they will continue to throw themselves at each other even when on fire is just painful to read. Great job. One small bit of SPAG. He backed out of the room, not baked. Good luck in the contest.
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Excellent story. I was completely enthralled by it. Your characters were well done as well as your descriptions. Using sex as a weapon isn't a new concept but you've done it very well here. The fire scene was agonizing. Thinking about people that are so driven by must that they will continue to throw themselves at each other even when on fire is just painful to read. Great job. One small bit of SPAG. He backed out of the room, not baked. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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Thank you very much, and good eye. I will fix that.
Comment from Delahay
This was such an interesting departure from what we normally think of as scary or evil. You depict a different kind of hell where people will happily run mindlessly towards a terrifying death through what is usually equated with pleasure and love. Enjoyable and creepy at the same time.
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This was such an interesting departure from what we normally think of as scary or evil. You depict a different kind of hell where people will happily run mindlessly towards a terrifying death through what is usually equated with pleasure and love. Enjoyable and creepy at the same time.
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Comment Written 29-May-2014
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Thank you very much.
