Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Fragrance of First Night"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Lacy Mariah
Great poem. I loved the attention to detail in every line. I think you really created a mood and made the reader feel every word.
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Great poem. I loved the attention to detail in every line. I think you really created a mood and made the reader feel every word.
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thank you
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
NICE ROMANTIC POEM WITH LOVELY RED ROSE IMAGE TO GO WITH IT.I IMAGINE THIS WAS DESCRIBING A WEDDING NIGHT BECAUSE OF THE SUBTLE REFERENCE TO A RING OF GOLD AND THEN TO SUBMISSION LATER ON IN THE POEM.I LIKED IT. I STRUGGLED TO UNDERSTAND WHAT THE AUTHOR MEANT BY LUSTS FIRST LOVE IN THE LAST VERSE THOUGH..BUT THEN SOMETHINGS ARE MEANT TO BE FIGURED OUT NOT UNDERSTOOD.BEAUTIFUL POEM.WELL DONE.
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NICE ROMANTIC POEM WITH LOVELY RED ROSE IMAGE TO GO WITH IT.I IMAGINE THIS WAS DESCRIBING A WEDDING NIGHT BECAUSE OF THE SUBTLE REFERENCE TO A RING OF GOLD AND THEN TO SUBMISSION LATER ON IN THE POEM.I LIKED IT. I STRUGGLED TO UNDERSTAND WHAT THE AUTHOR MEANT BY LUSTS FIRST LOVE IN THE LAST VERSE THOUGH..BUT THEN SOMETHINGS ARE MEANT TO BE FIGURED OUT NOT UNDERSTOOD.BEAUTIFUL POEM.WELL DONE.
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thank you
Comment from eiman qazi
Very well done.The poem really depicts your emotions and and it is overwhelmingly sweet.Really impressed by your writing.Good luck.
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Very well done.The poem really depicts your emotions and and it is overwhelmingly sweet.Really impressed by your writing.Good luck.
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thanks
Comment from flylikeaneagle
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I can see why this is recognized as best. Love the rose and the image of love. I like the whispers of love and the intimacy of marriage with the gold ring on finger. flylikeaneagle
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gw:
I can see why this is recognized as best. Love the rose and the image of love. I like the whispers of love and the intimacy of marriage with the gold ring on finger. flylikeaneagle
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Again thank you
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Again thank you for this
Comment from NicciFaye
From kisses all so true....supberly beautiful in thought and emotion. A wonderful poem. I definetly enjoyed reading this...inspiring and simple rhyming in the right places. Not to much and not too little. Just right. Perfect.
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From kisses all so true....supberly beautiful in thought and emotion. A wonderful poem. I definetly enjoyed reading this...inspiring and simple rhyming in the right places. Not to much and not too little. Just right. Perfect.
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Thank you
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Thank you
Comment from DanielEkine
The intimacy in this author's work is remarkable. It's subliming from the first word to its great ending. A unique free verse work. I really like these lines, "How sublime your body yearned for endless love, the awe of all submission,
Whisper of love so entangled the night, reflect our soul's condition,"
Beautiful flow.
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The intimacy in this author's work is remarkable. It's subliming from the first word to its great ending. A unique free verse work. I really like these lines, "How sublime your body yearned for endless love, the awe of all submission,
Whisper of love so entangled the night, reflect our soul's condition,"
Beautiful flow.
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Thank you again for this
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Again thank you for this
Comment from Jackarrie
A very beautiful poem, the deep yearnings for each other is very well expressed,
I love this line
Our bodies charged from endless tease, this first night love with you,
the anticipation is a very sensual feeling. Your imagery is also great.
Well written, well done. good luck in the contest. Mary
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A very beautiful poem, the deep yearnings for each other is very well expressed,
I love this line
Our bodies charged from endless tease, this first night love with you,
the anticipation is a very sensual feeling. Your imagery is also great.
Well written, well done. good luck in the contest. Mary
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Thank you
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Thank you Mary
Comment from ruzu27
Wow, this is a very beautiful poem, I like it very much.
It is an interesting topic, as we are celebrating our 50th wedding anniversary. It is a wonderful feeling to know you still love and are loved and can fully rely on the other.
My very best wishes for the conest.
Ruth
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Wow, this is a very beautiful poem, I like it very much.
It is an interesting topic, as we are celebrating our 50th wedding anniversary. It is a wonderful feeling to know you still love and are loved and can fully rely on the other.
My very best wishes for the conest.
Ruth
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Thanks Ruth
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Thanks Ruth
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You are most welcome.
Comment from jmdg1954
Cleanly, sensual poem about making love with that special someone on the first night.
Smooth and a clean flow of words made for a gratifying journey. John
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Cleanly, sensual poem about making love with that special someone on the first night.
Smooth and a clean flow of words made for a gratifying journey. John
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Thanks John
Comment from Jay Squires
This is such a lush poem, a testament of your love, I want to read it uncritically, again and again, but I always come back to the declension of "lie" and it coils back on grammar.
LOL, if you want your tenses to be correct, and why wouldn't you, A ring of gold LIES on your hand (if indeed you want it in the present tense). A redeeming fact is a ring that "lies" does not throw your meter into the briar patch.
Your poem IS lovely -- probably lovlier without the Grammar Police about to read you your Mirandas.
Blessings, friend.
Jay
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This is such a lush poem, a testament of your love, I want to read it uncritically, again and again, but I always come back to the declension of "lie" and it coils back on grammar.
LOL, if you want your tenses to be correct, and why wouldn't you, A ring of gold LIES on your hand (if indeed you want it in the present tense). A redeeming fact is a ring that "lies" does not throw your meter into the briar patch.
Your poem IS lovely -- probably lovlier without the Grammar Police about to read you your Mirandas.
Blessings, friend.
Jay
Comment Written 06-Aug-2014
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Thanks jay in English it's lay I am british not American but thanks for reading