I, Man!
A man thinks himself a god...113 total reviews
Comment from Cajungirl
Fantastic, up until now Frankenstein didn't frighten me, but after reading this, I'll be sleeping with a night light. Good luck in the contest.
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Fantastic, up until now Frankenstein didn't frighten me, but after reading this, I'll be sleeping with a night light. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from Janet Foor
Great retelling of the Frankenstein story. Your artwork and presentation are incredible. Scary but incredible. I don't know why I seem to read your poetry late at night. I hope that I don't have a nightmare like Mary Shelly. Unless, of course, it results in another Frankenstein story. Haha.
Good work Dean and good luck in the contest.
Janet
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Great retelling of the Frankenstein story. Your artwork and presentation are incredible. Scary but incredible. I don't know why I seem to read your poetry late at night. I hope that I don't have a nightmare like Mary Shelly. Unless, of course, it results in another Frankenstein story. Haha.
Good work Dean and good luck in the contest.
Janet
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from prefabmouse
As always, you blew me away. You truly are my FAVORITE writer. I mean that sincerely, even above Stephen King, Piers Anthony and so many more that for the life of me I can not remember right now. I know you will go far as a writer, there are no doubts in my mind.
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As always, you blew me away. You truly are my FAVORITE writer. I mean that sincerely, even above Stephen King, Piers Anthony and so many more that for the life of me I can not remember right now. I know you will go far as a writer, there are no doubts in my mind.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from words
I enjoyed your poetic retelling of the Frankenstein story.
I also appreciate your author's notes.
I was not aware of the circumstances under which the story was created.
Love your images, they are fresh and graphic.
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I enjoyed your poetic retelling of the Frankenstein story.
I also appreciate your author's notes.
I was not aware of the circumstances under which the story was created.
Love your images, they are fresh and graphic.
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from DSMalott
This was deftly written.
Great rhythm and lilting cadence.
It was horror and a bit of humor and vivid detail along with great rhyming.
Dr. Frankenstein was described perfectly. And the lesson of not playing God well taken.
So well done.
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This was deftly written.
Great rhythm and lilting cadence.
It was horror and a bit of humor and vivid detail along with great rhyming.
Dr. Frankenstein was described perfectly. And the lesson of not playing God well taken.
So well done.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Yes, I certainly enjoyed the animations but it's your words that hold us there to keep on reading till the end, from the master's dusty volumes to - my son, you'd take my life.
Nicely, creepily told.
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Yes, I certainly enjoyed the animations but it's your words that hold us there to keep on reading till the end, from the master's dusty volumes to - my son, you'd take my life.
Nicely, creepily told.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Love your retelling of Frankenstein- probably my favorite movie monster. I have to be honest though, I really do not care for "yes, I man, and I am sin". That line comes too quick for me, more as a show than a tell, your editorial voice speaking for the monster. I don't think the monster would come to life with the immediate conception that all of man is sin and adding that component - for me- detracted from the terror of the moment, the monster more philosophic at this point than believable, a mouthpiece. I think you could achieve the same with better effect with "Yes...I sin."
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Love your retelling of Frankenstein- probably my favorite movie monster. I have to be honest though, I really do not care for "yes, I man, and I am sin". That line comes too quick for me, more as a show than a tell, your editorial voice speaking for the monster. I don't think the monster would come to life with the immediate conception that all of man is sin and adding that component - for me- detracted from the terror of the moment, the monster more philosophic at this point than believable, a mouthpiece. I think you could achieve the same with better effect with "Yes...I sin."
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Thanks, ravenblack, and based upon your kind suggestion, I did make a change to the ending line. When you have the time, let me know what you think. I do value your opinions, as you well know.
Comment from faragon
An interesting take on the Frankenstein story. I liked it very much. The poem you used to convey that thought was very easy to read and it's meaning came shining through! Vey well done! Jane
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An interesting take on the Frankenstein story. I liked it very much. The poem you used to convey that thought was very easy to read and it's meaning came shining through! Vey well done! Jane
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from theonewholoves
amazing poem and mostly poetic language
best of luck in the contest
love the pictures you chose and the animation
well done
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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amazing poem and mostly poetic language
best of luck in the contest
love the pictures you chose and the animation
well done
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, theonewholoves. I truly appreciate you stopping by to leave your comments, and I'm very grateful.
Comment from Ekim777
From the first words, I recognized it was a "Frankenstein" revisited where we are fed much more details to relish. It seems that when we confront death, the unanswerable question, we cannot play God and elevate that final state but only reduce it to ashes and dust. Still the poem has a certain, sordid aesthetic to it. If it lacks anything, it lacks humanity. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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From the first words, I recognized it was a "Frankenstein" revisited where we are fed much more details to relish. It seems that when we confront death, the unanswerable question, we cannot play God and elevate that final state but only reduce it to ashes and dust. Still the poem has a certain, sordid aesthetic to it. If it lacks anything, it lacks humanity. -Ekim777
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2014
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As was intended, Ekim777. Any resurrection of dead tissue reanimated by man's own hand, without God's divine influence, would be totally devoid of any humanity whatsoever.
Thanks for your kind review.